[X] My Assistant

SS 12 complete
[www.mediafire.com] http://www.mediafire.com/?nlp1dzt3zzw1zl8
pw is
shiroiakuma

This post has been edited by ace_amuro: Oct 10 2012, 03:50

All right. Bloodmare, would you like a proofing bounty?

I'll consider it, but I can't seem to unlock the file. The password doesn't seem to want to work.

You are right, the password is incorrect.

I'll consider it, but I can't seem to unlock the file. The password doesn't seem to want to work.

now it works
[www.mediafire.com] http://www.mediafire.com/?nlp1dzt3zzw1zl8
pw is
shiroiakuma

furthermore I have the SS10 translation almost complete

This post has been edited by ace_amuro: Oct 10 2012, 03:55

Yay (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

Password is fine. As soon as I get a second opinion from someone (Bloodmare?) that the script is acceptable (given proofreading), I'll accept the bounty (bounties).

the proofreading bounty for both scrips is at https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=6511

the proofreading bounty for both scrips is at https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=6511

Upped it a bit... I think it shouldn't reach levels of bounty for translating, as I assume it's more of a general read-through and occasional comparison with the original text than trying to compare every text bubble... I'm not sure if we'd find anyone willing/having time to do as thorough a proofeeading as that.

Upped it a bit... I think it shouldn't reach levels of bounty for translating, as I assume it's more of a general read-through and occasional comparison with the original text than trying to compare every text bubble... I'm not sure if we'd find anyone willing/having time to do as thorough a proofeeading as that.

I'll take a look through it. I'll just over look the screams since i'm more than certain I can recognize them anyway if some are missing and focus on dialogue. Expect some results tomorrow.

Wait. Is this PR'ing for Ace's SS10 script?

This post has been edited by Super Shanko: Oct 11 2012, 21:26

Both. For now, 12, since 10 is not ready yet.

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Oct 11 2012, 21:59

Alright.... I went over it and for the most part it's fine and comprehensible. There were small minor fixes here and there but nothing serious except for these two lines I didn't wanna alter out of fear it'd give false info.

09.jpg
サターンに導かれるように　ホタルを伴って飛来したエリオスによって一時に助けられたが　今度は再びほたる
共々悪夢の幻影の中に閉じ込められてしまう
With the guide of Sailor Saturn, Elios came flying with Hotaru, helped Sailor Saturn at one time. But this time, Sailor Saturn and Hotaru were both trapped by the illusion of nightmare.

自らの戦士の力を逆にほたるに与える
She gave the power of Sailor Soldier to Hotaru conversely.

afterword
光　今回は久しぶりのコミケでの連続新刊となりました
Sawara: There are no two new Silent Saturn SS doujinshi in succession for a long time.

There might be some superficial changes when I do the edit, but it won't be significent.

-Script 2.0-
 SS12H.txt ( 17.66k ) Number of downloads: 10

I tried to fix it

09.jpg
サターンに導かれるように　ホタルを伴って飛来したエリオスによって一時に助けられたが　今度は再びほたる

共々悪夢の幻影の中に閉じ込められてしまう
With the guide of Sailor Saturn, Elios came flying with Hotaru, helped Sailor Saturn temporary. But next time, Sailor Saturn and Hotaru were both trapped by the illusion of nightmare.
(一時=temporary)

自らの戦士の力を逆にほたるに与える
She gave the power of Sailor Soldier to Hotaru, instead of assimilating Hotaru.
(maybe I should not simply use the word "conversely")

afterword
光　今回は久しぶりのコミケでの連続新刊となりました

OK this sentence means: this SS12, which was published in C76(Aug.2009) was right after the publication of SS11 in C75(Dec.2008). So they were in succession. But SS10 was published in サンクリ38(Feb.2008), then thre were no SS series doujinshi published in C74(Aug.2008). So SS10 and SS11 were not in succession.And also the same condition of the past SS doujin.
SO,
We have not published new SS series doujinshi in succession for a long time.

019.jpg
そんなに強く吸っちゃ～あ～
don't suck so strongly...ah..

This post has been edited by ace_amuro: Oct 12 2012, 01:32

SS10 completed
Attach here
 SS10.txt ( 21.45k ) Number of downloads: 9


This post has been edited by ace_amuro: Oct 13 2012, 22:21

I'm sorry for the late reply - other work caught up with me but I'm glad someone looked over that script.

And here it is.
 Silent_Saturn_SS_10_Translation_Script__revised_.rtf ( 43.68k ) Number of downloads: 4


Again, made small fixes here and there and corrected some lines that were just plain odd. There are some though that need a second look. Here's the lines that tripped me up some.

Furthermore, Sailor Moon and the outer Sailor Soldier (other soldier?), who invaded the Tent after the core Sailor Soldier, were unable to move forward because of the puppet doll made from the energy of the core Sailor Soldier.


Furthermore, this room is isolated from the outside world as an imaginary space. It corresponds to be inside my body

お前の本体も我が手中
your origin bady(?) is also under my control

当時は旬なネタだったんですが…ごめんねうめさん
it would be in fashion 1 year ago, I have to say sorry to ume

昔は大きいのが惑星それ以外は小惑星ですんでたのにね
the big ones are planet, other of them are asteroid, people satisfied it in the past

てゆーかここで手柄たてとかないと後々大変そうだしな
better to say we will in trouble if we don't make a feat

052
お前の本体もピンクの小娘も今頃は
both your original body and the pink girl are now
も…もうやめてぇ
stop it

053
わらわの与えた幻影の中で全てを搾り尽くされている頃よ
absorbed all of the energy in my illusion
(not sure if she's implying she took their energy or forced them to absorb it)

This post has been edited by Super Shanko: Oct 14 2012, 03:14

Furthermore, Sailor Moon and the outer Sailor Soldier, who invaded the Tent after the core Sailor Soldier, were unable to move forward because of the puppet doll made from the energy of the core Sailor Soldier.
(Uranus Neptune Pluto are the outer part of solar system, 外部太陽系戦士)

部屋は...我が体内に等しい
Furthermore, this room is isolated from the outside world as an imaginary space. Being in this room is equal to being in my body.
(being in the room means being in Nehalenia's body. Maybe you can think a better performance)

お前の本体も我が手中
your origin body is also under my control
(spell mis)

当時は旬なネタだったんですが…ごめんねうめさん
it would be timely 1 year ago, I have to say sorry to ume

昔は大きいのが惑星それ以外は小惑星ですんでたのにね
"the big ones are planet, other of them are asteroid",this definition satisfied people in the past

てゆーかここで手柄たてとかないと後々大変そうだしな
better to say we will in trouble if we can't do a feat now.

お前の本体もピンクの小娘も今頃は
both your original body and the pink girl are now
わらわの与えた幻影の中で全てを搾り尽くされている頃よ
running out of the energy in my illusion
(Nehalenia squeezed the energy out of Hotaru &Chibi-usa)

Furthermore, Sailor Moon and the outer Sailor Soldier, who invaded the Tent after the core Sailor Soldier, were unable to move forward because of the puppet doll made from the energy of the core Sailor Soldier.
(Uranus Neptune Pluto are the outer part of solar system, 外部太陽系戦士)

部屋は...我が体内に等しい
Furthermore, this room is isolated from the outside world as an imaginary space. Being in this room is equal to being in my body.
(being in the room means being in Nehalenia's body. Maybe you can think a better performance)

お前の本体も我が手中
your origin body is also under my control
(spell mis)

当時は旬なネタだったんですが…ごめんねうめさん
it would be timely 1 year ago, I have to say sorry to ume

昔は大きいのが惑星それ以外は小惑星ですんでたのにね
"the big ones are planet, other of them are asteroid",this definition satisfied people in the past

てゆーかここで手柄たてとかないと後々大変そうだしな
better to say we will in trouble if we can't do a feat now.

お前の本体もピンクの小娘も今頃は
both your original body and the pink girl are now
わらわの与えた幻影の中で全てを搾り尽くされている頃よ
running out of the energy in my illusion
(Nehalenia squeezed the energy out of Hotaru &Chibi-usa)

Thanks for the fixes Ace.

@The Thread: I'll start the edit once I get the OK for Red/Dl

Ok from me!

Looks great (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

Alright, then SS (SS) 10 will be ready soon.

This post has been edited by Super Shanko: Oct 14 2012, 11:24