[X] My Assistant

Hmm, so I was on the right track the first time around huh. Then let's go with that. Maybe the bubble should look something like this then

"Because Senpai is an adult!" or "Because you're an adult, Senpai!"

... //To show that there is a pause.

"Small children are not allowed to do this kind of stuff!" (Oops)

Yeah it was right the first time but there is still a problem of whether other readers will get it or not. It confused us and it really took us a while to get it so I don't really expect readers will immediately understand it the first time around.

That works and also I was just thinking that you can also add a "TL note" and add something humorous to go with that originally intended humor. Something like "TL note: Due to Takanashi's extreme love on small things, he couldn't bear calling Taneshima an adult and thus making the mistake of contradicting himself immediately".

Yeah it was right the first time but there is still a problem of whether other readers will get it or not. It confused us and it really took us a while to get it so I don't really expect readers will immediately understand it the first time around.

That works and also I was just thinking that you can also add a "TL note" and add something humorous to go with that originally intended humor. Something like "TL note: Due to Takanashi's extreme love on small things, he couldn't bear calling Taneshima an adult and thus making the mistake of contradicting himself immediately".

Haha, I love that note. I'll gladly add that as a TL note. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/laugh.gif)

I'll edit the script then.

Glad we got that done, it was really challenging and soft of fun in a way. Something that's different from the usual simple translations is nice for a change. It's a good thing I've watched the series multiple times before and I can still recall a lot of the memorable scenes.

Indeed, it's still nagging me a bit so I probably haven't seen the last of it yet, but this should at the very least be close enough. I remember watching both season a bunch of times as well as reading the manga so I'm also quite familiar with the characters. It's a lot easier (and more interesting) to work on doujins of known series.

Either way, to commemorate this great achievement, here is the next script. This time it's the last part of Fujishima spirit 3. It was a long time ago since I last watched the anime and I haven't read the work so I'm not all that familiar with this universe so there are some spots that might need some polishing.

Page 75

愛の御旗のもとに・・・
The source of the love flag...

//I have no idea what he/she is referring to but that's (most likely) what it says. The sentence is not complete so it's hard to say for certain.

愛
Love

サクラ大戦３クリア記念でエリカです。
Here is Erica as a commemoration for me having cleared Sakura wars 3.

あの修道服好きなんだけど露出させずらいんで全部脱がしちゃいました。
I really liked those religious clothes, but I kept stripping her until she was

completely nude.

捕まって武器と服を剥ぎ取られた哀れなシスターといった状況ということにしておきましょう。
Let's leave the pitiful sister that has been completely stripped of her weapons and

clothes alone for now and return to the matters at hand.

サクラ３は戦闘システムがなかなか面白くなっててよかったです。
The combat system in Sakura wars 3 was quite interesting.

敵が弱いのもまたよし。
Another good point was that the enemies were weak.

楽に勝てるからサクサク進められるしね。
If you can win easily you can progress comfortably after all.

でもミニゲームは難しい・・・
But the mini-games were difficult...

Page 76

あ　あの娘どうよ？
Oh, what about that girl?

ってアレ、小学生だろ？
Hold on, isn't that an elementary school girl?

可愛いじゃん
She's cute, isn't she.

見ろよあのケツ
Look at that bum.

それにこんな時間にあんな格好で
Also, she's wandering around at this time looking like that.

お兄さんとしては放っておけないなぁ
There's no way I can leave her alone like that, right?

ロリコン
Lolicon

うっさい
Shut up

ずいぶんと座標が・・・・
The coordinates got quite....

//Since the sentence is cut off I can't say for sure but it seems she wants to say that she is far off her intended position. Did she teleport or something?

・・・めんどうですわ・・・・・
...how troublesome...

気の強そうな露出癖の小学生　　　・・・イイネ
She seems like a strong-willed exhibitionist elementary schooler....how nice

Page 77

じゃ きまり
It's decided then.

何か視線が・・・・
I can feel someone watching...

いつもどーりに
Let's do the usual then.

二時間前
2 hours before chapter 130

//No idea about the context, have not read the original work.

かーのじょ　何してんの？
Girl, what are you doing?

Page 78

やっ
Wha

はーい　大人しくして
Alright, quiet down.

ちょっ何！？
What are you doing!?

送って下さるんじゃなかったんですの？
Weren't you just gonna send me?

//As in leading her way out

ウソ
Lie

離しなさいっ
Take your hands of me!

ダーメ
No way

言っても聞かないのでしたら
If you're not gonna listen to what I say

力だけなら半日ほど・・・・
If it's only your power then it should take half a day....

最高法術院
Supreme law council

//Since I'm unfamiliar with the story I can't say exactly who or what this is supposed

to be.

夜半過ぎには戻りますよ
It should return around midnight.

あ　しまった
Ah, crap.

Page 79

聞かないならどうするのかな？
What are you gonna do if we don't listen?

むにっ　ｘ２
Munyuh

早くどうにかしないと・・・・ホラ
If you don't hurry up and do something....look.

つ
ch

や
No

ほ、　本当に許しませんわよ
I, I really won't forgive you!

はいはい
yeah yeah

はーい　じゃ脱いじゃおう
Alright, then let's undress you.

あ
Ah

だめっ
Don't!

Page 80

大丈夫　俺等　フェミニストだから
It's alright, after all, we are feminists.

あっ
Ah

見てはダメ
Don't look at me!

とーっても　気持ちよくなれるよ
You're gonna feel really good.

Ｈになれる薬
This is medicine to make you naughty.

ピチャ　ｘ２
Picha

やぁ
No

よーく　塗りこんで
Gotta apply it carefully.

あ
Ah

あっ
Ahh

聞くよコレが・・・神様だろうが悪魔だろうが虜になっちまう・・・　つー逸品だからねぇ
Listen up...it doesn't matter if you're a god or a devil, this medicine will captivate

you....it's a first rate item.

何だソレ
What's up with that?

//Note that this is said by one of the guys.

売り文句はさておき効果はこの通り
Let's leave its selling phrase for now, its effect is as you can see.

ちゃぷ
Chapuh

っひ
Hhi

いいっ
Iiih

Page 81

ふぁ
Fah

マジどんどん　溢れて来るぜ
Wow, seriously? She keeps getting wetter.

あ
Ah

乳首もこんなだし
Your nipples have gotten like this as well.

きゅ
Kyuh

やっちがっ
No, you're wrong!

わ　わたくちがっ
I, I'm not!

そんなっ
That's!

きゅ
Kyu

むゅ
Myuh

ちゅ　ｘ２
Chuh

っざけんな
Don't screw with me!

んなにしといて、何がちがうんだ？
Look at this, who do you think you're fooling?

なんで・・
Why...

それは・・・
That's...

Page 82

気持ちいいんだよねー
It feels good, right?

無理矢理
Even though they

んっ
Mhh

ひんっ
Hinh

んっ
Mhh

んっ
Nhh

こんな
are doing it

っあ
Aah

なのに
this forcibly

くちゃ
Kucha

おちゅ
Ochu

なんで・・・
Why...

きゅ
Kyuh

ひいいん
Hiiin

あっ
Ahh

きもちいいっ・・
does it feel good...

Page 83


さて・・・オレも・・
Well then...I'm joining as well...

一人でいってないで
Don't feel good by yourself.

あ
Ah

ほら、舐めるの
Come on, lick it.

んっ
Mh

んっ
Mh

クス
Kusuh

ペロ
Pero

ちゅ　ｘ２
Chu

くちゅ
Kuchu

っ
ch

あっ
Ah

はーい口開けてナメナメして
Alright, open your mouth and lick it.

やっ
Even

ぴちゅ
Pichu

ふぁ
Fuah

ヤなのに
Even though I don't want to...

Page 84

んっ　ｘ３
Mhh

おさえられない
I can't hold myself back

んん
Mmh

そうそう　よーく唾液を絡ませて
That's it, use plenty of your saliva and coil around it.

ふぁ
Fuah

ちゅる
Churu

ぺちゅ
Pechu

全体をまんべんなく舐めて
Be sure to lick the whole length of it.

そうやってソコに舌・
Right there and then use your tongue and...

んっ　ｘ２
Mh

ぴちゃ　ｘ２
Picha

んんっ
Mmh

んっ
Mh

じゅる
Yuru

じゅる
Yuru

じゃ　そろそろ口にふくんで
Well then, it's about time you took it into your mouth.

Page 85

んっ
Mh

いつもの
This isn't the usual

んん
Mhh

そうそう上手だねー
That's it, you're skilled at this.

最近の小学生はスゴイなぁ
Elementary schoolers nowadays are amazing, aren't they.

サービスじゃ
service.

んっ　ｘ２
Mhh

っ
ch

こっちもスゴイぜ
She's amazing over here as well.

ちゃ
Cha

くちゅ
Kuchu

ちゃ
Cha

んん
Mmh

こんな
This

ホントエッチすぎ
You really are too naughty.

んっ　ｘ２
Mhh

ぴちゃ
Picha

ちゃ　ｘ２
Cha

こんなに
This kind of

？あれ？舐めてさらに濡れちゃった？
Hm? What's this? You got even wetter than when you were licking it?

Page 86

そろそろイクよ？
Is it about time to cum?

ん
Mh

私も・・・又イっち
I'm also....about to cum

んっ
Mh

じゅぶ
Yubu

じゅ
Yuh

え？
Huh?

ぴちゅ
Pichu

コポ
Kopoh

んんっ
Mmh

はぁ
Haah

けほっ
Kehoh

はぁ
Haah

Page 87

あ　私・・
Ah, I...

まだ・・
still haven't...

ダーメ
No good.

そろそろ限界っしょ？
Are you about to hit your limit?

ちゃんと「何がして欲しいのか」言わなきゃね
You have to properly tell us what you want us to give you.

ほら、おねだりの仕方は・・　ボソボソ
Look, this is how you beg for it....bonbon

あっ
Ah

Page 88

お願いします　わたくしの
I'm begging you...

そんな
No way

ペイオースのオマンコを　皆様の
use your dicks to make...

わたくしが　無理矢理
I'm forcibly

こんな
asking for it

オチンチンで気持ちよく
Peorth's pussy feel good....

して下さい
please...

お願いします・・・
I'm begging you....

自分から
myself.

Page 89

今までに感じた事のない感覚
A sensation I have never felt before.

ああああっっっっ
Aaaaahhhhh

きゃ
Kyah

おぉ　すげぇイイカンジ
Ooh, it feels amazingly good!

気持ちいい
Pleasure.

ああっ
Aah

あ
Ah

じゅぷ　ｘ３
Yupuh

Page 90

無理矢理されて
Forcibly doing it

じゅ　ｘ２
Yuh

じゅぷ
Yupuh

あっ
Ah

はん
Han

こんな
This kind of

あぁ
Aah

じゅぷ　ｘ２
Yupuh

あ
Ah

ふぁ
Fua

んっ
Mh

気持ちよくて
pleasurable thing

んっ
Mh

さ　こっちむいて
Alright then, turn this way.

ふぁ
Fua

あ
Ah

子供の身体だから？
is it because I have the body of a child?

Page 91

あ
Ah

んっ
Mh

ちゅ
Chu

ぴちゅ
Pichu

ちゅ　ｘ２
Chu

一人で気持ちよくなってないで
Don't just go ahead and feel good all by yourself.

ピト
Pito

あ
Ah

はい
Understood

逆らえない
I can't refuse.

んっ　ｘ３
Mh

身体が熱くて
My body feels so hot.

Page 92

じゃ、オレはこっち
Then, I will take this.

っ
Ch

むに
Muni

あっ？
Hah?

だ、ダメですわ　そっちは
N,no way! Not that...

っやっ
noo

力抜けよ、裂けるぜ？
Loosen up, otherwise it's gonna tear you know.

あっ
Ah

やぁ
Non

はぁぁ
Haaah

Page 93

わたしく
Even though

いん
Ihn

あっ
Ah

一級神なのに
I'm a first rate deity

女神なのに
a goddess

んっ
Mh

良すぎだぜこのマンコ マジ癖になりそう
This pussy feels way to good. This might seriously turn into a habit.

んんっ
Mmh

ずにゅ　ｘ３
Zunyu

子供の身体なのに
and have the body of a child

お尻まで・・
even my asshole was...

くぅ・・イクぞ　おらっっっ
Kuuh....cumming...alrighhhht

こんなに
To think

あっああああ
Ahaaaaaah

わたくし・・
that I have become

Page 94

ああああああ
Aaaaaaaah

ああああっっっっ
Aaaahhhh

いやらしい
this perverted

Page 95

じゃ　風邪ひかないようにね
Well then, make sure you don't catch a cold.

又遊ぼうね　ペイオースちゃん
Let's play again, Peorth-chan.

・・・彼処に行けば
...If I go to that place...

コポ
Kopoh

ぴく　ｘ２
Pikuh

ベルダンディー　　彼女たちの所に行けば
Belldandy If I go to their place...

//She doesn't actually say Belldandy, it's just furigana (how the text, in this case to the left, is meant to be read). So she says only their place but it should be interpreted as Belldandy and her friends place.

心も・・・身体も・・・
My heart...and body...

元に・・・・
might return to what they once were...

This post has been edited by At4r1: Mar 29 2015, 14:19

I'm not familiar with this series as well so I can't really comment on things related to this universe. Here's the proofread for it:

Page 76

Also, she wandering around at this time looking like that

Correction: Also, she's wandering around at this time looking like that.

Page 78

Alright, quite down.

Correction: Alright quiet down.

Page 80

Let's leave it's selling phrase for now, its effect is as you can see.

Correction: Let's leave its selling phrase for now, its effect is as you can see.

Page 81

Your nipples has gotten like this as well.

Correction: Your nipples have gotten like this as well.

Page 85

The recent elementary schoolers are amazing, aren't they.

Suggestion: Elementary schoolers nowadays are amazing, aren't they.

Alright, nothing to discuss there. I updated the script with the changes.

Great to be able to finish the Spirits project! And impressive polish for the Navy ones, too!

editing bounty for the last Spirits part: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=11397

editing bounty for Madoka non-h https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=12175

editing bounty for the Navy book: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=12151

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Apr 5 2015, 03:12

So as Red_Piotrus advised, I'm posting my script of the YTS Sekirei doujin here as part of the editing bounty for it. For some reason I can't link to it, but it's the most recent one with Tsukiumi and Kazehana.

My way of doing the script out is slightly different from the usual Japanese->English way, as I use () to indicate each speech bubble, plus paragraphing to indicate a different frame within the page (which is why this style isn't good for those frameless pages).

PAGE2
Male: (Wait... Kazehana-san)
Kaze: (Minato-ku~n, looks like everyone's gone out) (So let's do something nice together today)

Tsu: (Hey, Minato! Are you getting involved with that concubine again!?)

PAGE3
Kaze: (Then let's all three of us do it together. This way we'll be done before everyone returns)
Tsu: (I...I see... satisfying multiple partners at the same time is also an Ashikabi's ability...)

Kaze: (Minato-kun's really big~)
Tsu: (You are familiar with other men's penises?)

Kaze: (Nfu...) (Fua... Haa)

Tsu: (Nn, Ku... Nfuu... Nn) (Mmu... Mmn)

PAGE4
Kaze: (Nom... Mmm... Mm... Mmfuu)
Tsu: (Mm... Mm, Ku... Mmmm!)

Male: (Uwah, Cumming!)

Tsu: (Mm!... Mmm-)

Kaze: (Ahn! Minato-kun's cum... so hot~)
Tsu: (Fua... Ah, Haahn)

PAGE5
Tsu: (Haa)X2

Kaze: (Minato-kun's cum... there's so much of it...)
Tsu: (Uwa... Haa... Haa)

Kaze: (Lick up mine too...)
Tsu: (Haa... Minato's semen... Minato's... Haa... Haa...)

PAGE6
Kaze: (It's a waste to leave the remainder on his cock...)
Tsu: (Fuaa... Haa... Minato's semen... Haa)

PAGE7
Panting: (Haa)X3
Kaze: (Now... Minato-kun...) (Go ahead and put it in whoever you want to do first)
Tsu: (Minato... Put that... um... in me...)

Tsu: (Fu... Aaah!) (Fua... Minatooo!)
Kaze: (Ahn... Minato-kun... so Tsukiumi's first?)

Tsu: (Fuaa... Minato...)
Kaze: (Hyahn! Oh yesss... Minato-kun... so gooood!)

PAGE9
Tsu: (Nhah... Yah... Hah!) (Minato... so roughhh... Nn... Nnnhah!)
Kaze: (Minato-kun... let's make Tsukiumi cum first)

PAGE10
Tsu: (Nhah!... Nhah! ...Haa... Ahn!) (That's... Haa... Kazehana... you... cheater... Haa... Aaahn!)
Male: (Uuu... Tsukiumi!)
Kaze: (Mmfua... Fuaa...)

PAGE11
Tsu: (Nhaa... I'm enjoying... this...) (Haa... Minato... how is it... does it feel good?)

Tsu: (Wha... Kazehana, what are you-!?)

PAGE12
Kaze: (This sort of thing a first time for you, right, Tsukiumi?)
Tsu: (Hey... Kaze...ha...na, stop touching... haa... that... Nhah!)

Tsu: (Hyah... Aah... Nhaaaa...)

PAGE13
Tsu: (Uwah... Ahaah... Minato... Ah... Aahh...) (Nnn! Nhah...)

Tsu: (Haa... I'm... about to...) (To... Nhaaa)

PAGE14
Tsu: (Minato... do it... inside me... Haa... insiiide!)

Tsu: (Fuaah... it's coming... semen's... pouring inside me...) (Minato's... semen...)

PAGE15
Kaze: (It's me next... Minato-kun) (Fu... Uuuhn... Nnn!... Nfu! Oh my... yesss!)

PAGE16
Kaze: (Nhah... Cum!... I'm also... Nn... Cu...cumminggg... Nn!)

Kaze: (Nha) (It's staining... my insides)

It's https://e-hentai.org/g/798048/2e699a0e44/

@Wrath88: You cannot post to it as it is probably a limitation on new accounts (this is your first post - welcome to the forums!)

and editing bounty is now up at https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=12197

Nice work on those Sekirei doujins. Read through it, found nothing wrong and no further suggestions.

Edit: Btw, no translations for page 17?

This post has been edited by CrimsonClown: Mar 29 2015, 22:51

Nice work on those Sekirei doujins. Read through it, found nothing wrong and no further suggestions.

Edit: Btw, no translations for page 17?

Dojins? Plural?

None. Since this was done for free (wrath send the script and didn't ask for any compensation) I am not pushing for the credits to be done, through I will note I have no problem paying out a bounty reward (higher if the credit pages were done). I like credit pages, but they are not as necessary as the "plot" pages, so some EHCOVE scripts will not have them. It's really up to the TL (and the bounty size).

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Mar 30 2015, 15:56

Doujin, singular, mistake there didn't even proofread my own post it seems. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/laugh.gif)

Alright, not really asking for it, I just wanted to know about that last page. I like reading afterwords by some of the authors since they can be quite amusing. Even without any humor, just reading through about the author's thoughts about the series or characters, the processes and problems they went through to publish the doujin is really good. Kind of feels like you get to know more about the author or something.

Yeah, I hear you. I do prefer to get those credits too, but when a first time TL asks me if I want a free script "just without the author rant", yeah, I will take it (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

accepting https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=11423 trannslating bounty.

gallery:here
bounty:here

below is the translation, including afterword. I'm not too good with onomatopoeia, so if you could give me a heads up when you see something that doesn't fit it would be nice. feedback is always appreciated.


２
リーファちゃん！
Leafa-chan!
バッ
うわっ！
Uwah!
ビックリした～

学校でその名前で呼ばないでって言ってるでしょ！
I told you to not call me with that name at school right!
長田クン！
Nagata-kun!
ご、ごめん・・・
S-sorry...
今日なら約束のアレをするのにちょうどいいかなと思って・・・
I thought that now is the right time to ask your promise
！

３
あ、あれは・・・でもっ・・・　ってか、本気で言ってるの！？　「オナニーを見られたい」なんて！
T-that was... but... a-are you serious about that!? "I wanna be watched while masturbating" you said!
え・・・
huh?...
だって直葉ちゃん約束したじゃないか！
but you already promised me!
僕が勝ったら何でも言うこと聞いてくれるって！
If i won you will do anything i ask!
うー
u-
せっかく必死にがんばったのに・・・　アレはウソだったの？
even though i tried my best... was that a lie?
ムッ
mu-
うっウソだなんて！
I-I will never lie!
剣士に二言はないわ！
a warrior never tells lies!
だよね！　さすが直葉ちゃんだ！
o-of course. as expected suguha-chan
ぐッ・・・
ugh-
しまった・・・
oh no..
はぁ
haa
あ～あ・・・
ugh
勢いとはいえ・・・
I know it was spontaneous, but..
軽々しくあんな約束するんじゃなかった・・・
I wish I didn't make promise that easily
４
あんな約束
that kind of promise..
不意打ちごっこなら　リーファちゃんに勝てるかも！
If I use surprise attack, maybe I could win!

れこん：隠密とか得意だし
Recon: Stealth is my specialty
りーふぁ：ムッ
Leafa: ugh
私に勝てなら何でも言うこと聞いてあげるわよ！
if you win against me, I'll do whatever you say!
フン！
hmph
ホント！？
really?!
ウソ・・・
no way..
ワーイ
yaay
まさかの敗北
unexpected defeat
そ、それに僕・・・
besides..
興奮がたまらなくて・・・　ずっとこんな状態なんだ
I'm totally aroused.. It's been like this for a while
ばん
BAM!
ビキ
thump
バキ
thump
わあっ！
uwah!
ばっ　バカ　何こんなところで　出してんの！
i-idiot, why are you putting it out here?!
誰かに見られたら・・・
what if someone sees us!
まだ授業始まったばかりだから大丈夫だよ
Lessons just started so it's fine.
いいからこっち来て！
Shut up and come with me!
二人は推薦組なので自由登校
These 2 special students don't need to attend class

５
ここなら　誰も来ないでしょ
if it's here, no one will come
なるほど！
i see
まったく変なところで　大胆なんだから！
geez, he got balls for strange things
でもさっさと済ませてよね
hurry up and finish it already
わかった！
i understand
で・・・ここでこうして見てればいいの？
so, i just sit here and watch, right?
うん！
yeah!
直葉ちゃんの顔見ながらオナニーできるなんて夢みたいだよ！
masturbating while seeing your face.. it's a dream come true
がんばってよかった！
I'm glad I did my best
ぐっ
ugh
はあ・・・そりゃ　よござんしたね・・・
haa.. well, congratulations then (note: i never heard about this one)
よくわかんないけど　男の子ってそれで　満足なのかな・・・
i don't really understand but... are boys satisfied with just that?
普通なら　エッチさせろって　言うそうなもんだけど
normally you would say "let's have sex", though
そう言われないだけ　良心的（？）なのかな
He didn't say it. perhaps because he's a good person?
しこ
schlick
それとも　エッチさせろって　言えなかったとか？　小心者っぽい　ところあるし・・・
or is it because he couldn't say it? he's kinda timid after all
いやでも　小心者だったら　オナニー見ててなんて　言えないか
no, but.. if he's timid then he wouldnt tell me to watch him masturbate
まったく　大胆なんだか　小心なんだか・・・
geez, I couldn't tell f he's brave or cowardly
しこ
schlick
って・・
hey
１０分経過
ten minutes after...

まだ！？
aren't you done yet?
早くしてほしいんだけど！
can't you finish it faster?
ご、ごめん・・・　もうちょい・・・
s-sorry.. just a bit more..

６
はあ
haa
もう・・・　じゃあちょっとだけ　手伝ってあげるよ
geez... well then, i'll help you a bit
えっ・・・
eh?
ホラ、これで　ちょっとは　興奮できる？
here, can you get aroused with this?
たぽっ
tap
わっ・・・
wow..
お、大きいね・・・
they're big
うっさい！
shut up!
あの・・・できれば　中身も見たいかな　・・・なんて
umm.. it would help if you show the inside too
ぽよん　ぽよん
boin boin
・・・言うと思った
i knew you'd say that
これでいい？
is this fine?
たぷん<3
tap
わあっ・・・　す、直葉ちゃんの　生乳を拝めるなんて・・・　夢みたい　\\\
wow.. seeing suguha-chan's bare breast, it's like a dream \\\
ホラ、貸して　ついでに　やってあげるよ
here, leave it to me
ええっ？！
eeeh?!
きゅっ<3
kyuu
たぷ　たぷ
tap tap
い、いいの・・・？
i-is it okay?
仕方ないでしょ！　君に任せたら　いつまでたっても　終わりそうにないし
it can't be helped, okay?! if I leave this to you, it could take forever

７
それにしても・・・　結構大きいな
that aside,.. it's quite big
う・・わっ・・・　す、直葉ちゃん
woah.. su-suguha-chan
しこ　しこ
schlick schlick
すごいよっ
amazing!
下手すると　お兄ちゃんより　大きいかも・・・
i'm not even good at this, but it's bigger than kirito's
気持ちいい？
does it feel good?
う、うん！
y-yeah
自分でするより　いいかも・・・　直葉ちゃんうまいね・・・うっ
it's better than doing it myself.. suguha-chan, you're good at this
そりゃどうも
well, thanks
しこ　しこ　しこ
schlick schlick schlick
じゃあ
well then
これは？
how's this?
わわっ！
w-woah
むにゅ
munyu
や、柔らかい・・・です・・
s-so soft
アレ・・・なんか反応可愛いな<3
heh.. his response is kinda cute <3
ふーん・・・
hmm~
じゃあ・・・
well then
あっ・・・やば・・・
aah.. damn
ちょっと　からかうだけの　つもりだったのに・・・
i only intend to tease him a bit
私もスイッチ入りそう・・・
I also got turned on
これは？
how's this?
うわぁっ！！
woah!
むにゅ
munyu

８
ずりゅっ　ずりゅっ
schlick schlick
すっ　直葉ちゃんっ・・・！
su-suguha-chan
そっ　それはっ　・・・やばっ・・・うっ
th-that's dangerous
ふーん　これも気持ちいいんだ
hmm~? so this feels good too
ずりっ　ずりっ
schlick schlick
きっ　気持ちいいですっ　あっ
i-it feels good.. ah
ぷっ　女の子みたいな声　出すくらい　気持ちいいんだ
hmph.. it feels so good it made you moan like a girl, huh.
あっ　も、もう・・・
ah.. i'm- already
ずりっ　ずりっ
schlick schlick
イク？
cum?
うん、イク！　イキそう！
yeah, cumming! i'm cumming!
ふーん・・・
hmm~
じゃあもうやーめた
well, then i quit
ぱっ　ぷるん　ぷるん
bon boin boin
ええっ！？
eeh?!
な、なんで・・・
w-why?
うう
uugh
泣くことはないでしょ
it's not something to cry about
ちょっと味見したくなったからね
i just wanted to try it
ぺろ
schlick
eh?!
わわわわっ！
w-woaaah!
ちゅる　ビクウッ
slurp thump
ひょ、ひょっとして　これが・・・　ふぇ、フェラって　やつですか？
could it be,. this is what they call fellatio?
いつも　お兄ちゃんペースの　エッチばかりだから
I always do it with my brother's pace
たまにはこういうのも　いいな
doing this once in a while is fine i guess
れろ　れろ
mm mm
ひょうらよ
had's wide (that's right)
うっ　直葉ちゃんの　口の中・・・
uuh.. suguha-chan's mouth
ぬるっとしてて・・・　暖かくて・・・くっ
so slippery and warm.. uuh
ピク　ピク　ぢゅる
thump thump slurp
あっ・・・　なにこれ・・・　こんなの・・・　初めて・・・うっ
aah.. what's this.. this is.. the first time.. uuh
ビク　ぢゅぷぷ
thump slurp
ふふっ　可愛い声で　鳴いちゃって・・・<3
hehe, your moan is so cute <3
１０
うっ　あっ　もっ・・直葉ちゃっ
aah.. I'm already-.. suguha-chan
ぢゅぽっ　ぢゅぽっ　ぢゅぽっ　ぢゅぽっ　ぢゅぽっ　ぢゅぽっ
schlop schlop schlop
だ、ダメ・・・っ　いっ
I-I can't.. I..
イッていい？直葉ちゃん
Can I cum?? suguha-chan
ぢゅぽっ　ぢゅぽっ
schlop schlop
いっ
I-
ぢゅぽっ　ぢゅぽっ　ぢゅぽっ
schlop schlop schlop
ん・・・
nngh
イクッ！イクッ！！
cumming! I'm cumming!!
いぐうっ
I'm cumming!!
びゅぷっ
gulp

１１
びゅるる
splurt
・・・・・・？
...?
splurt
drip
eh？　he's still cumming？
びゅーっ
splurt
ちょっ・・・　これ以上は・・・！
wha-.. anymore than this is...!
ぷはっ
fwah
びゅびゅっ
splurt splurt
きゃっ！　ちょっ
hyaah! wha-
ぴぴっ
drip

びゅるっ
splurt
ちょっ！まっ・・　かけないでよっ！
hey! wai- don't spread it on me!
びゅーっ
splurt
ごっ　ごめっ・・・
s-sorry...
はあ　はあ　はあ
haa haa haa

１２
むっすう
sticky
あ・・・あの・・・
a.. uhhh..
プル　プル
shake shake
ごめ・・・
sorry
もう！　顔にも制服にも　かかっちゃたじゃないの！
geez! now it sticks to my face and uniform!
ご、ごめん～
so-sorry~
・・・・ったく
geez
で？スッキリできたの？
so? are you done now?
それが・・・
about that...
まだまだ　元気そうね・・・
i see you're still hard
すみません・・・
my apologize
ったくもう！　しょうがないわね！
geez! it can't be helped!

１３
じゃあこっち　使っていいよ
well then, you can use this
ぴらっ
thump
えっ・・・　ええっ！？
e..eeh?!
そそそ、それって　セックスって　ことだよね！？
th-th-that would be sex, right?!
その代わり　早くしてよね
in exchange, do it quickly
信じられない・・・
i can't believe it
しゅ～
haaa
僕のチンポが　直葉ちゃんのアソコに・・・？
my dick inside suguha chan's...?
直葉ちゃんの・・・
suguha-chan's ...
み、見せてっ
l-let me see it !
がっ
guh
わっ
wha
ドン
bam
うわあああ・・・
whoaaaaah
ぐにぃ
schlick
これが・・・　直葉ちゃんの・・・
this is... suguha-chan's
ちょ、ちょっと・・・　あんまり　広げないでよ
wha-wait! don't spread it so hard!

１４
はあ　はあ
haa haa
ぺろ
lick
あっ　ちょっ・・・　こらっ　そんな犬みたいに・・・
aa wai-.. hey! don't be like a dog
ぺろ　ぺろ　ぺろ
lick lick lick
ペロペロ　なめるなっ・・・ん
you are licking too much
れろ　れろ
schlick schlick
～っ！！
~!!
ピク　ピク
thump thump
もうっ！
geez
どん
pow
わっ！
aargh!
ごちっ
wham
いたた・・・　ヒドイよ　直葉ちゃぁん
ouch.. you're so mean, suguha-chan
１５
早くしてって　いってるでしょ！
i told you to do it quickly!
授業終わっちゃうよ！？
class will end soon!
あ・・・そか・・・
oh.. that's right
危ない・・・イかされそうだった・・・
that was close.. i almost came..
じゃ、その・・・失礼します・・・
then, excuse me
ぷにゅ
schlop
ホントはイッてしまいたかったけど
I didn't actually cum though
フッ　なにそれ・・・
what was that?
は、入ったぁ・・・
ahh.. it goes in
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
っていうか・・・これじゃまるで　私がセックス　したがってる　みたいじゃない
wait,. now it seems like i'm the one who wants to do sex
うわっ・・・
whoa
んっ・・・
mmh
にゅぷぷ
slip
挿れる前にイカされるのもなんか癪だし・・・
To cum before he even put it in will be irritating
わわわわっ
wh-whoahhh
す、直葉ちゃん・・・
su-suguha-chan
ん～<3
mmh~ <3
！！
!!
キスはダメ！
we can't kiss!
ばっ
smack
えっ！？
eh?!

１６
な・・
wh
なんでぇえええ・・・
whhhyyyyy??
いいから　さっさと済ませてよ！
just get it over already!
長田君のことは決して嫌いじゃないけど
I'ts not that I hate nagata-kun
ずぷっ
sob
キスはやっぱり心から好きな人じゃないと・・・ね
but still, kissing is only for lovers
チュー　したかった
i wanted to kiss..
ずぷっ
sob
身体は許せても　心までは・・・
even if my body breaks, my heart...
私にキスしていいのは　お兄ちゃんだけ・・・
the only one who can kiss me is kirito
ずぷっ　ずぷっ
sob sob
悲しいケド　気持ちいい
it's saddeing but.. it feels good
んっ・・・　でも・・・　気持ちいい・・・
mmh.. but.. it feels good
ずぷっ　ずぷっ　ずぷっ　ずぷっ
sob sob sob sob
身体はウソをつけないって　こういうのを言うのかな
I guess this is what they say "your body can't lie", huh
ってか・・・ホント大きいな・・・
that aside.. it's really big
じゅぷっ　じゅぷっ　じゅぷっ
schlop schlop schlop
長田君のおチンチン・・・　長さはお兄ちゃんの方が上だけど　太さは長田君の方が上かも
nagata-kun's dick... maybe smaller than kirito, but surely bigger
やば・・・
damn
んっ
mmh
声・・・漏れちゃう・・・
my voice is..
ずっ　ずっ　ずっ　ずっ
schlop schlop schlop
ふっ
mmhh

１７
すっ・・・直葉ちゃんっ！！
su-suguha-chan!!
びゅぷっ
splurt
えっ・・・・
eh?
びゅびゅ
splurt splurt
あああ・・・気持ちいい・・・
ohhh... it feels good...
びゅっ　びゅぷっ
splurt splurt
夢みたい・・・
it's like a dream
びゅるるっ
splurrrrt
ありがとう直葉ちゃん　さ、最高でした！
thanks suguha-chan you're the best!
ぬぽっ
drip
ごぷっ
drip
ちょ・・・
wai-

１８
ちょっと！　何自分だけ勝手にイッてるのよ！！
wait a minute! why are you cumming by yourself?!
えぇっ！？
eeh?!
ぐいっ
guh
だ、だって　早くしろって　直葉ちゃんが・・・
be-because you're the one who told me to finish it quickly
うっさい！！！
shut up!!
・・・・・
....
まだできるよね？
you can still do it, can't you?
へっ？
huh?
私だって　イキたいんだから・・・
I want to cum too...
ぐにぃ
slip
今度はちゃんと　イカせてよね！
this time, make me cum!
す、直葉ちゃん・・・<3
su-suguha-chan... <3

１９
（今度は絶対）　イキません！！
(this time for real) I won't cum!!
ずん
schlop
（直葉ちゃんを）　イカせるまでは！！！
(suguha-chan..) until i made you cum!!
あっ<3
aah <3
ずぷっ　ずぷっ　ずぷっ
schlop schlop schlop
ご、ごめんね直葉ちゃん
so-sorry suguha-chan
もにゅ
grab
僕、自分のこと　・・・ばっかり
I only think about myself
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
い、いいから・・・もっと・・・突いて　・・・あっ
it's fine.. just.. do it faster.. ah

２０
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
んっ　んっ
mmh mmh
こ、こう？
like this?
んっ　いいよっ　そんなっ・・・感じ・・・あっ
yeah.. that's right.. just like that.. ah
奥にっ・・・突き刺すような・・・感じで・・
it feels so deep inside me
ずん　ずん　ずん　ずん
schlop schlop schlop
ああ・・・やばい・・・気持ちよすぎて・・・また・・・
aa.. damn.. it feels too good.. I'm gonna..
ずぷ　ずぷ
schlop schlop
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
も、もうちょっと・・・がんばって・・・
j-just a little more.. do your best..
今度は・・・一緒にいこっ<3
this time.. we cum together <3
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
ずぷ　ずぷ
schlop schlop
んっ
mmh
あっ
ah
じゅぷ じゅぷ じゅぷ
schlop schlop schlop
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
直葉ちゃん・・・<3
suguha-chan... <3
うん！がんばる！
yeah! i'll do my best!

２１
んっ　すごっ
nngh amaz-
突くリズムが・・・お兄ちゃんと違って・・・
the pattern is different from kirito's
なんか・・・変な感じ・・
somehow.. it feels weird..
でも・・・
but..
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
はげしっ
so rough!
じゅぷっ　じゅぷっ　じゅぷっ　じゅぷっ　じゅぷっ
schlop schlop schlop
あっ
ah
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
気持ちいいっ！
it feels good!
あん<3
ahn <3!
ずんっ　ずんっ　ずんっ　ずんっ　ずんっ
schlop schlop schlop
ご、ごめん直葉ちゃん！も、もう・・・っ！！
s-sorry suguha-chan! I'm already!
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
ずぷっ　ずぷっ　ずぷっ
schlop schlop
んっ　いいよっ
it's okay
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
私もイクから・・・一緒に・・・っ　あっ
i'm cumming too... together... ah
ずぷっ　ずぷっ
schlop schlop
いっ・・・いく
cum-cumming
ずぷっ　ずぷっ　ずぷっ
schlop schlop schlop
いぐっ
cumming

２２
いぐうっ
I'm cumming
ごぷっ
grab
ぶしゃああああ
gushhh
イケた？
did you cum?
うん・・・
yeah
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
ぶぴっ
splurt
ぶぴゅぴゅ
splurt
ホッよかった・・・
That's good
あ、ありがとう　直葉ちゃん・・・
th-thanks suguha-chan
ん・・・
yes
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
もにゅ
grope

２３
直葉ちゃん　今度また・・・
suguha-chan, next time..
ん～<3
mmh <3
ハァ　ハァ
haa haa
あっ・・・
ah
ご、ごめん・・・
s-sorry..
キスはダメだよね
we shouldn't kiss, right?
・・・・
...
たま～～～になら・・・ね<3
Just once in a while, okay?
ちゅ<3
kiss <3
すっ　直葉ちゃん！
su-suguha-chan!
あーもう　いちいち抱きつかなくていいから！
aah geez don't cling so much to me!

２４
直葉と長田君のカラミとか、誰得だよ・・・。需要あんのかな・・・。
who wants the suguhaxnagata coupling? i wonder if anyone likes them
みなさんこんにちは、まるころんどです。
good day, everyone. marukorondo here.
前回シリカを描いたら、なんだか直葉も久しぶりに描きたくなったので、昨今の艦これブームに目もくれず、本
能の赴くままに、またもSAO本を描いてしまいました。
Previously when I draw silica, i felt like i hadn't drawn suguha chan in a while. kancolle's boom recently made me distracted. now that i've regained my instinct, once again i draw SAO book.
描くに当たって、どんなストーリーにしようかな～と、小説を読み返したり、アニメを見返したりしていると・
・・
While I was drawing, I wondered what story I should do. I reread the novel, rewatched the anime and..
あれ、なんかリーファも可愛いじゃん（当初はそれほどリーファに興味なかった）
huh? Isn't Leafa cute? (at first i have no interest in Leafa)
よし、今回はリーファも描こう！
okay! this time i'll draw leafa!
ぐぬぬ、意外とリーファ難しい（ぐりぐり描きつつ試行錯誤すること数日）
Surprisinngly Leafa is difficult to draw. It took days to draw her with trial and error.
ハァハァ、ダメだ、リーファうまく描けねえ。気分転換に直葉でも描くか
haa haa. not good. i can't draw leafa-chan properly. i changed my mind to draw suguha.
直葉可愛いよ直葉　ハァハァ
suguha, you're cute, suguha

って感じて、結局直葉だけにしてしまいました。
that's how i felt. in the end i only draw suguha.

しかし、ろくなストーリーもシチュエーションも浮かはず、ネームを書いては消す作業を繰り返すうち、日にち
ばかりが過ぎていき・・・
however, it should also have a good story. as i draw and erase, doing it over and over again, days were passing
やばい、サンクリに間に合わんかもしれん。シリカ本を先に出さずに、保険としてとっとけばよかった
this is bad, this won't make it for sankuri. silica's book hasn't been released so i'm glad i have an insurance.
などと思いつつ、結局、直葉と長田君という、もはや需要があるのかどうかも怪しい内容に・・・。
etc etc, in the end, i'm worried about whether suguhaxnagata fans are still exist or not
でも、個人的にはだんだん楽しくなってきて
but, personally I had fun with this
直葉X長田君、アリだわ～
suguhaxnagata is possible~
などと思いながら描いてしまいましたが・・・みなさんはいかがだったでしょうかｗ
etc etc, i finished drawing it but... what do you guys think about it? haha

さて、次ですが・・・な～んにも決めてません。
now then, next is.. I ha~ven't decided yet.
ちょっと時間できたので、流行の艦これでもやってみようかなと思ってますが、本を描くかどうかは未定です。

if i have the time, i'm thinking about playing the epidemic kancolle, but i'm still unsure whether i will draw or not.
SAO本は、そのうちまた描くと思いますので、よければまた手に取ってやってください。
Eventually, I will draw more SAO book. If you like it, please grab and buy it.
この本を買ってくれた方、本当にありがとうございました。
To those who bought this book, thank you so much.

では、また。　ノツ
best regards.

This post has been edited by kdrt: Apr 2 2015, 07:15

Proofread for Suguha no Usuusu na Ehon 2

Page 2

I thought that now is the right time to ask your promise

Correction: I thought that now is the right time to ask about your promise.

Page 3

If i won you will do anything i ask!

Correction: If I won you would do anything I asked!

I wish I didn't make promise that easily

Correction: I wish I didn't make a promise that easily.

Page 4

If I use surprise attack, maybe I could win!

Correction: If I use a surprise attack, maybe I can win!

Page 5

geez, he got balls for strange things

Correction: Geez, he's got balls for strange things.

geez, I couldn't tell f he's brave or cowardly

Correction: Geez, I can't tell if he's brave or cowardly.

ten minutes after...

Correction: Ten minutes later...

Page 6

umm.. it would help if you show the inside too

Suggestion: Either "it would help if you took off your bra too" or "it would help if you showed it bare". At the moment this sentence could be interpreted as "show the inside of your breasts" because the topic of their conversation at this point is about her breasts.

Page 7

i only intend to tease him a bit

Correction: I only intended to tease him a bit.

Page 8

I always do it with my brother's pace

Suggestion: Kirito isn't really her brother, she only calls him Onii-chan so it could be "I always do it with Onii-chan's pace".

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my apologize

Correction: My apologies

Page 13

my dick inside suguha chan's...?

Correction: My dick inside Suguha-chan's...?

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ahh.. it goes in

Correction: Ahh... it's going in

wait,. now it seems like i'm the one who wants to do sex

Correction: Wait... now it seems like I'm the one who wants to have sex

To cum before he even put it in will be irritating

Correction: Cumming before he even put it in would be irritating

Page 16

I'ts not that I hate nagata-kun

Correction: It's not that I hate Nagata-kun

it's saddeing but.. it feels good

Correction: It's disappointing but... it feels good

Page 19

(suguha-chan..) until i made you cum!!

Correction: Until I've made you cum!!

Page 24

Previously when I draw silica, i felt like i hadn't drawn suguha chan in a while. kancolle's boom recently made me distracted. now that i've regained my instinct, once again i draw SAO book.

Correction: Previously when I drew Silica, I felt like I haven't drawn Suguha-chan in a while. Kancolle's boom recently made me distracted. Now that I've regained my instinct, once again I'm drawing an SAO book.

huh? Isn't Leafa cute? (at first i have no interest in Leafa)

Correction: (At first I had no interest in Leafa)

Surprisinngly Leafa is difficult to draw. It took days to draw her with trial and error.

Correction: Surprisingly

i changed my mind to draw suguha.

Correction: I changed my mind to drawing Suguha instead.

that's how i felt. in the end i only draw suguha.

Correction: In the end I only drew Suguha.

as i draw and erase, doing it over and over again, days were passing

Correction: As I drew and erased, doing it over and over again, days were passing.

etc etc, in the end, i'm worried about whether suguhaxnagata fans are still exist or not

Correction: I'm worried about whether SuguhaxNagata fans still exist or not.

Now, I'd like to mention something

Page 7: i'm not even good at this, but it's bigger than kirito's

Page 16: nagata-kun's dick... maybe smaller than kirito, but surely bigger

It's completely inconsistent. It should probably be changed to either "longer" or "thicker" to describe Nagata's and Kirito's can stay "bigger" so it would be:

Page 7: I'm not even good at this but it's thicker than Kirito's

Page16: Nagata-kun's dick... may be small than Kirito's but surely thicker

Overall the script needs a lot of polishing. A lot of missing capitals, some missing punctuations and some grammar issues to mention a few. I went through the script about 4 or 5 times but I might miss some things so I'll go through everything again when I can.

Oi, Amped, CrimsonClown.
I've typesetted https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=12065
But bubble translate on page RJ027839_12, is missing.
It isnt in the jap raw, but its in the Chinese raw.
I contacted ehcove's chinese translator, awaiting translation of the bubble from him.
Since it wasent in the jap raw, ofc u cant translate it, but Seriously? a bubble stand empty, do plz check it up on other versions.

Sorry about that then, I didn't notice as the gallery link wasn't posted along with the script and even now I can't seem to open the gallery.

......
It isnt in the jap raw, but its in the Chinese raw.
......
but Seriously? a bubble stand empty, do plz check it up on other versions.

Are we looking at the same galleries? There is no Chinese raw; only a Japanese raw and a Chinese TRANSLATION. Given that the raw was blank, if the bubble says anything but "This bubble empty in original", then I'd expect it to be erroneous. The translator would be correct to leave it blank for the ENG script, though something like "TL Note: bubble empty in the RAW" might be appropriate.

UF