So I did the translation in a more literal sense and everything in the Japanese version has been loyally translated. Feel free to have a read and throw me any comments you have. (IMG:[
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Personally I like translations that are more free and expressive though, like the one they did with the "official" version. I enjoy reading translations that are rather creative. There's people who translated things like Faust and Iliad into English, and still made each line rhyme. I doubt they translated those word-for-word, but when I read the English version I wouldn't worry about what the original phrases were exactly, as long as the general artistic idea is the same. I just need them to make the English lines sound good.
Script:
Pg05
SFX *beep*
Please choose your name and class
Name Santa
Class Hero
Name Bobo
Class Warrior
Name Pierce
Class Sorceress
Pg06
=What should I let her be?
Name
Class
=This is going to be exciting
=Ooh! This is it! This is what she’ll be!
=ge [note: as in the last two syllables of the word “Mage”. the Japanese here reads かい, which (from guessing) is the last two hiraganas of まほうつかい, the Mage class] Merchant *Slave* Bar [note: again, I am guessing the complete Japanese should read “barbarian”]
Name
Class *Slave*
=Wait a minute
=and her name will be Pink!
Name *Pink*
Class Slave
=Eeeehhn, you are mean
Pg07
Panel 1
SFX: *beep*
Adventure begins
Panel 2
SFX: Pa
SFX: *sob sob*
Panel 3
=Ah, Heroes, you have finally come my aid. Actually, there is a favour that I would like to ask you to do. I cannot explain my purpose, but
=Far West from here resides a Pink Dragon, and I would like you to bring me the Pink Sphere that the dragon treasures
Panel 4
=These are not much
SFX: Jala
=But please take them to cover the cost of your journey
Pg08
Panel 1
SFX: wai x 4 [note: if having trouble to make sense of, use “*chatter* x 4”]
Panel 2
=Uh oh, This is all we have left after purchasing three wooden swords.
SFX: kira [note: or *glimmer*]
Panel 3
=We can’t even stay in a inn with this.
=Fuwaa
Panel 4
SFX: doki [note: or *heart thumping*]
Panel 5
=Pink-chan, come over for a sec
SFX: *grab*
=Ahn, ouch
Pg09
Panel 1
=Ahn~you are so mean~
(text on shop plaque)
Item Shop
=Come again
=Hehehe, scored
Panel 2
=Baka!
=Give me my cloth back!
Panel 3
(kanji in black box)
Hentai Power 10
=Shut your arrogant mouth you slave
=He’s the worst jerk
=Agreed
=Ahn~
Pg10
Panel 1
I don’t want to be naked
Panel 2
SFX: pe
=Jeez, such a whiner
Panel 3
=Hn?
Panel 4
Rope
Panel 5
=I’ll give you clothing that suits you, Pink-chan
Panel 6
SFX: doki
Pg11
Panel 1
=Ah, Ahn
SFX: Giririri [or *tighten up*]
Panel 2
=Ahee~
=This is tight~
Pink has remembered the taste of the rope
Hentai Power 35
Panel 3
=Hahaha, you are going to wear this rope as your cloth from now on! You hear me!?
=Ahn
Pg12
Panel 1
=Hey, we haven’t got all day here. Hurry up and let’s start the journey.
SFX: *boin boin*
Panel 2
=Okay, right
=Alright, before that we’ll go to the inn
Panel 3
=We don’t know whether we’ll make it back alive
=and I don’t want to die a virgin
Panel 4
=Let’s do it and leave no regret!
(words above Pink’s head)
Ehhhn~
=Ahn~Help~
(Girl)
=He’s such an idiot!
(Guy)
=Agreed
Pg13
Panel 1
=Noooo
Panel 2
=No~I don’t want this~~~
=Stop, please~~~
Panel 3
SFX: *gulp*
Pg14
Panel 1
SFX: biku [note: or *twitch*]
=So, so this is the pussy…
Panel 2
=Nooo
Panel 3
SFX: *turn*
=Open it up more
Panel 4
=Ahn
Panel 5
=Kyaa~kawaii
SFX: *peel*
Panel 6
=it hurts
Panel 7
SFX: toro [note: or *drip*]
=Oh, it’s getting wet
Panel 8
=Nooo, don’t look
Panel 9
=Let’s see your little clit
Panel 10
=Ah x 2
Panel 11
SFX: *rub*
Panel 12
=Aahn
Pg15
Panel 1
=Woah~~~I can’t control myself anymore
SFX: pin pin
Panel 2
=Pink, eat my cock! now
SFX: bito [note: or *boin*]
Panel 3
=it’s disgusting~
Panel 4
=Mmhguu
=Shut up, no more whining, a slave only exists to serve
Pg16
Panel 1
=ooh……ugu ugugu
Panel 2
SFX: *twitch* x 2
=Hey, use your tongue more, not the teeth!
Panel 3
=I…I’m getting wet somehow
SFX: Kucha
SFX: *slimy*
Panel 4
=Bobo, give me your big cock
=Fuu
Panel 5
=Hahn <3
SFX: *thrust*
Pg17
Panel 1
=Ah, Ahee~
SFX: *splash splosh*
Panel 2
(words inside black box)
Pink has remembered the fellatio technique
=N~~~~N~~~~
=You’re doing a good job, Pink. Suck harder!
Panel 3
=Ooh, I’m cumming
Panel 4
=Don’t leave out a single drop, drink everything
SFX: *swallow* x 3
Pg18
Panel 1
=Ue…Uee…I’m feeling sick
Panel 2
=Shut up, the real deal is only starting
SFX: *Push*
=Hee…
Panel 3
SFX: *shove*
=Noooo
Panel 4
SFX: gu gu gu
=it hurts x 2
Panel 5
=Gyaa
Panel 6
=it hurts…noooo
SFX: *thrust*
Pg19
Panel 1
=it hurts
=Ahee
Panel 2
=It hurts, stop, ah
=Ah ah
Pg20
Panel 1
=Ah ah
Panel 2
=Hah, hee
Panel 3
=Hah x 2
=Bobo, great, you’re great
Panel 4
=Hah
=i…
=ikuu
Panel 5
=Hah
=Ku hah
Pg21
(top)
Aaah
(left)
Ikuu
(right)
Heee
Pg22
Panel 1
SFX: *squirt* x 2
Panel 2
SFX: byuu x 2
Panel 3
=hah x 4
=ah, that was great
Panel 4
=Hah……Sex feels totally awesome
=hah x 2
=I……I didn’t know it was this good. I’m going to keep doing it until my stamina runs out for today!
SFX: waku waku [note: or use *excited*]
Panel 5
=Kyaa
Pg23
Panel 1
=Pink, let’s have another shot!
SFX: *splash splosh*
=Yahn<3
=Ahn
Panel 2
=Ah
=Ahn
Panel 3
=Uga
=Pink! Why the hell are you the only one who levelled up?
=Baaka
(small text below panel 3)
She seemed to have made a bikini out of bed sheets
(text inside black box)
Game saved
(text below black box)
Dragon Pink 1/Over