QUOTE(scidea @ Jan 28 2025, 09:53)
Is this translation correct? Its trying to describe several blowjob techniques that sounds a bit complicated,so I'm a bit unsure how to translate it
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3. 精子媚び舐め
射精中に更に精子を 出してもらうために 出口を舐めまわして ペニスに媚びる技。
TL:
3. Sperm Pleasing Licking
A technique to please the penis by licking around the penis's exit to coax out more semen during ejaculation
I feel that a literal translation like "Sperm Pleasing Licking" doesn't seem suitable for accurately conveying what the technique tries to achieve, because the technique isn't really about pleasing the sperm?
Some possible options might be:
1. "Ejaculation-Enhancing Licking"
- General name, but very easy for readers to understand. But ejaculations can be "enhanced" in various ways such as length and intensity, so this doesn't specify it's the volume of the sperm ejaculated that is increased.
2. "Ejaculate-Increasing Licking"
- Technically very accurate. "Ejaculate" is not only a verb, but is also the noun for the substance that is "ejaculated." In this case, the sperm. But readers in general likely to be more familiar with the word "ejaculate" as a verb, so this option requires more effort from readers.
3. "Sperm-Increasing Licking"
- A slightly more general name but maybe more "erotic" since it includes the word "sperm." Again, it's a more general name because readers won't be sure what sperm is being referred to (Sperm in the balls? Sperm coming out?) until they read the longer description.
4. "Sperm-Enticing Licking"
- Incorporates the idea of 媚び from the original name.
5. "Sperm-Baiting Licking"
- Incorporates the idea of 媚び from the original name.
I think one of 3, 4 or 5 would be the best. But your choice may depend on the translated names you choose for other techniques in this work as well, because you might not want the names to be too similar.
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6. 喉奥ホールド
雄のペニスの「奥」を意識すると 射精しやすくなる性質を利用し、 喉奥で締めあげてトドメの射精を誘発する技。
TL:
6. Deep Throat Hold
By taking advantage of the fact that a man's penis tends to ejaculate easier when he is aware of its "depth", this technique tightens the back of the throat to induces a final ejaculation.
Source:
https://e-hentai.org/g/2561247/94867f0eed/Just some suggestions for the description of the second technique.
1. This technique takes advantage of the fact that a man's penis tends to ejaculate more easily when
it feels that
it has gone
as deep as possible, and involves tightening the back of the throat to induce a final ejaculation.
2. This technique takes advantage of the fact that a man's penis tends to ejaculate easier when
he is aware that
he has gone
deep inside, and involves tightening the back of the throat to induce a final ejaculation.
This post has been edited by rinruririn: Jan 28 2025, 08:41
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