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https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=15050 still open?

I cleaned this gallery some months ago but i actually never edited it

https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=15050 still open?

I cleaned this gallery some months ago but i actually never edited it

Shinko.Aelith has already reserved it. I believe Shinko spoke with Red_Piotrus about editing this doujin some time back while working on another Yanagi work.

UF

I accepted bounty for ORANGE PIE Red.

https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=15051

6 pages right? What could possibly go wrong?

New projects!
(C79) [S.S.L (Yanagi)] TEMPTATION (Fate/stay night)



Gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/353573/2bc31a8f32/
Bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=14893
Script:  Temptation.txt ( 4.09k ) Number of downloads: 42


We have a lot of translated Rider doujins on this site, but not this one for some reason. Red_Piotrus was kind enough to point me in the direction of this little doujin, and I needed little convincing. Short and well drawn. But what the hell, really? Sex in the bathroom and the tub isn't involved!? I demand a sequel!

Editors, this is mostly a pretty easy project. Large bubbles are definite plus. Large sfx are less so, I guess, but there aren't very many of them compared to SOME of the stuff I translate. Looking at you, Pyramid House...
[Rascou (Rusera)] Hanamichi Azemichi Vol. 2 "Tsuyokute mo On'nanoko Nandaka-ra" (Viper RSR)



Gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/530333/ad0067a5d0/
Bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=14894
Script:  Hanamichi.txt ( 13.77k ) Number of downloads: 51


Full color Viper RSR! That's more or less all I needed to know before I put it into my "To Do" folder. Our elf heroine is in trouble with Maranello, which is hardly a surprise.

Editors, this one will more challenging than my usual fare. The doujin is full color, the author likes colorful sfx bubbles, there's a fair amount of freetext, etc. That said, I'm willing to make it worth your while. Definitely PM me if you feel the bounty reward isn't high enough.

UF

Excuse me your script for Temptation is incorrect. You have the same script for "A midnight Summers Dream" here instead of "Temptation" which is only labeled as it. Just letting you know.
Sincerely
XRaidenVergil

I just double-checked and it looks right to me...? Can anyone else confirm that the wrong script is pulling up?

UF

I just double-checked and it looks right to me...? Can anyone else confirm that the wrong script is pulling up?

UF

It's correct. I did the comparation and it matches the jap version. Prolly his internet/browser was acting funny.

I accepted the bounty for [Pyramid House (Muscleman)] Little Witch Fuck! (Bible Black).

https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=14463

It's correct. I did the comparation and it matches the jap version. Prolly his internet/browser was acting funny.

You are probably right I tried it again and it is the document it says it is. Okay good to know because I would like to proofread that douijn once I finish the other Rider doujin. Thank you.
XRaidenVergil

[quote name='ultimaflaral' date='Sep 6 2016, 20:20' post='4595131']
New Projects!

(C76) [S.S.L (Yanagi)] Natsunoyonoyume (fate hollow ataraxia)



Gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/165972/fee05ef9b4/
Bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=15050
Script:  Rider2.txt ( 3.97k ) Number of downloads: 35


More Yanagi Rider goodness. 16 pages of straight vanilla Rider. Short and sexy; who could ask for more?

This is my very first proofread, not sure how the process works exactly and do not intend to be mean with my feedback. Hopefully this doujin is looking for feedback because if not I just did this for nothing, yet got some practice. Also some of the things suggested here are my thoughts so if you want to keep it intact, close to the original source material by all means. If you want to ask me something about what is stated here or confused or just want to say whatever drop a reply or message me (I do not mind hearing “what you have to say”). Without any delays here it is.

A Midsummer Night's Dream (Proofread)

Page 4
“Now that you've seen me, I guess I don't have a choice...”
you’ve should be changed to “you have” because in English grammar it is not correct especially if written. Also “don’t” to “do not” should be changed as well. Separate the word instead of combining them.

“Y-Your Mystic Eyes... (left) Unfair...!”
Here the change is up to translator. “Unfair” by itself seems like a pronoun should be there like That”. So it should read That’s unfair…! This is up to you, my opinion after all.

Page 5
(Chupa!) x2
Is this suppose to mean slurp or suck in English? If it can be changed it should (sorry to nitpick) because “Chupa” means suck/slurp in Spanish not English. Just need to be said if it can be changed.

Page 7
(Gulp!)
I started to realize that changing all of the indications to explain story thus enrich the story would take forever (especially for one manga), but……..This one should be exception to be changed to English. This will thus enlighten the reader that she indeed swallowed it. Again not an error but highly recommend it.

Page 9
Incredible... Shirou, you're reaching all the way up here...
Again “you’re” should be changed to “you are” because of what was stated above. Separate the word instead of combining them.

Page 12
...aren't ready to quit after just this, right...?
Again “aren’t” should be changed to “are not” because of what was stated above. Separate the word instead of combining them.

Page 16
Saber... What's the matter?
“What’s” is “what” and “is” combined, yet doesn’t look wrong even though it should. This can be left as is no change necessary. I said this out loud countless times and it sounds okay.
It's way past time for breakfast already!
Again “It’s” should be changed to “it is” because of what was stated above. Separate the word instead of combining them.

Page 17
That was a dream...wasn't it?
Here this is no error here because the sentence was written around how the word was said. In other words if it was separated to “was not” the sentence would sound incorrect.

Keep up the good work ultimaflaral. A good translation without a doubt.
XRaidenVergil

It's a pleasure to see you around, XRaidenVergil. I'm glad the script link wasn't messed up, as I HAVE made that sort of mistake before. Thanks you for your proofreading comments. The way you posted them was perfectly appropriate.

I see that the majority of your comments concern English contractions, particularly that it would be better to translate the full, non-contracted phrases instead ("you have" instead of "you've", etc). Grammatically, contractions are correct so long as the non-contracted phrase would also be correct. In your first example, if "you have" is correct, then "you've" would also be correct. Of course, contractions are a great deal more casual, which may be inappropriate in formal, humble or respectful situations. In this situation, both Shirou and Rider are speaking fairly casually, so contractions should be okay. On a somewhat related note, contractions are sometimes necessary for scanlations because bubble space is often limited.

Your "chupa" comment is fair, and in many other cases I might well have translated it as "slurp" or "smack" as appropriate. Recently, however, I have tended towards preserving the original Romanized sfx sounds wherever reasonably possible. There are a few reasons why, but the best reason is that casual Japanese has far, far more sfx/onomatopoeic sounds than English does. Translating one of two dozen Japanese sfx sounds as "slurp" over and over again is problematic because (a) it makes the sfx boring for the English reader when the same effect shows up 15 times on one page, and (b) because it distorts the author's intent by implying he is using the exact same sfx every time when, in reality, we just ran out of synonyms in English. I'm hoping that an English reader who reads "chupa" will assume it's a slurping/smacking sound because it sounds vaguely like one. For other sfx, I have no choice but to fully translate to English (e.g. I doubt many English readers would figure out that "zoku" means shudder/shiver).

The page 4 comment about "unfair" is apt, but the original Japanese is missing the copula as well. In other words, "unfair" is written as a fragment sentence because the Japanese was also technically a fragment. This is actually a very common occurrence in casual Japanese.

I'm not sure whether you've seen the English gallery yet. It's here: https://e-hentai.org/g/975555/f42949f10d/ . You'll notice that the editor did indeed place "Gulp" on page 7. We probably won't make changes to tone or style now that the gallery is posted, but if you happen across misspellings or mispunctuation, please do tell us and we'll get them fixed!

UF

I accepted the bounty for [Pyramid House (Muscleman)] Little Witch Fuck! (Bible Black).

https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=14463

I completed the bounty. [www.mediafire.com] http://www.mediafire.com/download/sa36jjc5...le+Black%29.rar

[quote name='ultimaflaral' date='Aug 7 2016, 01:07' post='4564637']
New projects!
(C79) [S.S.L (Yanagi)] TEMPTATION (Fate/stay night)



Gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/353573/2bc31a8f32/
Bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=14893
Script:  Temptation.txt ( 4.09k ) Number of downloads: 42


We have a lot of translated Rider doujins on this site, but not this one for some reason. Red_Piotrus was kind enough to point me in the direction of this little doujin, and I needed little convincing. Short and well drawn. But what the hell, really? Sex in the bathroom and the tub isn't involved!? I demand a sequel!

Editors, this is mostly a pretty easy project. Large bubbles are definite plus. Large sfx are less so, I guess, but there aren't very many of them compared to SOME of the stuff I translate. Looking at you, Pyramid House...
[Rascou (Rusera)] Hanamichi Azemichi Vol. 2 "Tsuyokute mo On'nanoko Nandaka-ra" (Viper RSR)


This is my proofread for this doujin. I am still getting the hang out it so learning a little each day. If you want to ask me something about what is stated here or confused or just want to say whatever drop a reply or message me. Without any delays here it is.

Temptation

page 006

So...

What do I do...

with these...
Let me see. Let me see. This looks good

page 007

?

It's got...a weird sort of smell...
Sounds about right with no errors.

page 009

Phew...

There's really no better place to relax than the bathroom...

The house has been so crowded recently... (tiny handwritten) A whole bunch of Servants...
Everything seems to be in place.

page 010

(Kachick!)

!?
My thoughts exactly.

page 18

Rider? Are you okay?

(Knock knock!)

R-Rin, is that you? (left) W-What is it? I'm perfectly fine.
This is how it happens in the real world on point.


page 20

Well, if you say so...

Y-Yes...

Geez, Shirou...

You certainly got bold all of the sudden...

...But this isn't over.

Let's do it, okay!(heart)
Geez? Huh must be due to direct translation.


page 24

Huh...? (left) My "When the Moment's Right" aphrodisiac is gone...?
Ain't that the truth. I don't use such things.

Great work ultimaflaral. Another translation well done.
XRaidenVergil

I accepted the bounty for [INSERT (KEN)] Jessica no Ecchi na Arbeit Seikatsu (Dragon Q. VIII)

https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=12782

I accepted the bounty for [INSERT (KEN)] Jessica no Ecchi na Arbeit Seikatsu (Dragon Q. VIII)

https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=12782

I finished. [www.mediafire.com] http://www.mediafire.com/download/eim7hrtf...est+VIII%29.rar

[Pyramid House (Massuruman)] Pink Sisters (Dragon Quest IV) [Digital]



Gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/914361/e708d83f02/
Bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=14759
Script:  Pink_Sisters.txt ( 6.01k ) Number of downloads: 38


My last Pyramid House rescue project. Even if it's "official," the translation we currently have in the galleries is garbage. We can do better, so we should! This Dragon Quest IV doujin stars both sisters who have fairly typical monster related problems.

Editors, this is about a 30 page project. The sfx are translated in the script, but given how many sfx there are and the size of them, we probably shouldn't mess with them. Maybe out of box "*sfx = xyz" notes? Anyway, if the sfx are the only worry, we'll work it out.

UF

I'll be taking this one. This'll be my second public work so I hope I can impress once I finish and send it your way.

[Pyramid House (Massuruman)] Pink Sisters (Dragon Quest IV) [Digital]



Gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/914361/e708d83f02/
Bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=14759
Script:  Pink_Sisters.txt ( 6.01k ) Number of downloads: 38


My last Pyramid House rescue project. Even if it's "official," the translation we currently have in the galleries is garbage. We can do better, so we should! This Dragon Quest IV doujin stars both sisters who have fairly typical monster related problems.

Editors, this is about a 30 page project. The sfx are translated in the script, but given how many sfx there are and the size of them, we probably shouldn't mess with them. Maybe out of box "*sfx = xyz" notes? Anyway, if the sfx are the only worry, we'll work it out.

UF

Finished. Sent you the link to the file in a PM.

I accepted the bounty for [Rascou (Rusera)] Hanamichi Azemichi Vol. 2 (Viper RSR).

https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=14894

I accepted the bounty for [Rascou (Rusera)] Hanamichi Azemichi Vol. 2 (Viper RSR).

https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=14894

Here's the finished product. [www.mediafire.com] http://www.mediafire.com/file/ze4bn6vpp2sx...iper+RSR%29.rar

This post has been edited by Vilis: Oct 5 2016, 12:46

For the first time in quite a while, two projects for the price of one!
Status: OPEN!



Gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/232884/02620a551d/
Bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=13467
Script:  Purple.txt ( 6.54k ) Number of downloads: 44


Another effort by Pyramid House. It's Dragon Quest this time, which must be popular with the artist since he's done several works with these characters. Fair warning: this is not vanilla content. I kept laughing when I was translating this one... I wonder if I'm getting jaded?

Editors, it's a 30 page project. The text amount is pretty light, though the sfx will be a definite challenge.
Status: OPEN!

[Tsurikichi Doumei (Umedama Nabu)] Umedamangashuu 8 (Various) [TENCHI MUYO STORY ONLY]



Gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/5138/aca03d7724/
Bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=13459
Script:  Tenchi.txt ( 4.59k ) Number of downloads: 33


This is one of Red_Piotrus's projects. I kind of missed the whole Tenchi Muyo craze by a couple of years. When it comes to the "Shameless Harem" style of story, I was more into Love Hina and Ichigo 100%. Still, this little story is pretty cute in an unassuming way. I can see why Red_Piotrus might like it.

Editors, this is a 20 page project. The number of bubbles is fairly high until the sex starts, which shuts down most of the talking pretty quickly. The editing should be pretty easy.

Note that this is ONLY the Tenchi Muyo story from this collection.

UF

Working on this one.

Two new scripts:

(C72) [Bullet Ballet (Amano Kazumi, Isana)] The Usual Suspects (Black Lagoon)



Gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/15272/a3cc546477/
Bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=15296
Script:  Usual_Suspects.txt ( 9.32k ) Number of downloads: 22


A 2 part Black Lagoon story here, one for Revy and one for Sawyer. I came into this project expecting to enjoy the Revy story more, but I'm voting with Red_Piotrus on this one and calling Sawyer the winner here. It helps that the author very generously gave her breasts.

Editors, this is a 29 page, medium difficulty project. The bubbles are of fair size, but the sfx are definitely difficult in spots.


(C63) [BIG BOSS (Hontai Bai)] Motoko Happy End (Love Hina)



Gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/212867/84794015fb/?hc=1#comments
Bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=15297
Script:  Motoko.txt ( 7.13k ) Number of downloads: 21


I've never been that big of a Motoko fan, so I'm surprised I liked this project as much as I did. It caught me in just the right mood, I suppose. The story is an alternate future where Motoko and Keitaro get together. It's cute and mildly sweet (though it could have used another few pages to flesh it out). I'm satisfied.

Editors, this is another medium difficulty project, 28 pages long. The bubbles may get a bit cramped, but we can tighten up the script if need be.

UF

This post has been edited by ultimaflaral: Nov 2 2016, 03:09