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post Apr 3 2015, 06:35
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QUOTE(kdrt @ Apr 2 2015, 00:14) *

gallery:here
bounty:here

[SUPER SNIP]



Red_Piotrus asked me to take a quick look at the script here. I checked over the first page and a half or so. On the whole everything seems well enough, though there are a couple of spots to point out.

On page 2, you have a missing line in the script (ビックリした~), which should be "You scared/startled me~!" Farther down, 今日なら約束のアレをするのにちょうどいいかなと思って・・・, your line isn't bad exactly but the English is rough. I would probably go with "I was thinking today would be a pretty good time to do THAT, like you promised..."

On page 3, there's quite a bit of awkward English, but I'll let our proofreaders handle most of that. The only thing I'll be specific on is your use of "warrior". If that's a term used in the series, then obviously you should use it. If not, though, I would probably go with "swordsman".

If you ever want a 2nd opinion on lines, feel free to shoot me a PM. Even better would be to post a short request in the random translation thread, where we translators hang out to get advice on sticky lines, unreadable kanji, etc. There are some very good translators over there who are happy to help with small requests.

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post Apr 5 2015, 03:13
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second non-h Madoka story based on my own scans

[puu.sh] https://puu.sh/h0cCg/4cc477fcc3.txt

https://e-hentai.org/g/724615/a823ff4a3d/

As the TL said, "It's like, 95% kissing sound effects, so it only took a little bit.", so an easy editing job.

https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=12234
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post Apr 6 2015, 07:40
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Page 12

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...Hey, Madoka...

want you to kiss me now...


Suggestion: "I want you to kiss me now..." or "I... want you to kiss me now..." if you want to show her embarrassment a bit more. The only reason I suggest this is because the sentence is connected and when I connect it, becomes "Hey, Madoka want you to kiss me now" which seems like Madoka is a 3rd party and Homura is talking to someone else even if the art doesn't suggest this.
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post Apr 6 2015, 17:24
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QUOTE(CrimsonClown @ Apr 6 2015, 07:40) *

Page 12
Suggestion: "I want you to kiss me now..." or "I... want you to kiss me now..." if you want to show her embarrassment a bit more. The only reason I suggest this is because the sentence is connected and when I connect it, becomes "Hey, Madoka want you to kiss me now" which seems like Madoka is a 3rd party and Homura is talking to someone else even if the art doesn't suggest this.


To be honest. I wasn't really sure how to word that. Because no matter how you phrase it, it almost implies they hadn't been kissing up until that point. Which would obviously not be the case.
"Madoka, I want you to kiss me this time." Might work.
"Madoka, I want you to take the lead and reciprocate my kiss by you initiating a kiss with me this time." sounds awful.

So I'm open to any suggestions.
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post Apr 6 2015, 21:38
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I did have the same impression as I was going through the script. When I looked at the gallery, they were already kissing at that point but my guess is that Homura wanted her to take the lead. I would go with "Madoka, I want you to kiss me now" or anything close to that. That second one is a bit too long and the original felt incomplete but simply completing the sentence made it feel right for me. You can probably leave out the word "kiss" and make something like "Madoka, it's your turn now..." or "Madoka, I want you to take the lead..." which is more straightforward.
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post Apr 7 2015, 02:51
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Thanks to crimson and ulti for proofreading. Looking forward to work with you guys again.
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post Apr 10 2015, 03:22
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I was send a link to an unedited non-h yuri script for Saki https://e-hentai.org/g/727985/5056fe0ec6/

Looks nice, so I am adding it to our editing queue.

script: [safe.yuriproject.net] http://safe.yuriproject.net/src/JOCego_1.2.txt (TL Radzeer) [from [safe.yuriproject.net] http://safe.yuriproject.net/res/15630.html]

bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=12250

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post Apr 10 2015, 10:06
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Okay, so I'm done editing Naked Snake. [mega.co.nz] Here is the link to it. I need someone to quality check this before I can say that it's finished. I still have the credit page left, but that can only be finished after the QC anyway.

So, tell me if there are things that don't look quite right, or if there is a need to change some texts and fonts. I'll fix them. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif) Also, tell me if the font size looks too small. This is the first time I'm working with such large dimensions.
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post Apr 10 2015, 14:37
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Proofread for Hot Orange

PG 3
QUOTE
Yes, until now no one else has shown up.

Suggestion: Yes, no one else has shown up yet.

PG 4
QUOTE
Recently this is my favourite, I brought it from home, you can try it too if you want, Miyanaga-san.

Suggestion: This has been my favourite recently, I brought it from home, you can try it too if you want, Miyanaga-san.

PG 8
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Good morning...

Correction: Good afternoon... (They have been using good afternoon and it is sunset)
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post Apr 12 2015, 14:28
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QUOTE(andrewijk @ Apr 10 2015, 03:06) *

Okay, so I'm done editing Naked Snake. [mega.co.nz] Here is the link to it. I need someone to quality check this before I can say that it's finished. I still have the credit page left, but that can only be finished after the QC anyway.

So, tell me if there are things that don't look quite right, or if there is a need to change some texts and fonts. I'll fix them. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif) Also, tell me if the font size looks too small. This is the first time I'm working with such large dimensions.


A quick technical note: p.2 is over 10mb, galleries will not accept files of that size. Try to keep all files at 9mb or less.

Otherwise, looks very good, nice jobs on SFXes!
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post Apr 17 2015, 04:36
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QUOTE(Red_Piotrus @ Apr 12 2015, 20:28) *

A quick technical note: p.2 is over 10mb, galleries will not accept files of that size. Try to keep all files at 9mb or less.

Otherwise, looks very good, nice jobs on SFXes!


Hey there. You can get away with small file size if you save it right. Try it on PNG-8.
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post Apr 17 2015, 09:20
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QUOTE(Ser Maggot @ Apr 17 2015, 08:36) *

Hey there. You can get away with small file size if you save it right. Try it on PNG-8.


That's what I ended up doing anyway, but thanks for the advice.


In any case, I'll be editing Homuhomu, Megane Yamerutteyo. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)
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post Apr 18 2015, 04:05
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The bounty said to post here before accepting. I'm hoping to edit Ai no Solea. Bounty 12150.

First time doing this (or using Gimp for more than cropping) so I'm not sure how long it'll take but I'll give it my best.
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post Apr 19 2015, 09:16
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QUOTE(tbarim @ Apr 17 2015, 21:05) *

The bounty said to post here before accepting. I'm hoping to edit Ai no Solea. Bounty 12150.

First time doing this (or using Gimp for more than cropping) so I'm not sure how long it'll take but I'll give it my best.


EHCOVE is open to working with new editors, but please observe our quality standards. Best, post the first few pages in our editor's watercooler thread and ask for reviews. Then, re-edit them and repeat until it's at the accepted quality level. Make sure to check our editing FAQ, too.
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post Apr 24 2015, 08:36
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[Jinsei Ano Denchuu Made Sakusen (Shiba Syouzi)] Daisuki na Hito (Kantai Collection) [Digital]

Gallery: https://e-hentai.org//g/726097/9216767ebc/

TN: Kitakami calls Ooi Ooicchi(大井っち) which is basically a nickname.

P.1

ふ。。。
Fu…

んん。。。
Nnh…

北上さん!?
Kitakami-san!?

なにを。。。
What is she…

ん?
Hmm?

ふ---
Fu---

ふ---
Fu---

なんだ
大井か
Oh,
it’s Ooi.

何か用か?
Do you need something?

あ あの。。。
北上さんが
ここにいるって
聞いて。。。
U-umm…
I heard that Kitakami-san was here…

ああ
北上か。。。
Ah,
Kitakami huh…?

おい
Hey

ぷはっ
Puhaa

んもう
邪魔しないでよ!
Jeez,
don’t interrupt me!

客だぞ
You have a guest.


大井っちじゃん!
Oh,
It’s Ooicchi!

どしたの?
What’s up?


P.2

あ。。。
Um…

あなたたち
何してるの。。。?
What are you two doing…?

お前に用だとさ
Apparently she was looking for you.

あー。。。
今手が離せないから
あとでいい?
Ohh…
My hands are kinda full at the moment so could we talk later?

話がるなら
先に済ませていいぞ
If you need to talk to her
you can go ahead and take care of that first.

ふーん
そんなこと言って
いいのかなー?
Hmmm
Are you really sure you want to say that?

。。。よくないです
…I don’t.

素直で
よろしい!
Being honest is good!

だから
何やってるのよ!!
Like I said,
what are you doing!?

うっ。。。
Ugh…

ん。。。
Nn…


P.3

なにって
セックスだよ?
What?
We’re having sex.

セッ。。。!?
Se…!?

提督の赤ちゃん
欲しいんだけど
なかなか出来なくってさー
I want to have the Admiral’s baby,
but so far no such luck.

この前なんか
一晩中挿入れたままでも
ダメだったし。。。
Last time he came while inserted all the way but it still didn’t work…

もう
やんなっちゃうよねー
It’s getting pretty frustrating.

え。。。?
Eh…?

なに言いてるの
。。。?
What’re you saying…?

北上さんは
私と。。。
You and I are…

うーん。。。
まあ いろいろ
あってね
Yeah…
Well a lot has happened, ya know?

いつか言おうって
思ってたんだけど。。。
I was planning to tell you someday but...


P.4

あたし
提督と
ケッコンします
I’m going to get married to the Admiral.

え。。。。。。
Huh…

どういう
こと。。。?
What do you mean…?

どうって。。。
What you ask…

もう 大井っちの
えっちー
Jeez, you pervert Ooicchi.

そういうわけで
スマンな
So that’s that.
Sorry.

ブチッ
*pissed*

お?
Oh?

あんた。。。
私の北上さんに
なにしたの
You…
What did you do to my Kitakami-san?


P.5

。。。まあ
落ちつけよ
…Well,
calm down.

触らないで!
Don’t touch me!

そんなに嫌わなくても
いいだろう。。。
You don’t have to be so angry…

うるさい!
善くも北上さんを。。。
Shut up!
How dare you do that to Kitakami-san…

一緒に戦う
仲間なんだ
We’re comrades fighting on the same side.

仲良くしようぜ
Let’s get along.

あんたが二度と
北上さんに近づかない
っていうなら
考えてもいいわ
If you agree to never come near Kitakami-san again,
I’ll think about it.

それは無理な
相談だ
I can’t agree to that condition.

この。。。。。。ッ!!
You……!!

そもそも選んだのは
北上だぞ
In the first place,
Kitakami is the one who gets to decide that.

どうせい何か弱みを握って
脅したに決まってるわ!
この鬼畜!!
No doubt you found out some secret and blackmailed her with it!
You fiend!!

お前なあ。。。
Now see here…


P.6

もう。。。
しょうがないなあ
Jeez…
I guess it can’t be helped.

んッ!
Nnm!

ほら
舌だして。。。
Here
stick out your tongue…

はい。。。
Ok…

んっ
Nnh

ちゅく
ちゅく
*slurp*
*slurp*

んんッ
Nnnm

北上さん。。。
Kitakami-san…

じゃ
Alright then,

大井っちも
一緒にしよっか
Should I do it with Ooicchi too?

え?
Eh?


P.7

すぐ準備するから
ちょっと
待っててねー
We’ll be done in a sec,
so just wait a bit, ‘kay?

き 北上さん
。。。?
K-Kitakami-san…?

はい
ご開帳
Alright,
Let’s take this off~

あの。。。
Umm…

んー!
大井っちのおっぱい
やわらかーい
Amnh!
Ooicchi’s breasts are so soft!

ふあっ
Fuaah

あむ
あむ
Amnh
Mnnh

き 北上さん!
こんな所で。。。ッ
K-Kitakami-san!
Doing it here…

あッ
Aah

もう湿ってるね。。。
You’re wet already huh…?

おっぱいいじられて
興奮しちゃった?
Did having your breasts teased turn you on?

だって。。。。。。。
久しぶりだから。。。
That’s because……
It’s been a while…

もー
可愛いなー!
Jeez!
You’re so cute!

ひう
Hiu


P.8

だめ。。。ッ
Don’t…


Ah

あいつが
みてるのに。。。!
Not while he’s watching…!

んッ
Nnh

いいじゃん
大井っち可愛いとこ
見せてあげようよ
It’s fine~
Let’s show him how cute you are.

ほらほら
いつもみたいに
舐めっこしてさ
Here,
let’s lick each other like we usually do.

ほう
Whoa

あっ。。。
Aah…

ハア
Haa

ハア
Haa

んっ。。。
Nnm…

んんう
Nnu

北上さんの
たくさん
溢れてくる。。。
Kitakami-san’s juices are overflowing…

私の北上さん。。。
My Kitakami-san…

ニュル
*slurp*


P.9

あっ
Aah

んんッ
Nnm

コク
*Gulp*
コク
*Gulp*

あんなヤツに
絶対渡さない。。。
I absolutely won’t let that man have her…

んっ
Nm

はあ
Haa

はあ
Haa

すっごく
気持ちよかったよ!
That felt amazing!

んっ!
Nmh!

大井っち大好き!
I love you Ooicchi!

ほ ほら
みなさい!
T-there,
you see?

北上さんは
私といるのが
一番幸せなんだからーー
Kitakami-san is happiest when she’s with me.

あんた なんか。。。
Someone like you…


P.10

いやあ
面白いもん
見せてもらったよ
Well, you certainly showed me something interesting.

女同士ってのも
いいもんだな
It’s pretty good between two girls too, huh?

あ。。。
Ah…

は。。。
Haa…

北上さん!
Kitakami-san!

お前たちが
そこまでヤってるのには
正直驚いたが。。。
Honestly, I’m surprised that you two have gone that far…

ちょ ちょっと
なにやってるのよ!
H-hold on,
what are you doing!?

お前は
楽しんだんだから
次は俺の番だろう
You had your fun,
now it’s my turn.

いいからその
おぞましいものを
はやく抜きなさい
Listen here,
take that disgusting thing out of her this instant.

ああ
AHHH

ダメ!!
Don’t!!

抜いちゃ。。。
Don’t…


Ha


Ha

ダメ。。。
take it out…

北上は
こう言ってるが
You heard her.

あッ
Aah

ひう
Hiu

どうして。。。
Why…?


P.11

よ。。。っと
Up…we go.
[lit. “Yo…tto” something said when lifting something.]

わっ。。。
Waa…

北上は
俺のチンコ
好きだもんな
You really love my dick
huh, Kitakami?


Ah

うん!
Yeah!

好き
I love it.


Ah

提督のチンコ
好きいっ!
I love the Admiral’s dick!

女同士で
舐めあってるのと
どっちがいい?
Between this and two girls licking one another,
which is better?

あン
Ahn

あは
Aha

こっちがいい
This is better.

提督のおっきいチンコで
奥のほういっぱい
コスらるのがいいのッ
The Admiral’s big dick rubbing me deep inside is the best

。。。だそうだ
…that’s how it is.

ああ
AHH

そんな。。。
No way…

あッ
Aah


P.12

これでまだ
俺が脅してるように
見えるか?
Does it still seem like I’m blackmailing her?

あは
Aha

すき
I love you.


Ah

ていとく
Admiral

すき
I love you.

すきい
I love yooou.

そ それは。。。
T-that’s…

分かったら
そこで大人しく
見とけ
If you understand,
just sit there quietly and watch.

やっ
Yaa

あン
Ahn

お?
Oh?

なんだよ
What is it?

ふー
Haa

ふー
Haa

大井っち
いじめちゃ
ダメだよ!
Don’t bully Ooicchi!

そんなつもりは
ないんだが。。。
That’s not what I meant to do…

もしかして
あたしと大井っちの見て
嫉妬しちゃった?
Did watching Ooicchi and I make you jealous?

やかましい
You’re too noisy.

あん
Ahn


P.13

北上さん。。。
Kitakami-san…

あなた。。。
本当に
そいつのこと。。。
Do you…
Really like him…?

うん 大好き
Yeah, I like him.

愛してる
I love him.

嬉しいこと
言って
くれるじゃないか
Well aren’t you saying something great.

えへへー
Ehehe

いい子には
ご褒美だ!
Here’s a reward,
for being a good girl!


Ah

ダメ!
Don’t!

イちゃう
I’ll cum!

いいぞ!
It’s fine!

イけ。。。!!
Cum…!!

ああ
Aah

あー
AHHH


P.14

あう。。。
Au…

はー
Ha-

ごぷ
[lit. “Gopu” – really wet and overflowing sfx – maybe *ooze* or something but I don’t really know for this one.]

はー
Ha

黙ってて
ゴメンね。。。
I’m sorry I didn’t tell you…

あたし
大井っちも
提督のことも
大好きだから
I love both Ooicchi and the Admiral.

北上さん。。。
Kitakami-san…

。。。だからね
…so that’s why

ぐに
*Press* [lit. “guni” – like a squishy touching sound]

大井っちも
一緒に
気持よくなって
欲しいな
I want Ooicchi to feel good together with us too.

いや。。。!
私はそんなのいらな
いぃ
No…!
I don’t need tha-
AAH

ああ
押し返してくる
この感じ
Aah
I can feel it pushing into me.

やっぱり
経験はないのか
As expected,
you’ve never done it before, huh?

ピュ
*squirt*


P.15

北上も
最初はこんな
具合いだったなあ
It was like this at first for Kitakami too.

なに これ。。。
What is this…?

ふー
Haa

ふー
Haa

む!
あたしのが
ユルくなったみたいな
言い方やめてよね!
Hey!
Stop making it sound like I’m weak!

う。。。
うごかさないで。。。!
D…
Don’t move…!

こんな。。。
おくまで。。。
Like this…
So deep inside…

痛いか?
Does it hurt?


あう
Ha
Au

そうじゃ。。。
なくて。。。
That’s not…
the problem…

だよな
もう声が
甘くなってきてる
Thought so.
Your voice is already starting to sound sweet.


Ah


Ah

北上さんにも
さわられてない
ところ。。。
A place where Kitakami-san hasn’t touched…

こんな男に。。。
By a man like this…

そういえば
大井も血が出ない
んだな
Now that I think about it,
you’re not bleeding Ooi.

あう
Auu

いっぱい
触りっこしてたからねー
We’ve touched each other a lot after all~

あたしが
破りちゃった
I ended up tearing it.


Ah

お前ら。。。
You girls…


P.16

しかし
こうなると
大井も可愛いもんだな
Anyway,
Ooi really is cute like this.

浮気しちゃ
ダメだよ!
Don’t go cheating on me!


Haa

お前が言うか。。。
You’re one to talk…


Ahh

。。。
もう射精そうだ!

I’m gonna cum!

あう
Auu

あっ
Aah


あ!
射精すのは
あたしのナカ
だかんね!
Ah!
You’re only allowed to cum inside me!

あっあっ
AHHH

。。。。。。!!
腟内。。。大きくーー
……!!
Inside me…It got bigger--

じゃあ そこで
股広げて待ってろッ!
In that case,
wait over there with your legs spread!

知らない。。。
I don’t know…

ああ
AAH

あー
AHH

こんなの
しらない。。。
I don’t know what’s happening…

はーい!
‘kay!

いく。。。
I’ll cum…

あう。。。!
Au…!


Fu


Uu

いく!
I’m gonna cum!

ううう
Uuuu

やばっ。。。!
Oh shi-…!

いっちゃう。。。!
I’m cumming…!


P.17

う。。。
。。。っく
Ugh…
…Kuh

あー!
出してる!!
Ahh!
You came inside!

ドプ
ドプ
*Spurt*
*Spurt*

悪い。。。
気持ち良すぎて
間に合わなかった。。。
Sorry…
It felt too good, so I couldn’t make it in time…

ちゃんと
言ったのに!
Even though I told you not to!

だから
悪かったって
。。。
That’s why I’m apologizing…

はー
Haa

はー
Haa

ブピュ
*drip*

なかに
あついのが。。。
Inside of me
something hot is…

もー あたしの分
ちゃんと残ってる?
Jeez,
do you at least have enough for me too?

ああ まかせろ
Yeah, leave it to me.

あいつの
触れてた所が
熱い。。。
It feels hot where he was touching me…


Ah

あン
Ahn


P.18

お前。。。
うまくなったな
You’ve… gotten pretty good at this.


Haa

ホント!?
Really!?

ああ。。。
すぐに。。。射精そうだ
Yeah…
It feels like…I’ll cum right away.


Haa

奧がまだ
じんじんする。。。
It’s still tingling deep inside me…


Ah


Haa


Nnh

今度こそ
提督の赤ちゃん
できるかな?
I wonder if I’ll be able to
have the Admiral’s baby this time?

。。。頑張ってくれ
…Do your best.

だめ。。。
It’s no good…

っ。。。
イクぞ。。。!!
Ngh…
I’m cumming…!!

指じゃ
届かない。。。
My finger
just won’t reach…

うん!
来てっ!!
Yeah!
Cum!!


Ah

ナカに。。。
い。。。っぱい!
Inside me…
so…much!


Nnh

あっ
Aah

っくう。。。!
Kuh…!


Ah

ああ
あー
AHHHHH


P.19

はあ
Haa

はあ
Haa

トプ
*spurt*

トプ
*spurt*

あー
気持ちいいー
Ahh
That felt great.

お っと。。。
*Oof*

ねえ!
Hey!

ん?
Hmm?

今度は前から
ギューってしてよ!
This time, let’s do it face to face while hugging!

まだやるのか。。。
You still want to do it...?

えー だめ。。。?
Ehh, you don’t…?

。。。次で
打ち止めだぞ
…one more time then I’m down for the count.

んー。。。
Hmm…

それじゃあ
最後は
大井っちにあげるよ
In that case,
I’ll give the last time to Ooicchi.

え。。。?
Eh…?


P.20

あたしたちの
見ながら
こっそりいじってたでしよ?
You were secretly playing with yourself while watching us weren’t you?

そ それは。。。
T-that’s…

ほらほら
遠慮しないで
Hey now,
no need to hold back.

あ。。。
Ah…

さあ
いってみよう!
Alright,
let’s get started!

まったく。。。
Jeez…

勝手なやつだな
What a whimsical girl.

ダメッ!
Don’t!

またアレが
挿入ってきたら。。。
If that thing goes into me again…

なんだ
嫌なのか。。。?
What
you don’t want to…?

止めないと。。。
If I don’t stop him…

ほら
挿入ってくぞ
Here,
I’m gonna put it in.

止めなきゃ。。。
I have to stop him…


P.21

止ー
Stop-

お。。。?
Oh…?

さっきより
だいぶスムーズに
なったな
It went in a lot easier this time.

少しは男のよさが
わかってきたか。。。
Have you started to understand the good points of men a little...?

。。。ん?
…Hm?

ああ
Aah

あー
Ah

ピュル
*squirt*

あー
Ah

大井っちってば
聞こえてない
みたいだよ?
It seems like Ooicchi can’t hear you, huh?

すっかり
提督のチンコに
夢中だねえ
She’s completely focused on the Admiral’s dick.


Haa

あう
Au

おいおい。。。
しっかりしてくれよ
Hey now…
Get ahold of yourself.

あっ。。。
Ah…


P.22

。。。。。。
なに。。。?
……
What…?

男とするのも
いいもんだろ?
Doing it with a man is pretty good too, right?

そう。。。ね
確かに。。。凄いわ
That’s…right.
It really is…amazing.

それは
良かった
Well that’s good.
I’m glad.

だけど。。。
But still…

北上さんといると
もっと温かい
気持ちになるの
When I’m with Kitakami-san,
It’s more of a warm feeling.

私には
北上さん
だけだから。。。
Kitakami-san is all I have so…

だから。。。
とらないで。。。
So please…
Don’t take her away…

大井っち。。。
Ooicchi…

独りはイヤ。。。
I don’t want to be alone…


p.23

それじゃあ
お前も俺とケッコン
するか
In that case,
how about I marry you too?

へ!?
Huh!?

あ。。あなた
なに言って。。。。。。
Y-you
what are you saying……?

北上は譲れんが
一人が二人になっても
問題ない
I won’t give up Kitakami-san,
but adding one more shouldn’t be a problem.

そういうこと
じゃ。。。!
That’s not the…!

それ
いいじゃん!
That’s a great idea!

大井っちも
ケッコンすれば
あたしたち
家族だよ!
If he marries you too Ooicchi,
we’ll be family!

北上さんまで!
You too, Kitakami-san!?

それにね
この人と家族に
なるんだって
思ってえっちすると
Not to mention,
becoming part of this guy’s family means we can do all sorts of perverted things.

すっごい幸せな気持ちに
なるんだよ
We’ll be really happy for sure.

ね! 提督
Right,
Admiral?

まあな
Well yeah.

。。。で
どうする?
…So,
how about it?

あう。。。
Au…

う。。。
Uu…

北上さんが。。。
いいって言うなら
If Kitakami-san…
says it’s alright.

決まり!
You bet!


P.24

いくぞ。。。
I’m gonna start…

ん。。。
Nn…

まさかお前と
こんなことに
なるとはな。。。
I never thought I’d be doing this sort of thing with you…


Aah

それは。。。
こっちの。。。セリフよ
That’s…
my line…you know.

はあ
Haa

。。。やっぱり
嫌か。。。?
…do you not want to…?


Nh

そんなこと
言ってないでしょ。。。
I never said that…

。。。これから
よろしくね
…let’s get along from now on.

了解
Roger that.


P.25

ふ。。。
ん。。。
Fu…
Nmh…

ちゅ
*kiss*

んっ
Nnh


Nn

んんう
Nnu…

んっ
Nnh

ふう
Fuu

ぷは
*phaa*

ッ!
Nng!

んッ
Nnm

ちゅく
ちゅく
[Kissing sfx. – maybe *slurp* or something]


P.26

もう。。。ッ
射精そうだ!
I’m…
gonna cum!


Haa

はい
Ok

わたし。。。
も。。。!
Me…
Too…!

。。。っく
…kuh

あう
Auu

イくぞっ!
Cumming!


AH

ああ
AHH

ッー
[Just erase the ッ for this one.]

あッ
AH

あー
AHHH

ふー
Haa

ふー
Haa


P.27

そういえば。。。
Oh yeah…

北上さんはどうして
提督とケッコン
することしたの?
What made you want to get married to the Admiral, Kitakami-san?

んー?
Hmm?

さあ。。。
なんでだろうねー
Dunno…
I wonder why~

え。。。?
Eh…?

北上とは
一番付き合いが
長いからな。。。
I’ve known Kitakami for the longest after all…

情もわいて
くるさ
My feelings just sort of overflowed.

そーそー!
そんな感じ!
Yeah, yeah!
Something like that!

それだけ。。。?
That’s it…?

提督はあたしが
いないとダメダメだから
仕方ないよねー
The Admiral’s completely hopeless without me around,
so there wasn’t much of a choice, huh?

ちなみに
先に誘ってきたのは
北上だ
By the way,
the one who made the first move was Kitakami.

ちょっと!
そーいうの
バラさないでよ!
Hey!
Don’t go around revealing that sort of thing!


P.28

あとがき
Afterword

提督とケッコン(仮)する様子が想像できない艦娘ナンバーワンの大井と
どうやったら円満にケッコン出来るかを妄想した話でした
I had the wild idea to try and figure out a situation where the most unlikely fleet girl to marry the admiral, Ooi, would be happily married to him.

エロ同人なのに話作りでつまづいて何度も心が折れかけましたが、
北上と二人仲良くチンコ中毒にしてしまうりは楽しく描けたと思います
Even though it was only for an ero doujin, coming up with an idea like that nearly broke my heart several times. Drawing Kitakami and Ooi getting along by becoming addicted to the Admiral’s dick was fun, though.

それでは、 この度は僕の本を手に取って下さりありがとうございました。
まだ描いてみたい濫娘は沢山いるので、
どこかで見かけた時にはまた手に取っていただければ幸いです。
That being said, thank you for picking up a copy of my book.
There are still plenty of fleet girls that I want to draw so if you see any of my books in the future, I’d be glad if you’d get them too.

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Just one thing to mention about the Daisuki na Hito doujin.

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My suggestion is something along the lines of "Last time he came all the way inside me but it still didn't work..."

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[EHCOVE] [RPG COMPANY2] Fujishima Spirits 4 (OMG) -> story 4 (pages 76-95) edit

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QUOTE(afire1 @ Apr 25 2015, 09:05) *

[EHCOVE] [RPG COMPANY2] Fujishima Spirits 4 (OMG) -> story 4 (pages 76-95) edit

I wish to partake this editing.

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