[X] My Assistant

Yay (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

(the biggest thing is "Jin" -> "Yin").

Things like monster names (jin monster / yin monster) I have to take the translator's word for whatever he says to translate it as, since I've no clue myself and I haven't read the entire series back to front (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

A lot for pages 6 and 7 were already changed for better grammatical structuring but I guess I missed some, pages 2X / 6 / 7 were done last though so I wouldn't be surprised if they had the most mistakes, was around 2am when I did those.

I'm pretty sure I still have the photoshop files, will fix those when I wake up properly.

This post has been edited by KCzz15: Jul 27 2012, 11:38

Sent the revised version of c25 to red.

A few of the suggested changes haven't been implemented as I don't agree with them, but most of them have.

 pink26.txt ( 5.26k ) Number of downloads: 23

firejiki, I'm not sure how often you're around, so I'm just going to fix what I think really needs fixing in your script below (I take a minimalist approach to revisions), and if you want to, then you can change whatever I wrote to sound however you want. Anywhere that I made little changes (mostly grammar or punctuation stuff), I just bolded the line, and you can compare that line with the original to see exactly what I changed, if you want. For any line I made bigger changes to, I put ** at the beginning of the line and copied the original to the very bottom of this post, below the revised script, and explained my reasons.

If you want me to do anything different, like not make any changes without you approving it, just say so. Or if you don't care, then I'll only post the fixed version next time, without any markings or explanations.

Pink ch26
❤
Page 25
空白
Page 26
1
BEGIN ADVENTURE

2
Shioka city

3
Bolg's shop

Page 27
1
Come everyone, eat as much as you desire.

2
BUBBLE That looks delicious.

BUBBLE Wow, there is meat, meat!!

3
**It looks like it'll suit my tastes.

Gods, thank you for blessing me with this meal.

4
My granddaughter owes you her life.
Now then, go ahead and eat.

Anne, Maruchi, both of you should thank them too!

5
Thank you very much for saving me...

Well, If you don't mind could you tell me your names?

Page 28
1
My name is Santa, and this is my slave...

I'm Pink. ❤

2
My name is Delta!

They call me Maize, a priest.

3
**We just happened to run into you guys while you were being attacked in the middle of our journey, that's all.

4
Is that so? If you would like to you can stay here tonight...

5
BUBBLE Onii-chan, you guys are strong, you slashed that monster in a blink of time...

SFX *suddenly*

Page 29
1
Me too, once I grow up, I'll become a warrior and I'll slash monsters as well.

Maruchi, that's impossible for you.

2
Don't get me wrong, you wouldn't want to become a warrior like Santa.

If you do then you will make bunches of enemies.

3
Delta, you bastard.
What are you saying so selfishly?

But that is the truth, nyaa.

4
BUBBLE You, shut up!

BUBBLE It hurts

SFX *wack*

5

OUT OF BUBBLE thief!!

BUBBLE
Well, that's how it is.
When you get hungry you just go to other's people farms to snatch their crops,
when a thug comes to a city, you rob them and take money for yourself, etc.

BUBBLE
You keep on fighting with the weakest monsters that you can find to get points.
For those reasons, I'm embarrassed to travel together with you.



Page 30
1
Shut uuup!!
Mind your own business!

2
By the way, what were you doing at that dangerous place?

3
We were going back from restocking goods.
he he he. That's because we are in the shopping business.

4
These kids' parents were killed by a yin monster.
Right now they are helping me, an old man.

You can leave the trading business up to me.

5
You see, even though he is so young, he is so dedicated.
Unlike a certain someone.

6

Delta, why are you making those comments?

It's just how it is.

Page 31

1
**BOX Bolg, you said?
You just mentioned a yin monster.
Could you tell me more about it? I'm interested in hearing about it.

2
BOX Yeah, alright.
In the past there were some monsters around here, but this place was still peaceful, but ...

BOX At some point monsters that were mingled with humans began appearing.
I don't know who first said it, but those are yin monsters.

3
**BOX Just like these kids' parents, many townspeople fell prey to the monsters and became one of them.

BOX This time was called "the end of our city". Look over there, you can see a splendid mansion there.

Page 32
1
TXT
The feudal lord that is living there managed to gather soldiers, from somewhere, to come to our aid.

TXT
Thanks to him and his army, the city was saved, somehow.
2
BOX
Only because the feudal lord stays here, this city has returned to its former glory.

BOX
However, it looks like the yin monsters that are still alive wander aimlessly around the city attacking travelers!

3
BOX
That is an interesting story.

4
BOX
What is the name of the feudal lord?

Page 33
1
BOX It's Labia-sama.

2
BOX He is not a member of a royal family from around here. Hmm.

3
BOX
The city seems to be quite busy. Is something going on?

4
BOX 1a
The "knights' festival", that happens once a year, is taking place right now.

BOX 1b
Santa-san, would you like to participate?

5

BOX
participate?

BOX
There's a martial arts tournament.

Page 34
1
BOX This festival that occurs once a year serves multiple purposes. It gives a chance for Labia-sama to judge the condition of our city, promote knights and hold a tournament.

BOX Santa-san, if you were to participate you would win for sure!

2
Is...
Is that so?

3
**Flattery will get you anywhere, huh......

4
BOX What should I do?

BOX The winner will get an amazing reward!

5
Hey!
Don't cling to Santa so much!

6
Oh, are you jealous?

Page 35

1
SFX *buzz*

2

3

4
Hey, Santa.
**I don't like that Anne girl.


Page 36
1
BOX Pink.
What, are you jealous?

BOX
Huh.
Santa, you meanie.

SFX x2 *suck*

2
**BOX Take this!

3
BOX
Aah, idiot! It hurts when you bite!

BOX Be more gentle!

4
SFX Aaahh

BOX yeess

5
**SFX *om*

6
**SFX x2 *lick*

BOX Does it feel goooood?

Page 37
1
SFX x2 *jolt*

BOX ugh

2
SFX *jolt*

3
BOX aah, it stained my clothes.

4
BOX hurry up and undress!

BOX yep

5
SFX *reach*

Page 38
1

2
BOX Pink, it has been some time since we did it.

BOX ahn ❤

3

SFX *chime*

4
SFX *rub*

BOX It's overflowing.

SFX ahn *❤*

Page 39
1
BOX Santa, hurry!

2
*creamy*

3
**BOX Here!

SFX *thud*

4
Aaah

5
SFX x2 *gsh*

Page 40
1
BOX haa

SFX x2 *tug*

BOX haa

2
SFX x3 *vigorous motion*

3
SFX x4 *squish*

4
SFX x2 *jupu*

BOX Aah. Santaa, great...

Page 41
1
BOX nyaan

**SFX *lift*

BOX nyaan

2

SFX x3 *shake*

BOX erk!

3
SFX x2 *twitch*

4
BOX uff

SFX x2 *jolt*

5

SFX x4 *jolt*

BOX ughn

BOX uhn

Page 42
1
BOX Ah

BOX aaah

2
SFX x2 *drip*

Page 43
1
SFX x2 *zzz*

2

3

BOX ......

4

TXT Aah
Aaahh

5
SFX *rustle*

6
BOX .........

Page 44

1
SFX *reach*

2
BOX Aah

SFX *crumpling*

3
SFX *squeeze*

4
BOX uhhn

BOX Aah

5
BOX Sa...
Santa-sama

6
SAVE GAME
DRAGON PINK XXVI/END

Page 27
3
will it suit mine tastes?
She's actually not asking a question here, just making a statement. "It looks like it'll suit my tastes."

Page 28
3
And yet again, during our journey we saved people from being attacked by monsters.
This one came out pretty inaccurate...'tamatama' is just [www.csse.monash.edu.au] "by chance"...it's not "people" in general, he's talking specifically about running into the siblings (and he doesn't technically say they "saved" them).

Page 31
1
BOX Bolg, just who are you?
That's not what she's saying. [www.csse.monash.edu.au] 'toyara' is basically just uncertainty. "Bolg, you said?" works well.

3
BOX At lot of children become orphans, after their parents had became victims to those monsters and they were transformed into their companions.
There's nothing about orphans. The part about parents is just basically saying many people met the same fate as Anne/Maruchi's parents.

Page 34
3
Nothing good will come from complementing him that much...
Literally she's saying, "Flatter it, and even a something-or-other will climb a tree, huh?", where "something-or-other" is usually "a pig". So what she means is actually kind of the opposite of the line you wrote (something will come of it). As far as translating that goes, then...something like "Flattery will get you anywhere, huh?" works.

Page 35
4
Do you think that I'm hated by the Anne girl?
She's actually saying, "I don't like that Anne girl."

Page 36
2
BOX aiiee!!
That's not what 'ei' is here. I don't think I've ever seen it used for a scream, really; but here, it has the second meaning shown [thejadednetwork.com] here, so a better translation in this case is "Take this!".

5
SFX *trotting*
That's very much not trotting, here...in this case, it's simply her putting her mouth around him. So...*om* works well enough, as far as I'm concerned.

6
SFX x2 *roll*
Just *lick* works better for 'rero' in this case (or really, in most porn situations).

Page 39
3
BOX Look*
Just "Here!" works better in this case for 'hora'. (Kind of like it shows [eow.alc.co.jp] here.)

Page 41
1
SFX *gurgling*
'gaba' is basically just a big movement. *lift* or *raise* maybe, [thejadednetwork.com] something...

Editing bounties:
* 26: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=6198
* 27: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=6199

can you just post this update in the forum thread for others so they stop bothering me with questions? (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

I'm currently working on c26/c27, I'm just pacing myself so that I don't burn out.

If there's some sort of a big need for it then I can rush it, but it's not terribly advisable. (I am however, fully open to large cash/hath bribes)

c25 was done in a day because I'd not done any typesetting in a while so it was fun to do, and more to the point it was mostly action rather than pages and pages of people talking that requires more redraws than I'm really comfortable with.
(I'm a veteran typesetter and a novice cleaner, but I've never actually learned redrawing so it's tediously slow for me.)

This post has been edited by KCzz15: Aug 9 2012, 15:13

Page 36

I meant to ask this previously, but page 36 panel 2, there's a sound effect that's untranslated - what should I put there?

Ummm....chomp, I guess.

firejiki hasn't been on in over a week, but that was also sometime after my previous post, so he should have been able to respond if he wanted to...so I'm just going to continue with the QC in the simplest way possible for me: just posting the end product. If anyone cares about the differences, you should be able to do a more or less side-by-side comparison easily enough.

 pink27.txt ( 4.25k ) Number of downloads: 13

So...proofread version of Episode 27 attached.
 pr_pink27.txt ( 4.21k ) Number of downloads: 28


This post has been edited by PeopleDon'tDanceNoMore: Aug 11 2012, 07:42

Update time (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

I'm both very nearly done with c26, and not at the same time, because I finally (sorta) remembered how to do cleaning properly and I'll probably go back to my previous pages in order to "fix" them.

[internetfreaks.org] RAW page
[internetfreaks.org] What I've been using for "clean" pages previously
[internetfreaks.org] What my clean pages look like now
I'm still not happy with version 2 yet, especially the last panel, but I could probably fiddle with the settings for another few hours and still not remember or stumble upon the settings combination that I need, so if any of you are familiar with Topaz denoise / cleaner, I'd appreciate some help and advice (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

One other thing:
Are there any experienced redrawers present?
I've not touched panel 1 of page 32 yet because it ideally needs redrawing and I never actually learned how to do that properly, would anybody care to try before I go screwing it up? (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)
[internetfreaks.org] The page is here

This post has been edited by KCzz15: Aug 16 2012, 02:18

After about 60 versions or so of the same page, [internetfreaks.org] here's my best attempt.

I'm still not absolutely happy with it and think there's room for improvement, but I could keep changing the settings by 0.01 in different ways for another week and not get exactly what I want, without either a little advice from a master cleaner or a miracle.

c26 will be delayed at least until I go and do this for every page including c25, I hope nobody minds (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

This post has been edited by KCzz15: Aug 13 2012, 22:15

Looks great to me (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

I think it will do, no need for perfection... it is also in the eye of the beholder, so...

I think it will do, no need for perfection... it is also in the eye of the beholder, so...

I agree that good is "good enough", I also agree that it's pretty much a user to user thing and that there's a thousand different versions of "good".

The problem is that perfection *does* exist and I've tasted it and want to acquire it somehow, have a look at what I mean:

Somehow there exists the ability to turn this [internetfreaks.org] RAW image, into this [internetfreaks.org] absolutely flawlessly clean image in under 20 minutes with next to no inking.

I am convinced that the ability to get tones that utterly perfect across the whites, black and greys at the same time while retaining pretty much 100% of even the smallest details, can only be witchcraft acquired by selling your soul to a devil. Though, if selling a small piece of my soul got me the ability to do that for any RAW pic at all then it would completely be worth it.

Still, I'm settling with "good", at the very least for now. I'm done fully (re)cleaning c26, still have c25 to do, typesetting for 2 more pages of c26, the redraw on page 32 still and a credits page for c26.

This post has been edited by KCzz15: Aug 16 2012, 02:29

c25 + c26 done and sent to red for inspection / upload.

Those redraws are a real pain for me, honestly I'm gonna want a little something extra hath or credits wise, if not for those ones then at least for future redraws. I really had to go out of my way to get everything looking as nice as it now does <.<

Take a look for yourselves though and see if it was worth it or not. I think it was.

This post has been edited by KCzz15: Aug 21 2012, 18:18

Which redrawn pages were the most difficult? If you tell us how you do them, perhaps somebody can suggest a better way.

Which redrawn pages were the most difficult? If you tell us how you do them, perhaps somebody can suggest a better way.

Suggesting a better way won't fix the fact that I never learned how to redraw, back when I was an editor.
The QCer used to take care of it for us.

I'm not sure what typical bounties for editing are on E-Hentai. I was under impression that this project currently has them on the high end of Hath/Credit scale, compared to the rest. But, since the interest in the project seems to have died down, and Credits/Hath on my account still go up, why not. I've upped the bounty on 27, since 25/26 bounties are already closed.

So, what translation/editiing bounties do we have out for this project now? If I see correctly, no translation bounties, and one accepted editing bounty for chaprets 27? Are there no more chapters after 27?

I'm not sure what typical bounties for editing are on E-Hentai. I was under impression that this project currently has them on the high end of Hath/Credit scale, compared to the rest. But, since the interest in the project seems to have died down, and Credits/Hath on my account still go up, why not. I've upped the bounty on 27, since 25/26 bounties are already closed.

So, what translation/editiing bounties do we have out for this project now? If I see correctly, no translation bounties, and one accepted editing bounty for chaprets 27? Are there no more chapters after 27?

I'm pretty sure there's somewhere in the region of 7 or 8 more chapters after 27.

The existing bounties aren't bad, but redrawing takes a lot of time and making sure everything is as perfect as possible is very time consuming, but hey I don't mind since I'm a perfectionist. If any of you keep finding things to fix, I'll fix them as many times as is needed.

If you don't care about quality or redraws though, then 60 hath works just fine.

QC that remains undone...


**: find and revisit

Still-to-check vs raw: ep 32 (and extras at end)


GENERAL...

This appears to be a pervasive...issue. It looks like KCzz15 decided that all font in the jagged (yelling/excited) bubbles should be bold regardless of whether the font was actually bold in the raw. Sometimes this works alright, other times it's unnecessary and a bit distracting, IMO. Not to mention, you lose any distinction of which lines were actually bolded in the raw. Being so pervasive, though, I've decided to simply not worry about bolding anywhere, even the ones I think look most out of place. "Fixing" it would more or less require an entire re-editing. =/ So...this is just an FYI/FWIW, I guess.

EPISODE 26

(General)

Switch in previously provided corrected pages for the pages still containing mistakes in the current gallery. Corrected pages so far include [internetfreaks.org] 028.jpg, [internetfreaks.org] 029.jpg, and [internetfreaks.org] 036.jpg .

033.jpg

Santa's last bubble: "participate" should be split at one of these places: par/ti/ci/pate.

EPISODE 27

046.jpg

Santa's 1st bubble: final punctuation (".").

048.jpg

Santa's 1st bubble: final punctuation (".").

Anne's 1st bubble: the first sentence ("didn't you figure it out"...) should end with "?".

049.jpg

Maze's 1st bubble: "alright" should probably be split "al/right" so it can actually fit in the bubble.

053.jpg

Maruchi's 1st bubble: "Afterall" -> "After all"

Pink's 1st bubble: "thing" -> "things"

056.jpg

Anne's 1st bubble: is the same line as from the last bubble on the previous page. The correct line is "Santa-san, do your best tomorrow."

058.jpg

Maze's first line: -> "meet the landlord so easily." I should have caught that when I proofread it, don't know why I didn't. =/ (The lines (including Delta's before this) could be even more different, really, but I'm opting for minimal alteration of the script.)

EPISODE 28

066.jpg

"Start the Adventure" -> "Begin Adventure"

067.jpg

"It's fine if this rude person knows." -> "I shall take the price of your insolence out of your hide."

068.jpg

"My apologies, Delta-sama." -> "I wished to make amends."

069.jpg

This page has a different resolution than the other pages. (It appears to have only been cropped somewhat from the original raw page.)

073.jpg

2nd bubble (after "geh"): ..."I'm stuffed, "... -> ..."What a waste. "...

"I'd be fine with catching more." -> "We can always catch more."

075.jpg

The "But" at the beginning of "But it's pretty damn crowded." (by Santa) is not necessary.

076.jpg

4th bubble: "That looks like a"... -> "There's a"...

last bubble: "March" -> "Maruchi"

078.jpg

SFX "clip"/"clop" -> "claaang"/"clooong" (it's probably a big bell being rung)

079.jpg

Pink's 2nd bubble: "Why am I still going 'nya nya?!?'" -> "What are you two grinning for?!?"

084.jpg

The font in the last bubble could be somewhat bigger. That's a lot of white space. You could even perhaps hyphenate the "Nooooo" and make the font even bigger, or maybe even put it vertical...?

EPISODE 29

091.jpg

Minor: that split "Nooo/oo!!!" should probably be hyphenated...

097.jpg

Remove "a" in "That girl was a untouched."

101.jpg

"jii-chan"...? "nee-chan"? **

103.jpg

Either erase the text in Maruchi's thought bubble, or write "Equal" over it.

EPISODE 30

(General)

106: **nee-chan
109: **delta-hime

110.jpg

Could you possibly fit Labia's make first line split like ..."my /subor/dinate's"...? Having three hyphens in there is a bit much, so it would be nice to avoid that if possible. But if it is unavoidable, please split "subordinate" "sub/ordi/nate".

111.jpg

The 1st bubble should have a period at the end.

In the 2nd bubble, "unsightly" should be split "unsight/ly" (or you could do something like ..."(the) un/sightly /side"..., since you've got some vertical room).

112.jpg

**"born poor cat-girl"? (see: ch17, 016.jpg)

113.jpg

"I am not merely here to guide." -> "I am but your humble guide."

115.jpg

"Then I can trust you on this matter?" -> "Does that mean you've decided to trust me?"

117.jpg

Pink's unedited/untranslated bubble: "Hey, hey."

118.jpg

"It wouldn't do any good to fight the princess even if she had sold her." -> "It wouldn't do any good to fight the princess in her current state."

119.jpg

You've basically got the "*dramatically*" SFX (top-left) upside-down...rotate it 180 degrees and it should be much more readable.

EPISODE 31

(General)

A bunch of bubbles are missing punctuation at the end...
130.jpg: 1st bubble, "."
131.jpg: 2nd bubble, "."; last bubble, "!"
133.jpg: 2nd to last bubble, "."
136.jpg: 1st bubble, "." or "!"
137.jpg: 1st bubble, "."
138.jpg: all bubbles, "."
140.jpg: Delta, Maze, and Maruchi's bubbles, "."
143.jpg: last bubble, "."

128.jpg

Labia's 2nd bubble: "safetly" -> "safely"

129.jpg

Labia's bubble: "tournamant" -> "tournament"

131.jpg

Anne: "undersand" -> "understand." (with punctuation)

136.jpg

Technically, the first two bubbles should be switched. (Which is also easier to read correctly, IMO.)

142.jpg

"My armor's getting angry too!" -> "You little...Now I'm mad!"

EPISODE 32

145.jpg

This page is a different resolution than the rest.

148.jpg

Maruchi: "Your" -> "You're"

149.jpg

Santa's 2nd bubble: "concious" -> "conscious." (with punctuation)

Labia's 2nd bubble should also be punctuated ("!").

Labia's last 2 bubbles should actually be reversed.

150.jpg

"Slaveel" -> "the Slave Eel"

152.jpg

1st bubble: there should be a comma after "O gods of white".

153.jpg

Punctuation at the end of Delta's 2nd bubble (".").

155.jpg

1st bubble: "namevis" -> "name is"

Punctuation at the end of Labia's bubbles (".").

162.jpg

Punctuation at end of Anne's 1st bubble ("."), and a comma after "Pink".

163.jpg

"Slaveel" -> "Slave Eel"

EXTRAS (script)

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This post has been edited by PeopleDon'tDanceNoMore: Jan 19 2013, 18:11