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Since I'm free now and no one else seems to be taking this, I'd like to edit [Aun Kiki] Medea-hime (Ouma-san) vs Jessica ~Chagosu Ouji no Dorei Nikki~ (Dragon Quest VIII). Should I accept the bounty?

Of course, feel free!

UF

This post has been edited by ultimaflaral: Feb 3 2015, 01:57

I would like to edit Orange Typhoon

Since I'm free now and no one else seems to be taking this, I'd like to edit [Aun Kiki] Medea-hime (Ouma-san) vs Jessica ~Chagosu Ouji no Dorei Nikki~ (Dragon Quest VIII). Should I accept the bounty?

Please do.

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Editing bounty for (C86) [Orange Typhoon (Yamada Enako)] Change Round (One Piece)

https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=11836

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Feb 3 2015, 13:27

Of course, feel free!

UF

Please do.

Already have.

Ok, I'm done with [Aun Kiki] Medea-hime (Ouma-san) vs Jessica ~Chagosu Ouji no Dorei Nikki~ (Dragon Quest VIII). Now I need someone to proofread it.

[mega.co.nz] Here is the link.

P.S. Sorry for the double post.

Ok, I'm done with [Aun Kiki] Medea-hime (Ouma-san) vs Jessica ~Chagosu Ouji no Dorei Nikki~ (Dragon Quest VIII). Now I need someone to proofread it.

Here you go.

General suggestion: Since a text panel can contain speaking lines from several characters as well as SFX, it might be a good idea to use different colors for each character so that it will be easier to identify who is speaking.

For example:

Charmles - yellow text
Jessica - red text
Horse princess - blue text
Miscellaneous characters and SFX - white text

If you don't think color-coding is necessary, then you may want to enclose SFX in brackets (<>) so that they won't be mistaken for speech (case in point: Image 6).

Image 01 - The title text is a bit difficult to make out. You may want to increase the spaces between letters or use a different color scheme instead.
Image 02 - Change "I'll show you my secret, super-private diary just to you!" to "I'll show my secret, super-private diary just to you!"
Image 02 - Change "you've got to promise you won't tell!!" to "you've got to promise not to tell anyone!!"
Image 04 - Change "You happy going all around with your tongue?" to "Are you happy going all around with your tongue?"
Image 13 - Change "pour that huge load of semen into Jessica without holding back!" to "pour that huge load of semen into Jessica! Don't hold back!"
Image 14 - Change "deep in my bowels" to "deep into my bowels".
Image 14 - "Impale" may be a better word choice than "skewer".
Images 18 and 19 - Change "human woman" to "human female".
Image 19 - Change "Though you will not give birth to human children, do not despair." to "You will not give birth to human children, but do not despair."

Here you go.

General suggestion: Since a text panel can contain speaking lines from several characters as well as SFX, it might be a good idea to use different colors for each character so that it will be easier to identify who is speaking.

For example:

Charmles - yellow text
Jessica - red text
Horse princess - blue text
Miscellaneous characters and SFX - white text

If you don't think color-coding is necessary, then you may want to enclose SFX in brackets (<>) so that they won't be mistaken for speech (case in point: Image 6).

Image 01 - The title text is a bit difficult to make out. You may want to increase the spaces between letters or use a different color scheme instead.
Image 02 - Change "I'll show you my secret, super-private diary just to you!" to "I'll show my secret, super-private diary just to you!"
Image 02 - Change "you've got to promise you won't tell!!" to "you've got to promise not to tell anyone!!"
Image 04 - Change "You happy going all around with your tongue?" to "Are you happy going all around with your tongue?"
Image 13 - Change "pour that huge load of semen into Jessica without holding back!" to "pour that huge load of semen into Jessica! Don't hold back!"
Image 14 - Change "deep in my bowels" to "deep into my bowels".
Image 14 - "Impale" may be a better word choice than "skewer".
Images 18 and 19 - Change "human woman" to "human female".
Image 19 - Change "Though you will not give birth to human children, do not despair." to "You will not give birth to human children, but do not despair."

So, fixed these. As you suggested, I put the sfx in brackets. I didn't really want to color code it as it just felt wrong to me. Plus, all dialogues are attributed to the person by mentioning their name before they speak. Everything else are sfx, so that problem should be fixed.

[mega.co.nz] Here is the link. Tell me if anything else needs to be fixed.

P.S. I have classes starting tomorrow, so I won't have as much time in my hand as I did for the past week and a half. If there are communication blanks from me, that would be the reason behind it (taking into account the difference in timezones, of course).

I am assuming it's ready for release, looks all fine to me. Just - considering how short it was - sure we don't want to do p.20?

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Feb 7 2015, 13:07

Tell me if anything else needs to be fixed.

Looks OK to me. I leave the decision on what to do with Page 20 to you guys.

I am assuming it's ready for release, looks all fine to me. Just - considering how short it was - sure we don't want to do p.20?

Well, if ultimaflaral translates it, I'll edit it. If he doesn't want to, then this seems to be a complete project.

I generally dislike translating author rants. It's boring work and generally unappreciated since I don't think most readers care at all.

That said, Red, didn't you tell me you had found someone who was fine translating Afterwords and such things? If so, I have no problem with getting his input and crediting him as a 2nd translator.

UF

I will be editing Konzen Koushou

I generally dislike translating author rants. It's boring work and generally unappreciated since I don't think most readers care at all.

That said, Red, didn't you tell me you had found someone who was fine translating Afterwords and such things? If so, I have no problem with getting his input and crediting him as a 2nd translator.

UF

Well, I don't think the rant is that important here, and I prefer to use mathillean's goodwill on something else, so I think it's fine to release it as it is, if ulti is fine. Did you say the Bleach dojin's script is nearing completion?

Well, I don't think the rant is that important here, and I prefer to use mathillean's goodwill on something else, so I think it's fine to release it as it is, if ulti is fine. Did you say the Bleach dojin's script is nearing completion?

Does that mean I can claim it?

@Andrew, if meow_pao gives the "All Clear" for QC, then you're good to go.

@Red, https://forums.e-hentai.org/index.php?s=&am...t&p=3798185 Doh, misread the question. No, bleach isn't done. I've been working a project for Mathew1122. I assumed it would be a T-for-E credit thing, but he actually just payed me straight up for it. He's currently doing other work for future credit though.

UF

This post has been edited by ultimaflaral: Feb 10 2015, 02:02

@Andrew, if meow_pao gives the "All Clear" for QC, then you're good to go.

Which script are you referring to? I've gone through several, so I've kind of lost track.

Which script are you referring to? I've gone through several, so I've kind of lost track.

Medea-hime (Ouma-san) vs Jessica ~Chagosu Ouji no Dorei Nikki~

It's basically the last one I worked on. If you think that there is nothing else to fix, then I'm going to claim the bounty.

Medea-hime (Ouma-san) vs Jessica ~Chagosu Ouji no Dorei Nikki~

It's basically the last one I worked on. If you think that there is nothing else to fix, then I'm going to claim the bounty.

Looks fine to me. Go ahead and claim the bounty.

Another new script ready to go!

Project: COMPLETE

[RUMP (Bon)] Pai! 2 (Bamboo Blade)



Original Gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/202397/f28d8d103e/
Bounty Link: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=11922
Current Bounty: 30,000 Credits + 30 Hath
Script:  Pai_2.txt ( 11.82k ) Number of downloads: 34


Back by popular demand, it's Pai 2! More yuri antics for Kirino and Saya of Bamboo Blade renown. This short sequel is lighter on story than the original, but it's still fun, well drawn, and well worth your attention. Thanks should go to Red_Piotrus for this one, as it's his baby.

Editors, this project is 21 pages of editing. The text levels are light over all with moderate sfx. Page 15 has a substantial amount of freetext that will need looking at, but nothing beyond the skills of most editors I think.

UF

This post has been edited by ultimaflaral: Mar 19 2016, 19:58

Thanks, ulti! (Time to update your sig I guess?)

editing bounty for Pai 2: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=11922

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Feb 15 2015, 19:40