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(C60) [GUST (Harukaze Soyogu)] Aoi Shoudou 2 (Noir)

P19.
sfx: puchu...
1/4
Ah......

sfx: nichu...

It's alright
lower your hips slowly
2/5
sfx: gupupupu...
3/5
nn...

aah...

ah......
sfx: pu pu pu
4/5
ko...
Kouji's thing...

haa...

is...
hitting deep inside me...

sfx: kyun (squeeze) kyuun (squeeze)
5/5
Neya...

try moving...

......
ok...
P20.
1/4
nn

ah

ha

sfx: tapu tapu tapu (jiggle)
2/4
sfx: zu zu zu
Neya......

It feels great...
how does it feel, Neya ......?
sfx: guchu zuchu guchu
3/4
I...
I don't know......

b......

but...
I want to keep doing this......
sfx: zunu zunu zunu zunu zunu
4/4
me too...
sfx: nuchu guchu zuchu

ah

aahn!
P21.
1/4
sfx: jupu jupu jupu jupu jupu
2/4
sfx: buru buru (shake/tremble)
3/4
sfx: kuchu...
4/4
sfx: zu (slide)
P22.
1/3
kouji......
2/3
I love you.....

kyun (blush)
sfx: chu chu (kiss)

I love you.....
3/3
ko...
koujii...!!!

sfx: nubu gupu zupu nupu
P23.
1/2
Neya's vagina...
it's twitching...
are you... about to cum...?

I'm...
a...about to......!

sfx: gepu zupu gepu zunu nubu
2/2
cum...ahh!

haaa...nn

sfx: biku biku! (shudder)

sfx: zuku zu dopyu (spurt)
P24.
1/4
squeeze (kyun)
squ
squ...eeze (kyun)

ah......
Neya's......

insides are tightening......
2/4
same as aoi......

I wonder......
are all girls like this......?
3/4
Neya...

did you feel good on your first time?
4/4
because aoi was doing this......

eh?
P25.
1/3
aoi always thought...
that doing this would make kouji happy

so i tried imitating it......
2/3
......umm
that......

does that mean......
aoi is always doing that
kind of thing...
3/3
ah! Neya
w, wait...
...!

myoi~~n

Koujiiii....

ah
aoi......!

hawawa!

sfx: paki! (knuckle crack)

P26
<When would I write this if not now?...before the carnage...kind of Noir afterword>
Hey, it's Harukaze Soyogu. The schedule this time around was a little dangerous!
But this was all due to my serious lack of willpower and ability... Other people might be thinking that I had plenty of time......
Uwah, sorry I started complaining all of the sudden......
I watched the first episode of Noir, and was like [Oh, this is pretty good] and had a high expectation, but I ended up recording it without watching it in real time for a while...after which, I started hearing some bad things about it.
I had some time, so I resolved myself to watch 10 or so episodes all at once!..... and it was relatively good. Well, there were some parts that bothered me but even if I take those negative parts into account, I felt the attractive characters and the world mood was good enough to make up for it.
And of course, Kirika! and the old guys were great. Or rather, all the female characters besides Kirika weren't that great...
As for Chloe....it would have been nice if her design were a little better.
I don't think anyone would doubt how cute Kirika is, but how about it?
I think those guys from the Taiwan black organization didn't shoot Kirika when she charged in by herself because of how cute she is.
Ah, maybe that only applies to asians since those middle eastern guerrillas gave her a beating.
That fat guy who seemed worried about Kirika might have been Japanese. After all, that identification paper was written in Japanese.
But seriously, the enemies were too weak...to the point of being pitiful.
On the other hand, all the girls, especially Kirika and Chloe, were outrageously strong.
Luckily, I enjoyed it so it was no-problem! I'm M towards females so.
Neya and Kirika. When you think about it, the heroines this time were both expressionless, huh.
I thought it was unusual that I would fall for these characters...but Kirika's character design was perfect!
But these characters, if they make a harsh facial expression they tend to look like different characters so I was worried about that.
The coloring on the front this time was done by KIN san.
Thank you very much!! for doing it despite being busy.
Well I guess I should start wrapping it up. If we meet again... it'll probably be Scryed...or Noir again... I haven't decided.
I'd be happy if you could send any thoughts or requests on my work by mail.
Well then...

Harukaze Soyogu

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P.1

パイパンテンション
Paipan Tension

T/N: Paipan refers to the white dragon tile in mahjong. It can also refer to a girl with no pubic hair, so the title is a pun.


P.4

こにちは。かなおです
Hi there, I’m Kanao.

タコス本です
This is a book about tacos.

咲のキャラでは
ひんぬうキャラが
かがやいてみえ
て。。。
That flat chested character from Saki seemed to shine when I saw her…

きょぬーも
いいんだけども
Big breasts are fine too, though.

エロイよなー
So perverted.

あれ、今回
りんね本では。。。?
Huh, what happened to the Rinne book?

れいせいに
なってみると
私の絵でるーみっくは
ムズかしかったみたい
When I came to my senses I realized drawing it was pretty hard for me.

まえがき
まんが
あらきかなお
Preface manga
Araki Kanao

またかよ
Again?

ブログ単行本で
Solo book on my blog

色んな所で言いましたが
親知らず抜きました。
I’ve announced this in various places
but I had my wisdom teeth taken out.

そこで知った
抜いてよかった
コトなどしょうかい
します
I’ll introduce you to someone there who can have them removed for you.

はれなくなった
The pain wouldn’t clear up.

ごはんたべわな
なるくらいはぐき
はわてはわて
When I tried to eat
I would feel a shooting pain
and panic a bit.

クーソッシュという
アイスがおいしい
The ice-cream made by Coolish is delicious.

スプーンで
たべない
アイスなんて。。。
なんていれないで!
Ice-cream that you can eat without a spoon…
such a thing exists!

どうしてもという
ならおごっても
いいくらいうまいよ
It’s so good I’d even treat someone to it if they insisted.

あと3本。。。
3 more to go…

さっさと
抜くといいよ
You should hurry up and get them removed.

左下親知らずは
手術。。。
The lower left one needs surgery…

侮と同じ
やな
You underestimated them, huh?

神様
いい子になりますから。。。
だから。。。!!
God
I’ll be a good kid…
So please…!!

イトコは同じ所に3本はえたとか。。。
親知うずって何なんだろう
My cousin had 3 out in the same place as I did…
What’s with wisdom teeth anyway?

P.5

ドラドラ!
あらきかなお
Dora Dora!
Araki Kanao


みんな帰っちまって
ヒマだなー
俺らも帰るか?
Everyone else left so there’s nothing to do-
How about we go too?

ふあー
*yawn*

んじゃ
夫婦の絆を
深めようじぇ
Welp,
let’s go deepen our
marital bonds then.

あ。な。た。
Da - rl - ing

ヒマもイヤ
だけど
冗談じゃねー
I hate being bored too,
but don’t kid with me

ぱああ
*sparkle*

大体俺はぺちゃは
好みじゃねーん
だよ
Washboard chests aren’t my preference in the first place.


P.6

ぺ、ぺチャって!
きさま平成
生まれでは
ないな。。。っ
W-washboard!?
Just what era is that term from anyway?

ひええ
Hiee

そこかよ!
That’s what you care about?
ぴちり
*flip*

これでも最近は
急成長的に
育ってきてるん
だじぇ~
They might not seem like much but, I’ve been having some sudden growth around here lately.

す。。。
*touch*

きゃー
いやーん
Kya-
Dooon’t.

うきゃ
*kyaa*

うきゃ
*kyaa*

P.7

はれ
Huh?

な、なんで
今日は
手を振払わない。。。
W-why isn’t he pulling his hand…

のだ!?
away!?

ぐら
*wobble*
ぐら
*wobble*

ぺと
*grab*


うひゃ
Uhya!

びく
*twitch*

やーっ
やだやだやだ
たんまっ
No…!
Nowaynowaynoway
timeout!

何が
たんまだ
Timeout from what?

ドキ
*thump*
ドキ
*thump*

お前口だけじゃ
ねーか
俺がこういう事
しないって
安心してたんだろ
You’re all talk aren’t you?
You think I won’t do anything so you let your guard down around me, right?


P.8

ち、ちが。。。
T-that’s not…

ちがうって
言うならさ
You know if you say that’s not it,

希望通りだろ?
逃げんなよ
then this is exactly what you want, right?
Don’t run away.

動揺しちゃったじゃえ
なーんか今日の
京太郎
迫力あるし
I’m getting flustered.
Somehow Kyoutarou seems kinda forceful today.

からかい
すぎたじょ
I might have teased him a bit too much.

んと
Erm

え、えっと
タコス
食べよっかな。。。
U-umm, how about we go eat some tacos…?

ひゃ
Hya!

今日はさ
You know today,

ごっこじゃ
すませねーそ
won’t end with just playing around.

や。。。
No…

怖くて
涙でちゃ。。。
It’s so scary that
I’m gonna cry…

ひわ。。。
*teary*


P.9

え。。。と
あの。。。タコスの星では
夫婦以外そういう事しちゃ
ダメなんだじょ!
U….um
That is…on the planet of tacos, only married couples are supposed to do that kind of thing!

ぎ
*grit* (as in clenching teeth)

残念だじぇ
Too bad-

じゃあ夫婦でいいよ
Being a married couple is fine then.

え。。。
Eh…?

うそか?
Were you lying?

うそついたんなら
お前とはもう
口きかねー
If you were lying then I won’t listen to anything you say from now on.

あ。。。あう。。。
Ah…au…

ごめ。。。
Sor-…

夫婦だよな?
We’re a married couple, right?


P.10

うそじゃない
ならさ
If you weren’t lying

夫婦なんだし
いいよな
then it’s fine since we’re a married couple.

う、うん。。。
Y-yeah…

ぬる
*slimy*

レロ
*lick*

びく
*twitch*

あ。。。
Ah…

あつ。。。くて
しょっぱい
It’s…hot
and salty.

あついのがいやな感じに
舌にからまってきた
同じ人間の皮膚と
思えないじぇ。。。
A hot and gross sensation is spreading across my tongue.
It’s hard to believe this is another person’s skin…

あ
Ah

ちゅるる
*sluuurp*

びく
*twitch*
びく
*twitch*

く
Kuh

ふぷ
Fupu

ん。。。
Nh…

ぬる
*slimy*

ぬぷぷ
*dribble*

んぷ。。。
Npu…


P.11

さきっぽだけ
じゃなくてさ、
ちゃんと
くわえろよ
Don’t just focus on the tip,
do it right and take the whole thing into your mouth.

う。。。
Ugh…

ぴちゃ
*Schlip*

ちゅる
*slurp*

それじゃ
ものたりないなー
Like this just isn’t enough-

な?
Ok?

イラ。。。
*Irritated*

もっとさあ。。。
Can’t you do it…

愛情込めて
できねえ
かなあ!?
a little more affectionately!?

ごきゅっ
*Schlurp*

のおえっ
Noee

ふお
Fuoh

ゴリュ
*Press*

ゴソッ
*Slide*

ミチ
*full*

う。。。おえっ
Uu…ueeh


P.12

はっ
Haa
はっ
Haa
はっ
Haa

んぐ
Ngh

んお
Nmh

ゴツ
*Thump*

ゴリ
*scrape*

歯立てたら殴るからな
If your teeth touch me I’ll hit you.

スルル
*sliiide*

ズル
*slip*

ゴリュ
*grind*

ゴリッ
*scrape*

ガク
*shake*
ガク
*shake*
ガク
*shake*

んんっん
Nnnnh

ちゅ
*suck*

ちゅぽ
*schlip*

ちゅぽ
*schlip*

ふく。。。
ううう
Fuku…
Uuu

んご
Ngh!

んー
NNH!


P.13

あっあっ
AAHHH!

のど。。。にだすぞっ
I’m gonna…let it out in your throat.

びゅぶ
*splurt*

うぐ
Ugu

びく
*twitch*
びく
*twitch*

ドプ
*spurt*

ドプ
*spurt*

も。。。
無理だじぇ。。。
早く飲まないと
息できな。。。
I can’t…
keep going…
If I don’t hurry up and swallow it
I won’t be able to breathe…

お。。。
Oh…
すなお
じゃねーか
えらいえらい
Well aren’t you being honest,
good girl.

ちゅ
ちゅる
*suck*
*slurp*

お前みたいなのでも
手でするのと
全然違うんだな
Even with a girl like you,
it feels completely different from doing it with my hand.

スポ
*swp*
スポ
*swp*

ずるる
*sliiide*

ぞわ
*shudder*
ぞわ
*shudder*

ん。。。
Nnh…

おぶ。。。
Obu…


P.14
夫婦なら口だけで
終わりじゃない
よな?
If we’re a married couple we can’t stop after just doing it with your mouth, can we?

う、うん
Y-yeah

あっ
Ah!

ムニュウ
*squeeze*

くぱ
*spread*

へー
ネットではみた事
あったけど
本物ってすごいな。。。
Wow-
I’ve seen a few on the internet before,
but the real thing is amazing…

かああ
*blush*

うう~
恥ずかしいじぇ。。。
Uuu~
This is embarrassing…


P.15

ん~?
でもお前のここ
すこし変じゃねえ?
Hmm~?
Still, isn’t your place here a little weird?

くにっ
*squish*

ここ、
皮かむってる
This part,
has some skin covering it.

ムキ
*stretch*

いっいたいっ
いたいじぇ
O-ow!
That hurts!

スル
*slide*
スキ
*twiddle*

やっぱ
タコスの星の
住人だな
Probably because you’re from the planet of tacos.

う。。。
Uu…

びく
*twitch*

びく
*twitch*

も。。。やだ。。。あ。。。
やだよお
No…more…ah…
Don’t

ぺろ
*lick*

ぐす
*sob*

ぐすん
*sniffle*


P.16

いいたいた
IT HURTS!

スブウ
*shove*

う。。。
キツすぎて
イテー
Ugh…
it’s so tight,
that it hurts-

ギチ
*tight*
ギチチ
*tear*

ああっ
AHHH!

力抜いてくれる?
Can you try relaxing a little?

うっ
Uu

スボ
*shove*

ひあ
HIYA!

キュウ
*squeeze*

ギチ
*tight*

スッ
*slide*

おーい
よけいきつくなってん
じゃねえか
Hey,
Don’t go getting even tighter now!

ぬいてえ
TAKE IT OUT
いた。。。
IT HURTS…

うう
Uuu

あー
AHH!


P.17

い
OW

ギリッ
*grab*

いた。。。あ
IT HUR…TS.

力ぬけっ
Relax.

パンッ
*smack*
パン
*smack*
パン
*smack*

お前の穴
ちゃーんと
有効活用して
やって
るんだから
I’ll make sure to put your hole here to good use.

うっ
Uu

うぐっ
Ugh

感謝しろって
You should be grateful.

そうそう。。。
いい感じだぜ
Yeah yeah…
Just like that.

スルッ
*slip*

ズズルル
*sliiiiide*

ガク
*tremble*

ひぐっ
Higu
ううっ
Uuu!

ガク
*tremble*


P.18

初めてで中出し
してもらえるなんて
けっこーレアだぜ
よかったな
Having someone cum inside on your first time is pretty rare you know.
Aren’t you glad?

だっだめ
だじぇ
D-don’t!
さすがに
それは。。。
That really would be…

うるせーって
Shut up.

お前の意志
カンケーねーし
It doesn’t matter what you want.

ぐり
*grind*
ぐり
*grind*

ブチュ
*slosh*

ひぐっ
Higu

あっ
AH!

ズッ
*slide*

ズブッ
*slam*

びく
*quiver*
びく
*twitch*

あっあっ
腰止まんねー。。。
Ahhh
My hips won’t stop…

グリ
*slide*
グリ
*slide*
グリ
*slide*

やめて
STOP IT!

ああ
AHH!

や
NO!


P.19

はっ
Haa
顔みせろ
Show me your face.
はっ
Haa

は。。。
Ha…

やっ。。。やだあ。。。っ
No…no way…

う
Uu
顔見ながら
中出ししてやる
I’ll cum inside while looking at your face.

う
Uu

うう。。。
Uuu…

はー
Haa

はー
Haa

ビューッ
*spluuurt*

ビュク
*spurt*

びく
*twitch*

あ。。。
あっあっあっ
Ah…
AHHHHH

でるぞっくっ。。。
でる。。。でる
うっ
I’m cumming…kuh…
It’s coming…out
Ugh

はー
Haa

は。。。
Haa
はー
Haa

ゴプ
*drip*

ドロー。。。
*ooze*

ガク
*tremble*
ガク
*shake*


P.20

うーん
Hmm…

少しやりすぎたな。。。いや、
しかしからかわられ
続けるのもシャク
だったし。。。
でも明日から気まずく
なるのもなあ
I overdid it a bit…well,
even if it was continuing from her teasing,
it must have been a shock…
Things are definitely gonna be awkward from tomorrow on.

ぐす
*sob*
ぐすん
*sniffle*

お、おい
悪かったな
H-hey
I’m sorry.

本当だじぇ!
痛かったし
怖かったし
You should be!
It hurt!
It was scary!

でもーっ
これで二人は
夫婦だじぇっ
But with this
the two of us really are a married couple.

よろしく
だじぇー!
Let’s get along well, ‘kay?

それもすまん。。。
Sorry about that too…

京太郎とは
そういう男なのだ
To think that Kyoutarou was that kind of guy.

今日も宮水さんに
合えました。。。
I met Miyanaga-san today again too…

おわり。
End.


P.21

あらきムー
Araki muu

あー?
Huh-?

スワップって
やーの
やってみたい
できる?
Do you wanna try doing a swap?

まあ
スワップって
やーても
イミはいろいろ
あるしな
Well ‘swap’ can mean a bunch of things so it depends.

おともだちに
誘われたんだよ
I got invited by a friend.

作業しながら
おともだちと
おしゃべり
とか
できる、て
You can chat with your friends even while working.

わかった
SKYPE
か!!
I get it,
on Skype, huh?

カネモル観察日記
あらきあきら
Observation Diary
Araki Akira

スーパー
かいもの中
Shopping at the supermarket.

こっちこっち
これ買って
Over here,
you should buy this.

カキ水シロップー
いちご
Shaved ice syrup
Strawberry

あれ
こっちや
ないの
Huh,
wasn’t it this one?

なに言ってんの
やっぱこの
ビンのでしょう!
ぜったいコレ!
What’re you talking about?
It’s totally this bottle!
I’m positive!


それ
メーカー
どこの?
What’s the manufacturer’s name on that one?

え
Eh?

め。。。
Ma…
め。。。
Ma…

メイデイー屋
に限るよな
シロップ
May Day – Ya
from what I can tell.

メイデイー
か
May Day huh?

明治屋です
It’s actually MEIDI-YA.

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P.1

パイパンテンション
Paipan Tension

T/N: Paipan refers to the white dragon tile in mahjong. It can also refer to a girl with no pubic hair, so the title is a pun.
P.4

こにちは。かなおです
Hi there, I’m Kanao.

タコス本です
This is a book about tacos.

咲のキャラでは
ひんぬうキャラが
かがやいてみえ
て。。。
That flat chested character from Saki seemed to shine when I saw her…

きょぬーも
いいんだけども
Big breasts are fine too, though.

エロイよなー
So perverted.

あれ、今回
りんね本では。。。?
Huh, what happened to the Rinne book?

れいせいに
なってみると
私の絵でるーみっくは
ムズかしかったみたい
When I came to my senses I realized drawing it was pretty hard for me.

まえがき
まんが
あらきかなお
Preface manga
Araki Kanao

またかよ
Again?

ブログ単行本で
Solo book on my blog

色んな所で言いましたが
親知らず抜きました。
I’ve announced this in various places
but I had my wisdom teeth taken out.

そこで知った
抜いてよかった
コトなどしょうかい
します
I’ll introduce you to someone there who can have them removed for you.

はれなくなった
The pain wouldn’t clear up.

ごはんたべわな
なるくらいはぐき
はわてはわて
When I tried to eat
I would feel a shooting pain
and panic a bit.

クーソッシュという
アイスがおいしい
The ice-cream made by Coolish is delicious.

スプーンで
たべない
アイスなんて。。。
なんていれないで!
Ice-cream that you can eat without a spoon…
such a thing exists!

どうしてもという
ならおごっても
いいくらいうまいよ
It’s so good I’d even treat someone to it if they insisted.

あと3本。。。
3 more to go…

さっさと
抜くといいよ
You should hurry up and get them removed.

左下親知らずは
手術。。。
The lower left one needs surgery…

侮と同じ
やな
You underestimated them, huh?

神様
いい子になりますから。。。
だから。。。!!
God
I’ll be a good kid…
So please…!!

イトコは同じ所に3本はえたとか。。。
親知うずって何なんだろう
My cousin had 3 out in the same place as I did…
What’s with wisdom teeth anyway?

P.5

ドラドラ!
あらきかなお
Dora Dora!
Araki Kanao
みんな帰っちまって
ヒマだなー
俺らも帰るか?
Everyone else left so there’s nothing to do-
How about we go too?

ふあー
*yawn*

んじゃ
夫婦の絆を
深めようじぇ
Welp,
let’s go deepen our
marital bonds then.

あ。な。た。
Da - rl - ing

ヒマもイヤ
だけど
冗談じゃねー
I hate being bored too,
but don’t kid with me

ぱああ
*sparkle*

大体俺はぺちゃは
好みじゃねーん
だよ
Washboard chests aren’t my preference in the first place.
P.6

ぺ、ぺチャって!
きさま平成
生まれでは
ないな。。。っ
W-washboard!?
Just what era is that term from anyway?

ひええ
Hiee

そこかよ!
That’s what you care about?
ぴちり
*flip*

これでも最近は
急成長的に
育ってきてるん
だじぇ~
They might not seem like much, but I’ve been having some sudden growth around here lately.

す。。。
*touch*

きゃー
いやーん
Kya-
Dooon’t.

うきゃ
*kyaa*

うきゃ
*kyaa*

P.7

はれ
Huh?

な、なんで
今日は
手を振払わない。。。
W-why isn’t he pulling his hand…

のだ!?
away!?

ぐら
*wobble*
ぐら
*wobble*

ぺと
*grab*
うひゃ
Uhya!

びく
*twitch*

やーっ
やだやだやだ
たんまっ
No…!
Nowaynowaynoway
timeout!

何が
たんまだ
Timeout from what?

ドキ
*thump*
ドキ
*thump*

お前口だけじゃ
ねーか
俺がこういう事
しないって
安心してたんだろ
You’re all talk, aren’t you?
You think I won’t do anything so you let your guard down around me, right?
P.8

ち、ちが。。。
T-that’s not…

ちがうって
言うならさ
You know if you say that’s not it,

希望通りだろ?
逃げんなよ
then this is exactly what you want, right?
Don’t run away.

動揺しちゃったじゃえ
なーんか今日の
京太郎
迫力あるし
I’m getting flustered.
Somehow Kyoutarou seems kinda forceful today.

からかい
すぎたじょ
I might have teased him a bit too much.

んと
Erm

え、えっと
タコス
食べよっかな。。。
U-umm, how about we go eat some tacos…?

ひゃ
Hya!

今日はさ
You know, today

ごっこじゃ
すませねーそ
won’t end with just playing around.

や。。。
No…

怖くて
涙でちゃ。。。
It’s so scary that
I’m gonna cry…

ひわ。。。
*teary*
P.9

え。。。と
あの。。。タコスの星では
夫婦以外そういう事しちゃ
ダメなんだじょ!
U….um
That is…on the planet of tacos, only married couples are supposed to do that kind of thing!

ぎ
*grit* (as in clenching teeth)

残念だじぇ
Too bad-

じゃあ夫婦でいいよ
Being a married couple is fine then.

え。。。
Eh…?

うそか?
Were you lying?

うそついたんなら
お前とはもう
口きかねー
If you were lying then I won’t listen to anything you say from now on.

あ。。。あう。。。
Ah…au…

ごめ。。。
Sor-…

夫婦だよな?
We’re a married couple, right?
P.10

うそじゃない
ならさ
If you weren’t lying

夫婦なんだし
いいよな
then it’s fine since we’re a married couple.

う、うん。。。
Y-yeah…

ぬる
*slimy*

レロ
*lick*

びく
*twitch*

あ。。。
Ah…

あつ。。。くて
しょっぱい
It’s…hot
and salty.

あついのがいやな感じに
舌にからまってきた
同じ人間の皮膚と
思えないじぇ。。。
A hot and gross sensation is spreading across my tongue.
It’s hard to believe this is another person’s skin…

あ
Ah

ちゅるる
*sluuurp*

びく
*twitch*
びく
*twitch*

く
Kuh

ふぷ
Fupu

ん。。。
Nh…

ぬる
*slimy*

ぬぷぷ
*dribble*

んぷ。。。
Npu…
P.11

さきっぽだけ
じゃなくてさ、
ちゃんと
くわえろよ
Don’t just focus on the tip,
do it right and take the whole thing into your mouth.

う。。。
Ugh…

ぴちゃ
*Schlip*

ちゅる
*slurp*

それじゃ
ものたりないなー
Like this just isn’t enough-

な?
Ok?

イラ。。。
*Irritated*

もっとさあ。。。
Can’t you do it…

愛情込めて
できねえ
かなあ!?
a little more affectionately!?

ごきゅっ
*Schlurp*

のおえっ
Noee

ふお
Fuoh

ゴリュ
*Press*

ゴソッ
*Slide*

ミチ
*full*

う。。。おえっ
Uu…ueeh
P.12

はっ
Haa
はっ
Haa
はっ
Haa

んぐ
Ngh

んお
Nmh

ゴツ
*Thump*

ゴリ
*scrape*

歯立てたら殴るからな
If your teeth touch me I’ll hit you.

スルル
*sliiide*

ズル
*slip*

ゴリュ
*grind*

ゴリッ
*scrape*

ガク
*shake*
ガク
*shake*
ガク
*shake*

んんっん
Nnnnh

ちゅ
*suck*

ちゅぽ
*schlip*

ちゅぽ
*schlip*

ふく。。。
ううう
Fuku…
Uuu

んご
Ngh!

んー
NNH!
P.13

あっあっ
AAHHH!

のど。。。にだすぞっ
I’m gonna…let it out in your throat.

びゅぶ
*splurt*

うぐ
Ugu

びく
*twitch*
びく
*twitch*

ドプ
*spurt*

ドプ
*spurt*

も。。。
無理だじぇ。。。
早く飲まないと
息できな。。。
I can’t…
keep going…
If I don’t hurry up and swallow it
I won’t be able to breathe…

お。。。
Oh…
すなお
じゃねーか
えらいえらい
Well aren’t you being honest,
good girl.

ちゅ
ちゅる
*suck*
*slurp*

お前みたいなのでも
手でするのと
全然違うんだな
Even with a girl like you,
it feels completely different from doing it with my hand.

スポ
*swp*
スポ
*swp*

ずるる
*sliiide*

ぞわ
*shudder*
ぞわ
*shudder*

ん。。。
Nnh…

おぶ。。。
Obu…
P.14
夫婦なら口だけで
終わりじゃない
よな?
If we’re a married couple we can’t stop after just doing it with your mouth, can we?

う、うん
Y-yeah

あっ
Ah!

ムニュウ
*squeeze*

くぱ
*spread*

へー
ネットではみた事
あったけど
本物ってすごいな。。。
Wow-
I’ve seen a few on the internet before,
but the real thing is amazing…

かああ
*blush*

うう~
恥ずかしいじぇ。。。
Uuu~
This is embarrassing…
P.15

ん~?
でもお前のここ
すこし変じゃねえ?
Hmm~?
Still, isn’t your place here a little weird?

くにっ
*squish*

ここ、
皮かむってる
This part,
has some skin covering it.

ムキ
*stretch*

いっいたいっ
いたいじぇ
O-ow!
That hurts!

スル
*slide*
スキ
*twiddle*

やっぱ
タコスの星の
住人だな
Probably because you’re from the planet of tacos.

う。。。
Uu…

びく
*twitch*

びく
*twitch*

も。。。やだ。。。あ。。。
やだよお
No…more…ah…
Don’t

ぺろ
*lick*

ぐす
*sob*

ぐすん
*sniffle*
P.16

いいたいた
IT HURTS!

スブウ
*shove*

う。。。
キツすぎて
イテー
Ugh…
it’s so tight,
that it hurts-

ギチ
*tight*
ギチチ
*tear*

ああっ
AHHH!

力抜いてくれる?
Can you try relaxing a little?

うっ
Uu

スボ
*shove*

ひあ
HIYA!

キュウ
*squeeze*

ギチ
*tight*

スッ
*slide*

おーい
よけいきつくなってん
じゃねえか
Hey,
Don’t go getting even tighter now!

ぬいてえ
TAKE IT OUT
いた。。。
IT HURTS…

うう
Uuu

あー
AHH!
P.17

い
OW

ギリッ
*grab*

いた。。。あ
IT HUR…TS.

力ぬけっ
Relax.

パンッ
*smack*
パン
*smack*
パン
*smack*

お前の穴
ちゃーんと
有効活用して
やって
るんだから
I’ll make sure to put your hole here to good use.

うっ
Uu

うぐっ
Ugh

感謝しろって
You should be grateful.

そうそう。。。
いい感じだぜ
Yeah yeah…
Just like that.

スルッ
*slip*

ズズルル
*sliiiiide*

ガク
*tremble*

ひぐっ
Higu
ううっ
Uuu!

ガク
*tremble*
P.18

初めてで中出し
してもらえるなんて
けっこーレアだぜ
よかったな
Having someone cum inside on your first time is pretty rare you know.
Aren’t you glad?

だっだめ
だじぇ
D-don’t!
さすがに
それは。。。
That really would be…

うるせーって
Shut up.

お前の意志
カンケーねーし
It doesn’t matter what you want.

ぐり
*grind*
ぐり
*grind*

ブチュ
*slosh*

ひぐっ
Higu

あっ
AH!

ズッ
*slide*

ズブッ
*slam*

びく
*quiver*
びく
*twitch*

あっあっ
腰止まんねー。。。
Ahhh
My hips won’t stop…

グリ
*slide*
グリ
*slide*
グリ
*slide*

やめて
STOP IT!

ああ
AHH!

や
NO!
P.19

はっ
Haa
顔みせろ
Show me your face.
はっ
Haa

は。。。
Ha…

やっ。。。やだあ。。。っ
No…no way…

う
Uu
顔見ながら
中出ししてやる
I’ll cum inside while looking at your face.

う
Uu

うう。。。
Uuu…

はー
Haa

はー
Haa

ビューッ
*spluuurt*

ビュク
*spurt*

びく
*twitch*

あ。。。
あっあっあっ
Ah…
AHHHHH

でるぞっくっ。。。
でる。。。でる
うっ
I’m cumming…kuh…
It’s coming…out
Ugh

はー
Haa

は。。。
Haa
はー
Haa

ゴプ
*drip*

ドロー。。。
*ooze*

ガク
*tremble*
ガク
*shake*
P.20

うーん
Hmm…

少しやりすぎたな。。。いや、
しかしからかわられ
続けるのもシャク
だったし。。。
でも明日から気まずく
なるのもなあ
I overdid it a bit…well,
even if it was continuing from her teasing,
it must have been a shock…
Things are definitely gonna be awkward from tomorrow on.

ぐす
*sob*
ぐすん
*sniffle*

お、おい
悪かったな
H-hey
I’m sorry.

本当だじぇ!
痛かったし
怖かったし
You should be!
It hurt!
It was scary!

でもーっ
これで二人は
夫婦だじぇっ
But with this
the two of us really are a married couple.

よろしく
だじぇー!
Let’s get along well, ‘kay?

それもすまん。。。
Sorry about that too…

京太郎とは
そういう男なのだ
To think that Kyoutarou was that kind of guy.

今日も宮水さんに
合えました。。。
I met Miyanaga-san today again too…

おわり。
End.
P.21

あらきムー
Araki muu

あー?
Huh-?

スワップって
やーの
やってみたい
できる?
Do you wanna try doing a swap?

まあ
スワップって
やーても
イミはいろいろ
あるしな
Well ‘swap’ can mean a bunch of things so it depends.

おともだちに
誘われたんだよ
I got invited by a friend.

作業しながら
おともだちと
おしゃべり
とか
できる、て
You can chat with your friends even while working.

わかった
SKYPE
か!!
I get it,
on Skype, huh?

カネモル観察日記
あらきあきら
Observation Diary
Araki Akira

スーパー
かいもの中
Shopping at the supermarket.

こっちこっち
これ買って
Over here,
you should buy this.

カキ水シロップー
いちご
Shaved ice syrup
Strawberry

あれ
こっちや
ないの
Huh,
wasn’t it this one?

なに言ってんの
やっぱこの
ビンのでしょう!
ぜったいコレ!
What’re you talking about?
It’s totally this bottle!
I’m positive!
それ
メーカー
どこの?
What’s the manufacturer’s name on that one?

え
Eh?

め。。。
Ma…
め。。。
Ma…

メイデイー屋
に限るよな
シロップ
May Day – Ya
from what I can tell.

メイデイー
か
May Day huh?

明治屋です
It’s actually MEIDI-YA.

Literally 80% moans... Also, is there a dojo that teaches people to read weird handwritten japanese fonts? I've even seen this exact one used in credit pages before, and it still annoyed me.

note: the sfx: “ハア” is used in 90% of the pages. It means *gasp*,*aah*, *pant*, or *sigh*. For convenience to the editor, i'm putting it here
translated by platypus, for redpiotrus

pg. 2
in file.1 box:
白昼夢 / daydream

pg. 3
panel 2:
♪~❤

pg. 4
panel 1:
ちょっと酒を飲み過ぎたな...前がクラクラする... / I had a bit too much to drink... I'm
feeling dizzy...
panel 3:
おおっ / oho ❤
ボン / sfx: sudden appearance
panel 5: 英理 / Eri...
panel 6: チコッ / bonering sfx

pg. 5
panel 1:
え... / huh...
英理 / Eri!
ハア / hyaah
ん / mmh?
がば / sfx: grab
プルルン / sfx: jiggle
Panel 2:
く〜っ... 相変わらずいい乳してるじゃねか / kuu~ I see your breasts are still as fine as ever
(note, could also be milk in place of breasts, but breasts seems to fit better)
panel 3:
ンツ / nmmm
ムニュ / sfx: groping

pg. 6
panel 1:
あん / ahhn
チュウ / sfx: kissing/suckling
panel 2:
ハア ハア / aah aah
ムニュ / sfx: groping
チュウ / sfx: suckling

pg. 7
panel 1:
ハア / aah
くちゅう / sfx: suck/smack
ん / hmm?
Panel 2:
あ / ah?
はﾝﾂ / ahh
ぷる / sfx: shaking
レロ / sfx: lapping / rolling tongue
panel 3:
あん / ahn
ぐ。。っ / sfx: pulling
スル / sfx: slide off

pg. 8
あ / ahh?
グイ / sfx: grab
ギュ / sfx: squeeze

pg. 9
various ハア and あ sfx...
がば / sfx: grab
カ~~~ッ / sfx: excited
ブロチュ / sfx: presumably pussy licking, don't know for sure

pg. 10
panel 1:
挿入るぞ英理 / alright Eri, I'm sticking it in...
ズブズブ/ sfx: plunge / thrust
panel 3: ん / hmm?
Panel 4:
アツ / aaaa
panel 5:
ん / mm?
英理~! / Eri~!
ブピュ / sfx: pump

pg. 11
panel 1:
英理〜っ最高気持ちいいぞ / Eri~, nothing feels better than fucking you~ (lit. this feeling is the best)
ズブズブ/ sfx: thrust
panel 3:
あ、あなた...す...すごい... / d-dear... this is a...amazing...

pg. 12
panel 1:
ヒ / hii (ahhh)
ビクに / sfx: jolt
あっあなた。い、いいっ。/ dear... s-so good...
panel 2:
そ、そこ / yes, right there...
い、いっ / yes, that's great...
ビュプ / sfx: pump
pg 13:
panel 2:
おおっ / ohhh...
え英理っ。そんなに締付けたらも、もたないぞ / E-Eri... If you squeeze my dick like that,
I won't be able to hold on
ビュプ / thrust
panel 3:
ダ、ダメ / n-nooo
ま。だ。が、我慢して / you've... got to... last a little longer
ズッ / sfx: liquid flowing
panel 4:
あんっああっ / ahhh aaaahhh...
あ。あんた。もっ。と。/ d... dear... m... more...

pg. 14
panel 1:
え。英理っ！/ E... Eri!
あっ。あなた。/ d... dear...
英理 / Eri...
あん / ahh
ズブッ / sfx: thrust
ズポッ / sfx: deep(?)

pg. 15
panel 1:
ん？/ mm?
ズブッ / sfx: thrust
Panel 3:
英理ッ / Eri
英理ッ / Eri

pg. 16
panel 1:
な、膣に / inside your vagina
panel 2:
出すぞ / I'm coming
トピュ / sfx: spurt
panel 3:
お / ohhh
トピュ / sfx: spurt

panel 4:
え、英理~ッ / E-Eri~
あなた / dear~

pg. 17
panel 1:
あ、あ。なた。っ / d.. ea... r....
ビクッ / sfx: twitch twitch

pg. 18
panel 2:
エッ / HUH!
Panel 3:
あんた。まさかこれで終わりなんて事ないでしょうね / Dear... surely you didn't think
I was done with you quite yet...
panel 4:
イ、イヤ もう。腰がたたないって言うか / w-well you know... they say it's bad for your
back and all...
なア。カンベンしてくれよ英理。/ you see... won't you cut me some slack Eri...
ははは / sfx: hahaha

pg. 19
panel 1:
ウツ / uuaah
おつ / ohhh
panel 2:
し、搾りとられる / Y- you're gonna milk me dry~
え、英理っ。も、もう。/ E-Eri... again... already...?
勘弁してくれ〜っ / please have mercy~
bottom of page:
じゃんじゃん / sfx for something happening non-stop / going on

pg. 22
あん / aahn
ぐ。っ / guu

pg. 23
編集後記 / Editor's Notes
どうもこんにちは。/ A big hello to you
今回の本は英理xヒゲおやじ本の第一弾です / This edition's release is the first to feature Eri X Bearded Old Man
ま一内容はいつものごとくですみません / anyway, sorry if the content seems the same as usual
今回、初めてのとも、そーで無いとも楽しんでいただけたら幸いです / Now, even if it's your
first time, I hope you enjoyed it and accepted it happily
それではまた / Until next time
18歳未満のrcのご購入はご遠慮下さい / if you are below 18 please refrain from buying this
発行日 / release date
チューMIX / Chu-MIX

(t/l: low res scans + bubble font on this page make the kanji look weird. If you think a character is wrong, feel free to change it.)

This post has been edited by froppy_one: Feb 1 2016, 07:25

editing bounties

https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=13847 (Saki)
https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=13913 (DConan)

I'll start working on [PNO Group (Hase Yuu)] Chobi ☆ Ichigoten (Chobits) later today. I'll post the translation within the following days. I did send a PM with a few questions and such.

I will start working on
85 [Brain Dead (Eiji)] Akane-san Ero Sugidesu (Kurokami)
Gallery link: https://e-hentai.org/g/111320/65997868c1/

I think I will complete it by tomorrow night (It's 8.40 pm Saturday now).

I am an amateur translator and if someone ended up correcting a significant amount, I am willing to share the bounty with them.


Edit: I wrote the translation. Please proof read. Every page is denoted by its number and also the panel. SFX are denoted by "sfx:" Most of the sfx repeat, so written sfx description wherever possible.
Provided a japanese kanji transliteration too.
Did not denote who speaks which sentence.

Thanks,
seviper9.

This post has been edited by seviper9: Feb 14 2016, 00:22

Literally 80% moans... Also, is there a dojo that teaches people to read weird handwritten japanese fonts? I've even seen this exact one used in credit pages before, and it still annoyed me.

note: the sfx: “ハア” is used in 90% of the pages. It means *gasp*,*aah*, *pant*, or *sigh*. For convenience to the editor, i'm putting it here
translated by platypus, for redpiotrus

Yeaaah, pretty much nothing to fix here.

Hi, first of all thank you very much for checking my translation! I learnt many things from you! I owe you!


Please find below the revised translation incorporating the changes:

Three line gap between every two pages.
Two line gap between every two panels of a page.
Newlines are used extensively, wherever possible, for aesthetic pleasing.
(***) - anything in parantheses denotes a comment for proof-reader and editor (or) more context.
[***] - anything in square brackets denotes a translation note.
SFXs are denoted by prefix "sfx:" and an empty line before and after them.
For editors (and proofreaders)
- you need not put sfx. I translated only for reference, kind of.
- A single moan may have different translations. I tried not to be monotonous. So, please feel free to use whatever you like.



Page 1
Title:
茜　さん　エロ　すぎ　です。
Akane-san is too hot.



Page 2
茜　さん　エロ　すぎ　です。
Akane-san is too hot.

(bottom-left)
ぶれいん　でっど
brain dead



Page 3
(top-left)
茜　さん　エロ　すぎ　です。
Akane-san is too hot.


Panel 1
沖縄
Okinawa [a place in Japan] (no need to include the translation note in the panel)

sfx:
しーさー
Silent wind passing by


Panel 2
蔵木の別荘
Kuraki's villa

藜真との
最終決戦前。。。
Before the decisive battle with Reishin...


Panel 3
(Keita blushing and taken by surprise)
あっ。。。茜さん！
Ah...Akane-san!
ちょっと　待ってくれよ！
Wait　a bit!


(Akane)
Panel 4
(Akane being stubborn and a little desperate)
いやっ！！
No way!!

sfx:
ぶるんっ♡
jiggle (since it is near breasts)

こんなこと
できるの今しか
ないんだから！
Because we can only do this now!


Panel 5
今度戦いに
行けば二度と
帰ってこれないかも
しれないのよ。。。
If you go to this battle, we don't even know if you will be able to return home.

その前に私と
その。。。え。。。Hして
欲しいの！
So before that, um... I want you to have... s...sex with me!



Page 4
Panel 1
(Akane starts rubbing Keita's penis)
sfx:
ぬちゅっ ー　squelch (I don't know - guess - rubbing on wet surface sounds)
くちゅっ　ー rub

慶太君の。。。もう
こんなに硬く
なってるよ。。。
See, you've already become this stiff...

(Keita)
sfx: ビクビクッ
twitch (or tremble)

そ。。。それは
茜さんが
こするからでっ！
I..it's because you are rubbing it!


(Akane)
Panel 2
すごい。。。慶太君の
おちんちん。。。昔に
見た時と全然違う。。。
Wow...your penis... is not at all like in the old days...
(alternate: Wow...your penis looks completely different from (that time when I saw it) when we were kids)

sfx:
コス - rub
コス - rub (I am not sure)


Panel 3
(Akane)
先から透明な
お汁出てきてる。。。
And some transparent juice has started too ooze...

(Akane starts licking)
んっ♡
Mmh!

(Keita)
sfx:
ビクッ　- twitch (or tremble)

うあっ
Wah!

Panel 4
(Akane)
慶太君。。。
Keita-kun....

最初はおっぱいで
してあげるね♡
First, I will do it with my breasts

sfx: むにゅっ - squish! (or press - denoting softness)

(Keita)
ええっ！？
What?　(or just 'eehh!?')


Panel 5
(Keita)
あ。。。茜さん
いったいどこで
こんなこと
覚えたんだよ？
A..Akane-san where exactly did you learn this?

(Akane)
え？　慶太君の
部屋にあった
DVDの中で
こういうこと
してるの
みたんだけど。。。
Ah..I saw a woman do this in a DVD in your room

(Keita)
ちょっつ
何勝手に
みてんだよ！！
Hey!! Don't look at my stuff without my permission!


Page 5
(Akane)
Panel 1
んっ♡ - Mnn!
んっ♡ - Mnn!

sfx:
レロ - lick
レロ - lick


(Akane)
Panel 2
んうっ♡ - Nh!
んむっ♡ - Unh!

sfx:
じゅるっ - slurp (wet slurping sound)
じゅぽっ - pop (sucking-then-popping sound)
にゅるっ - squelch (rubbing against wet surface sound)
ぬりゅっ - squelch (rubbing against wet surface sound)


Panel 3
(Akane)
どう？　慶太君。。。
始めてなんだけど
上手くできてるのかな？
How is it Keita...It's my first time...so, am I doing it good ?

sfx:
じゅるっ - slurp (wet slurping sound)
ぴちゅっ - kiss (I guess)
にゅるんっ - squelch (rubbing against wet surface sound)
ぬちゅっ - squelch (rubbing against wet surface sound)

(Keita)
う。。。うん。。。
茜さんのおっぱい
やわらかくて。。。
すごくきもちいいよ。。。
Y...yeah. Your breasts are so soft! They're making me feel too good.

うあっ
Ahh!

sfx:
ぐちゅっ - drench (or squish)
ぐりっ - roll (like rolling around the tip of dick)
ビクビクッ - tremble

茜さんっ。。。俺もう。。。
でっ。。。でる！！
Akane-san...I am...cum...cumming!!



(Akane)
Page 6
Panel 1
あんっ
Ah!

sfx:
びゅくっ - spurt (spurting sound)
ドピュッ - spurt (spurting sound)
ビュクッ - spurt (spurting sound)

Panel 2
すごい。。。
精液ってこんなに
いっぱい出るんだ。。。
Wow... I never knew so much cum would come out... (Thank you @N04h for the translation)

sfx:
ゴプッ - spurt (spurting sound - last spurt kind of)
ドプッ - spurt (spurting sound - last spurt kind of)


Panel 3
きれいにして
あげるね♡
Let me clean this up♡

sfx:ちゅうううっ - suck (chu is actually a kiss sound but - this looks like a lon~g sucking sound)

(Keita)
うわっ！！
Ahh!



Page 7
Panel 1
(Keita)
茜さんっ！
イったばかりで
そんなに
吸われたらっ。。。
Akane-san! I just came, so if　you suck on it that much...

(Akane)
んっ♡
Mmh!
んっ♡
Mmh!

sfx:
ちゅううっ - suck (chu is actually a kiss sound but - this looks like a long sucking sound)
じゅるっ - slurp (wet slurping sound)


Panel 2
(Akane)
んっ
Nh!
ぷは
Puff!

sfx:
ちゅぽっ - pop (removing the dick from the mouth sound)

慶太君。。。さっき
出したばかりなのにまた
大きくなってるよ。。。
Keita-kun...you just cummed yet it's getting bigger again...

(Keita)
そりゃ茜さんが
吸うからだろ。。。
It's because you are sucking it...

(Akane)
え？
そ。。。そうなの？
Eh? is...is it so? <two sweat symbols>


Panel 3
(Keita)
茜さん。。。
ここまでされたら
おれだってもう
我慢できないよ。。。
Akane-san... I can't hold back anymore now that we've gone this far...
(Alternate: Now that you've done this to me, I can't hold back anymore (or)
Now it has come to this I can't hold back anymore...)

(Akane)
う。。。うん
O..okay


(Akane)
Panel 4
ちょ。。。ちょっと
待ってね。。。
Wai...wait for a second...

やだ。。。私ったらすごく
濡れちゃってる。。。
No way....I am so much wet under here....


(Akane)
Panel 5
すごく
恥ずかしいけど。。。
I am so embarrassed but...

慶太君になら全部
見られてもいいよ。。。
If it's you, I don't mind showing it all...

sfx:
くちっ - gush　(slight gushing out of Akane's love juice)



Page 8
Panel 1
(Keita)
じゃあ挿入れるから
痛かったら言ってよ。。。
Then...I'm putting it in so tell me if it hurts...

(Akane)
う。。。うん
O...okay

sfx:
レちっ - push (i guess or the sound of love juice gushing out because of trying to insert the penis)


Panel 2
(Akane)
あっ - Ah!

sfx:
ズプッ - push

(Akane)
はああっ - Ahhhhhhh!

sfx:
ビクビクッ - tremble


Panel 3
(Keita)
あっ茜さん！
もしかして
初めてだったの！？
Akane-san! Is..is this your first time !?

(Akane)
だ。。。大丈夫。。。
It's...it's okay...

sfx:
っ～ - pause


Panel 4
(Akane)
初めては
慶太君にあげるって
決めてたの。。。
I decided that my first time will be with you...

(Keita)
茜さん。。。
Akane-san...

(Akane)
sfx:
はあ - pant
はあ - pant

慶太君と
こうなれて私
すごく幸せよ。。。
I'm really happy that I am having sex with you...
(Alternate: I'm really happy that I get to have sex with you...)


Panel 5
(Keita)
茜さん...
じゃあ
動かすからね。。。
Akane-san...I will start moving then...

さ。。。最初は
ゆっくり。。。
First...slowly...

sfx:
ズッ - thrust (slow moving of penis in and out)
ズッ - thrust (slow moving of penis in and out)

(Akane)
ふあっ♡
Puff♡ (I am not sure)



Page 9
Panel 1
sfx:
ズッ - thrust (slow moving of penis in and out)
ズッ - thrust (slow moving of penis in and out)

(Akane)
あっ♡
Ahh♡

sfx:
ズッ - thrust (slow moving of penis in and out)

(Akane)
んうっ♡
Nhg!
ひあっ♡
Hya!♡
あっ♡
Ah!♡


(Akane)
Panel 2
ああっ。。。
Ahh...

sfx:
ビクッ - tremble
ビクンッ - tremble

慶太君の
おちんちん
熱いよぉ。。。
Ahh...Keita's penis is hot...

sfx:
ズッ - thrust (moving of penis in and out)
ズプッ - thrust (moving of penis in and out)

はああっ♡
Ahhhh!♡


(Akane)
Panel 3
キ。。。キスして。。。
慶太君。。。
Keita-kun...ki..kiss me


(Akane)
Panel 4
sfx:
ちゅっ - kiss
ぴちゅっ - slurp

んっ♡
Ngh!
んふ。。。♡
Mnn!!♡



Page 10
Panel 1
sfx:
ズッ - thrust (moving of penis in and out)
ズプッ - thrust (moving of penis in and out)
ズチュッ - thrust (moving of penis in and out but in some wet thing)

(Akane)
ひうっ♡
Hyuu
んっ♡
Ngh!
あっ♡
Ah!


(Akane)
Panel 2
ふああっ♡
Puff♡

慶太君。。。
もっと突いてっ。。。
Keita-kun...thrust inside me more...

sfx:
ずっ - thrust (moving of penis in and out)
ずちゅっ - thrust (moving of penis in and out in some wet thing)
ズンッ - thrust (a little heavy thrust - moving of penis in and out)
ズンッ - thrust (a little heavy thrust - moving of penis in and out)

慶太君の
オチンチンが
奥に
ズンズンって
当たるのぉっ！
Your penis is hitting deep inside me!
(Alternate: Keita-kun, your penis is hitting deep inside me again and again so fast!)


Panel 3
sfx:
ズッ - thrust (moving of penis in and out)
ズンッ - thrust (a little heavy thrust - moving of penis in and out)
ズッ - thrust (moving of penis in and out)

(Akane)
んうっ♡
Ngh!
ああっ♡
Aaah!


Page 11
(Akane)
Panel 1
はあっ♡
Ahhh!

sfx:
ズッ - thrust (moving of penis in and out)
ズッ - thrust (moving of penis in and out)
ズッ - thrust (moving of penis in and out)

あっ♡
Aah!


Panel 2
sfx:
むにゅっ - squishy (grope/grasp breasts)
もにゅっ - squishy (grope/grasp breasts)

(Akane)
んっ♡
Mmh!


(Akane)
Panel 3
sfx:
ゾクゾクッ - shiver

ああっ♡
Aaaah!

お。。。おっぱい
きもちいいよぉ。。。
My breasts...feel good!!!


(Akane)
Panel 4
はあんっ♡
Ahh!
んうっ♡
Mmh!


(Keita)
Panel 5
sfx:
ビクビクッ - tremble

あ。。。茜さんっ！
俺。。。もう出そうっ。。。
A...Akane! I am...at my limit...



Page 12
(Akane)
Panel 1
いいよ！
It's okay!

そのままなかにっ！
Cum　inside me!


(Akane)
Panel 2
sfx:
ドプッ - spurt (a big one)

あんっ♡♡♡
Aaaah♡♡♡
あっ♡
Ah♡
んうっ♡
Ngh♡

sfx:
びくっ - shiver
びくんっ - tremble


(Akane)
Panel 3
あっ♡
Ah!

sfx:
ビュプッ - spurt
ドプッ - spurt
ドクッ - spurt

ああっ♡
Aaah!

(Akane)
Panel 4
sfx:
ビクッ - shiver
ビクンッ - tremble

い。。。いっぱい。。。
出て。。。るう。。。
You're... coming... so much...

あっ♡
Ah!
あっ♡
Ah!



Page 13
(Akane)
Panel 1
慶太君2回も
出したのに
まだまだ元気。。。
これならもう一回
できるわよね？
Even though you came twice, it's still ready to go...
You can do it one more time, right ?

sfx:
じゅるっ - lick


Panel 2
(Akane)
今度は私が
上になるね♡
This time I will be on the top.

んしょ
Heave-ho


Panel 3
(Akane)
私がいれる
から慶太君は
じっとしてて。。。
I will put it in so...stay like that...

あっ♡
Ahh!

sfx:
ぬちゃっ - squish (wet insert)
ぐぐっ - (slow movement)


Panel 4
(Akane)
んっ♡
Mmh!

sfx:
ぐっ
ぐぐっ

ま。。。まだ
きつい。。。かな
Is it...still too tight...!?


Panel 5
sfx:
ズプッ - gobble (or push)

はあっ♡♡
Ahhh♡♡



Page 14
(Akane)
Panel 1
あっ♡♡
Aah♡♡
んっ♡
Mnn♡

sfx:
ズッ - thrust
ズッ - thrust
ズンッ - thrust (a little heavy)
ズッ - thrust

はあっ♡♡
Ahh!♡♡


(Akane)
Panel 2
あっ♡
Ah♡

sfx:
ズッ - thrust
ズッ - thrust

んっ♡
Mnn!


(Akane)
Panel 3
あっ♡
Ah♡

き。。。気持ちいいっ。。。
It...it feels good...



Page 15
(Akane)
Panel 1
sfx:
たろっ - grope
たろんっ - grope

ちゅっ - suck
ちゅるっ - suck

ダメぇっ！　おっぱい
そんなに吸われたら
おかしくなっちゃう！
No! if you suck my nipple like that. I will go crazy!


(Akane)
Panel 2
んっ♡
Ngh♡

ああっ。。。ち。。。乳首っ
き。。。気持ちいいっ。。。
Ahhh...my nipples feel good.....

sfx:
ちゅっ - suck
ぴちゃっ - drip


(Akane)
Panel 3
ああっ♡
Aaaah♡

吸って。。。
もっと吸ってぇ。。。
Suck it...Suck it more...

sfx:
ちゅうううううっ - suck (a big one)


(Akane)
Panel 4
ふあっ♡
Puff♡

sfx:
ズチュッ - thrust (a wet one)
ズプッ - thrust (a heavy one)
ズッ - thrust

私。。。今日が
初めてなのに。。。どんどん
気持ち良くなってくるっ！
Though..today is my first time. It just keeps feeling better and better.


(Akane)
Panel 5
けっ。。。慶太君。。。
もっと。。。
Keita-kun....more...

あっ♡
Ah♡

もっとオ〇ンコ
突いてぇっ！
Fuck me more....!

sfx:
びくびくっ - tremble



Page 16
(Akane)
Panel 1
ひゃうっ♡♡♡
Hyu!!!
あっ♡♡
Ah!!
はあっ♡♡
Aah!!

sfx:
ズンッ - thrust (a heavy one)
ズッ - thrust
ズッ - thrust
ズッ - thrust


Panel 2
sfx:
ずろっ - slide

(Keita)
茜さんっ！
俺またでそう。。。
Akane-san, I am about to cum again...

(Akane)
あっ♡
Ahh♡

いいよ。。。
Okay...

sfx:
ずちゅっ - slide (a wet one)


(Akane)
Panel 3
だしてっ！
Cum!

sfx:
びくびくっ - tremble

あっ♡
Ah♡

慶太君の精液で
私のなかを
いっぱいにしてぇ！
Fill me up with your semen!



Page 17
(Akane)
Panel 1
あっ♡
Aah♡

sfx:
びくびくっ♡ - tremble♡

はあああああっ♡
Aaaaaaaahhhhh!♡

sfx:
ビュクッ - spill
ビュッ - spill
ビュプッ - spill


Panel 2
あ。。。
Ah...

すごい。。。
こんなにいっぱい。。。
妊娠しちゃうかも。。。
Wow...lots of it...I might get pregnant...

sfx:
ゴプッ。　- overflow



Page 18
Panel 1
茜さん
もういい加減
やめようよ。。。
Akane-san, isn't it fine now. Let's stop...

え～まだまだ
頑張れるでしょう。。。
もう一回しようよ
Eh~ not yet. You are not even down. Let's do it one more time.


Panel 2
慶太さん！！
Keita san!!

sfx: ガチャッ - clack (door open sound)
ビクッ - surprise

けっせんですよ！！
It's the final battle!!


Panel 3
ほら！　行きますよ！
早くしてください！
Come on! Let's go! Please make it fast!

ちょ。。。ちょっと待って
パンツくらい
かかせろ
Wai...wait a second. Let me atleast put on my pants...


Panel 4
慶太君。。。
しなないで。。。
Keita-kun...Don't die on me...


Panel 5
や。。。
やりすぎて
テラが
からっぽ
だよ。。。
We...we did it too much and I am out of Terra now. (Terra is like 'ki' in that world)

何
やってん
ですか。。。
What the heck ?
(Alternate: What the heck were you doing?)

(*note* below the panel)
ボコボコにされました　ー　They were utterly crushed



おわり　ー　fin.



～あとがき～
～Afterword～

こんにちは府中市在住のEiジです。
Hello!　I am Eiji from Fuchuu (Tokyo metropolis).
ご購入して下さりありがとうございます。
My sincere thank you for purchasing this doujin.
楽しめて頂けましたでしょうか？
Were　you able to enjoy it ?

いや～それにしても茜さんはエロいですね。
Well~ Akane-san is hot, isn't she?
あんなムチムチの女性がそばにいながら、　何もしない慶太はなんあんでしょうか！
What the heck is wrong with Keita for him not to do anything when he has such a voluptuous lady by his side all the time?
理解できませんw (Thanks to @mogugu for the 1st two kanji)
I don't understand...lol

。。。さて、　今後の活動ですが、 夏コミでハヤテ本を出す予定です。
詳しくはサイトをご覧ください。　では～。
....Well, about my activities from here on out, I plan to release "Hayate the Combat Butler"
in this summer comiket. For more details, please visit my site. See ya~


～奥付～
~Colophon~
誌名：茜さんエロすぎです
Doujin name: Akane-san is too hot
発行元：ぶれいんでっど
Publisher: Braindead
著者：Eiジ
Author: Eiji
発行日：2009/4/26
Published date: 2009/04/26 (yyyy/mm/dd)
HP: [usamimi.info] http://usamimi.info/~braindead/
Homepage: [usamimi.info] http://usamimi.info/~braindead/
メール： eiji2033@yahoo.co.jp
Email address: eiji2033@yahoo.co.jp
印刷：松本コロタイプ光芸社様（表紙）
Printing: Matsumoto colour printers Kougeisha-sama (Front cover)
Comflex様(本文）
Comflex-sama(Text)

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CODE

＜１＞

その…とても言い難いのだが…
Umm... this is very difficult to say, but...

現在、イタリカの街には出せる報酬がほとんど無くてな。支払いに、時間が欲しいのだ
Right now, I have almost nothing to reward you for assisting the city of Italica. I would like some time to pay.

無論、ただでとはいわないー
支払いが終わるまで私の体を好きにしてもらって構わない！
Of course, I won't leave you with nothing--
Until you are paid, you can do what you want with my body!

おー
これがギャルゲー的お約束というやつかー
Ooh--
So this is a promise like in a galge--

姫騎士ｘ触手
Princess knight x Tentacles

姫騎士ｘオーク
Princess knight x Orc

リアルでは不可能な。あ～んなことやこ～んなことを！？
This would never happen happen in real life. So stuff like this and that!?

ハァ
Haa

ハァ
Haa

せめて相手は人間にしてもらえないか…
Can you at least let my partner be a human...

ヒィ…
Eek...

＜２＞

でっ
では、これを舐めてもらったりー
Th-
Then, would you lick this--

ってナニ言ってるんだおれは
Geez, what am I saying?

うむわかった
Umm, I understand.

まじか！？おれのムスコをピニャ殿下本当になめてるよぉ！
Are you serious!? Princess Piña is licking my little boy!

さっきより大きくなっているな。気持ち良いのか？
It's gotten bigger than before. Does it feel good?

あ…ああ…いいよ、そのまま咥えてもらったりとか…
Y-yeah... that's good, so would you keep going and suck it...

これで…んいいか？
Like... this?

んっ
Ngh

ふっ
Fuh

んっ…んっ
Ngh... ngh

うおぉぉ姫様の口の中気持ちいぃ～
Uwooh! It feels good inside the Princess' mouth~

＜３＞

うおぉっやばいっでるっ！？
Whoa! Damn, I'm cumming!?

はぁぅ
Haauh

けほっ
Cough

はぁっ
Haah

はぁっ
Haah

はぁっ
Haah

すまない大丈夫か？
Sorry, are you okay?

んっ…ダイジョウブだ…モンダイない
Ngh... I'm fine... there's no problem.

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Mar 10 2016, 12:08

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TL: rookie84

gallery: https://e-hentai.org/g/846377/ecfea245b6/

bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=14161

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その…とても言い難いのだが…
Umm... this is very difficult to say, but...

現在、イタリカの街には出せる報酬がほとんど無くてな。支払いに、時間が欲しいのだ
Right now, I have almost nothing to reward you with for assisting the city of Italica. I would like some time to pay.

無論、ただでとはいわないー
支払いが終わるまで私の体を好きにしてもらって構わない！
Of course, I won't leave you with nothing--
Until you are paid, you can do what you want with my body!

おー
これがギャルゲー的お約束というやつかー
Ooh--
So this is a promise like in a galge--

姫騎士ｘ触手
Princess knight x Tentacles

姫騎士ｘオーク
Princess knight x Orc

リアルでは不可能な。あ～んなことやこ～んなことを！？
This would never happen happen in real life. So stuff like this and that!?

ハァ
Haa

ハァ
Haa

せめて相手は人間にしてもらえないか…
Can you at least let my partner be a human...

ヒィ…
Eek...

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でっ
では、これを舐めてもらったりー
Th-
Then, would you lick this--

ってナニ言ってるんだおれは
Geez, what am I saying?

うむわかった
Umm, I understand.

まじか！？おれのムスコをピニャ殿下本当になめてるよぉ！
Are you serious!? Princess Piña is licking my little boy!

さっきより大きくなっているな。気持ち良いのか？
It's gotten bigger than before. Does it feel good?

あ…ああ…いいよ、そのまま咥えてもらったりとか…
Y-yeah... that's good, so would you keep going and suck it...

これで…んいいか？
Like... this?

んっ
Ngh

ふっ
Fuh

んっ…んっ
Ngh... ngh

うおぉぉ姫様の口の中気持ちいぃ～
Uwooh! It feels good inside the Princess' mouth~

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うおぉっやばいっでるっ！？
Whoa! Damn, I'm cumming!?

はぁぅ
Haauh

けほっ
Cough

はぁっ
Haah

はぁっ
Haah

はぁっ
Haah

すまない大丈夫か？
Sorry, are you okay?

んっ…ダイジョウブだ…モンダイない
Ngh... I'm fine... there's no problem.

Done translations for:
https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=12946
Script link at : [pastebin.com] http://pastebin.com/ahSsxu9S

This should've been posted a few days earlier, but I've been having trouble getting any connection, thus the delay. Sorry for the inconveniences.
Please QC them.

Done translations for:
https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=12946
Script link at : [pastebin.com] http://pastebin.com/ahSsxu9S

This should've been posted a few days earlier, but I've been having trouble getting any connection, thus the delay. Sorry for the inconveniences.
Please QC them.

Here's the proofread version
[www.mediafire.com] http://www.mediafire.com/download/ii08n9x6...+Proofread.docx

Here's the proofread version
[www.mediafire.com] http://www.mediafire.com/download/ii08n9x6...+Proofread.docx

Thank you very much for the proofread. Sorry for the late reply, since there's no notifications for updates on threads.

There are quite a lot of mistakes that I didn't realize, and I expected some of them in Yui's rants. Again, thank you for the corrections, Vilis. I'll keep them in mind to keep improving myself.

excellent, Tora editing bounty is up at https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=14231