[X] My Assistant

Did you miss this one? https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=5438

Yes, it seems I did. Thank you. Added now.

jfji552, could you explain "aus"? This makes no sense to me.

Let's call it a language slip-up and pretend that never happened. "from" is what should be there.

Anyway, good suggestions/corrections there.

082
"Aus"...?

"Taa-kun from Kawai"
(Kawai is a [en.wikipedia.org] town in the Kansai region.)

089
strong suggestion: "Expecting...P-Pierce [etc]" "A matter for congratulation" doesn't work at all. Could also go with the alternate to "matter..." from the dictioary, "happy event" (more literal to the raw phrase than "expecting"), if you want, but that's not great either...but not too bad, at least.

Sounds much better, yes.

099
"No, way I did". That comma's bad punctuation (remove it). The wording is also weird, but jfj can decide if he wants to change it.

I think it sounds okay, but if you have a better suggestion..?

107
suggestion: "Heh!?" (but that looks like laughter) or "Hwe!?" or just "Huh!?", but not "He!?"; impromptu grunts shouldn't look/sound like words IMO ("he", as in "him").

Let's make it "Hwe!?".

Yes, it seems I did. Thank you. Added now.

Thanks.


Edit: I'm almost done with episode 16 now. I'll just have to go over it once more. Well, and there's a tiny problem I have. There are a total of three short lines in tiny hand writing, which I have trouble deciphering. Maybe somebody else will be able to read them, but I'd be inclined to write them off as unreadable.

Near the bottom of page 206. My best guess is コレはタナフ, which doesn't make any sense.

Top right and bottom left of page 209. Best guesses so far 剣別＊　参照 and アックス列紙　参照, which both doesn't make much sense, apart from the 参照 (reference) and アックス (axe) bits.

This post has been edited by jfji552: Mar 13 2012, 03:10

I think it sounds okay, but if you have a better suggestion..?

Then: "No, I have not." ?

I can't read the tiny lines, either.

206: コレはダメ？
209 top right: 剣別紙参照
209 bottom left: アックス別紙参照

Ch13 is done and sent. Can I get some list of everyone involved with chapter 2? I mean all the contributors, translators, proofreaders and editors.

according to my notes

translation

7-10 PeopleDon'tDanceNoMore
11-16 jfji552

editing

7-9: Gtdragon

10 SS

11-12 LS

13 SS

14 Gtdragon

15 LS

16 not translated, so bounty not posted or assigned yet

contributors: roughly 80% Dlag, 20% me

proofreaders: I don't think we had any dedicated ones, various people were commenting here on parts of it, I was also giving the scripts my usual quick read for the little its worth.

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Mar 13 2012, 20:31

Then: "No, I have not." ?

Okay. Maybe contract it to: "No, I haven't!"

206: コレはダメ？
209 top right: 剣別紙参照
209 bottom left: アックス別紙参照

Thanks a lot!

So, without further delays, here's the script for episode 16:

p184
ぼうけんをはじめます
Begin adventure

ようこそ　私が　この城の主のシーメンだ
Welcome! I am Semen, the master of this castle.

よくぞここまでたどりついたな
I'm impressed you made it this far.

わざわざ　私に喰われに来るとはな！
That you'd come here just to be devoured by me...!


p185
うるせぇ　てめぇもカニ女のようにぶった切ってやるぜ
Shut up! We're gonna cut you down, just like that crab woman.

ははは　私とユアリースラとを一緒にされては困る
Hahaha, that you're seeing me on the same level as Yuarislime is troubling.

ピアス……
Pierce...

いや…ボボ　見ないで……　う…う……
No... Bobo, don't look... Uh... Uh...

涙のご対面かな？　あわれだな
A tearful reunion? How touching.

ククッ
Kuku!

ぐう……　おのれぇ……
Guu... Youuu...


p186
うおおおお
Uooooh!

ブン
*swoosh*

ズバ
*slash*

いいぞ　ボボ
That's it, Bobo!

フッ　その程度か　つまらん
Fu, that's all? How boring.

リバイス　（再生）
Revise! (Regeneration)

ズオオ
*swoo*


p187
ジュブジュブ
*squelch*

何！
What!?

ＺＡＮ
*loom*


p188
こ……　こいつ　再生しやがって
He... He fucking regenerated them.

私をいくら切りつけてもきかん　君らとは出来が違うのだよ
In contrast to you guys, no matter how often you cut me, it will have no effect.

しゃらくせい　それならコマ切れにしてやるぜ
Then we'll cut you to shreds, you cheeky bastard!

やれやれ　困ったもんだ
Oh my, how troublesome.

ダーク
Dark!

ブクーッ
*swell*


p189
ウガァ
Ugaa!

奴め　いきなりスミはきやがった
That guy, he's spewing fucking ink all of a sudden.

モク　モク
*smoky*

しまった　真っ暗で何も見えん
Damn, it's pitch dark, I can't see a thing.

ピンク　お前猫だから夜目がきくだろ
Pink! You are a cat, so you have night vision, right?

サンタ　あぶない　うしろよ！
Santa, look out, behind you!


p190
シュルシュル
*snake* *snake*

しまった
Crap!

ぐああ
Guaa!

ギリギリ
*tighten*

サンタァ
Santaaa!

フフフ　つかまえた
Fufufu, I caught you.

ガバ
*grab*

ヒッ
Hi!

子猫ちゃん　可愛がってあげるわ
I'll make love to you, kitten.

あ…いや　はなしてぇ
Ah... No! Let me gooo!

サンタ…ピンク　どこだ…暗くてよく見えん
Santa... Pink, where are you? It's dark, I can barely see.


p191
ヌーッ
*menace*

ウガァ
Ugaa!

ガブッ
*grab*

フフフ　あなたの血をすべてすすってあげる
Fufufu, we'll suck out your blood, all of it.

うおお　はなせぇ
Uooh! Let gooo!

なんて力だ……　ぐはっ
What power... Guha!

ピ……　ピアス
Pi-... Pierce!


p192
ボボ　どうしたの　ボボ
Bobo!? What happened to you, Bobo!?

ケケケ　もうすぐ奴らを喰らいつくすだろう
Hehehe, very soon, I shall devour them fully.

そ……　そんな
N-... No way!

ふははは
Fuhahaha!

しょせんお前達は私の敵ではないのだよ！
In the end, you are not worthy to be my opponents!

げはぁ
Gehaa!

ギリギリ
*tighten*

グクッ
*gulp*

きゃあ
Kyaa!

ウガアァ
Ugaaa!


p193
仲間の死に様でもようく見ておくだな
Watch well, the deaths of your comrades.

やめてぇ　このバケモノ
Stooop! You monster!

フフフ　そのバケモノに喰われてはみじめだな
Fufufu, how sad that you will be devoured by that monster.

うう……　くう……
Uuh... Kuuh...

ああ　せめて魔法が使えたら
Aah! If only I could use my magic!

ポウ
*glow*

トクン
*thump*

トクン　トクン
*thump* *thump*

こ…この鼓動は!?
Wh-... What's this pulsation!?


p194
あ……
Ah...

トクントクン
*thump* *thump*

トクントクン
*thump* *thump*

なんだ　この光は
What? This light is...

闇が消えてゆく
The darkness is dispersing!

サーッ
*shine*


p195
魔法封じの印が消えていく
The magic sealing symbols are disappearing!

スーッ
*gasp*

ちい　いったいどうしたんだ
Damn! What in the world did just happen?

印が消えてしまえばこっちのものよ
If the symbols disappear, I back in the game!

エナ・サイバス
Ener Psy Burst!

バリ　バリ
*crackle* *crackle*

バリ
*crackle*

今度はこっちの番よ　覚悟しなさい
Now it's my turn! Brace yourself!

スタッ
*jump*

フン　きさまひとりで何が出来る
Funh, what can you do, all by yourself?


p196
ドサ
*thud*

ひとりじゃないぜ
She's not alone!

こ…これは
That... That is...

あっ
Ah!

勝手に殺さないでほしいね
Please don't just count us as dead, okay?

そう簡単に死んでたまるかよ
Did you think we'd die that easily!?

はあ　はあ　はあ
Haa! Haa! Haa!

ボボ　サンタ　ピンク
Bobo! Santa! Pink!

なんだ　このＢＡＣＫは！
What's with this background!?


p197
ピアス　大丈夫か？
Pierce, are you okay?

うん　お腹の子が　私を助けてくれたの
Yes, the child in my belly saved me.

さあピアス　強烈なのを一発たのむぜ
Come on, Pierce! Show him a strong one!

まかせといて
Just leave it to me.

オン　オン
*ohn* *ohn*

オン
*ohn*

大気に住まう魂よ　囲いし輩の血をすすれ
Oh soul that inhabits in the atmosphere, enclose him and suck out his blood.

そ…その呪文は……まさか
T-... That Spell... No way!


p198
デド・ダイエッダ
Dead Dieter

ブワー
*woosh*

※デド・ダイエッダ…血液やその他、体の水分を一瞬のうちに吸いとってしまう。
Note: Dead Dieter... It sucks up all blood and other moisture in the body within an instant.

カサ　カサ　カサ
*sizzle* *sizzle* *sizzle*

ぐああ　体がひからびる
Guaa! My body is drying up!

や……やめろぉ
St-... Stooop!

これで終わりだぁ
This is the end!

ブン
*whoosh*


p199
ズドォ
*thud*

ぎゃあ
Gyaa!

クエ〜
Kueeeh!

こ…このままでは死なんぞ
I... I'm going to die like this!

ジュワアアァァ
*fwooooosh*

ふぅ　終わったな
Fuu, I guess it's over.


p200
あっ…あれは
That... That is...

ピカッ
*shine*

シーメンはショートソードをのこしていった
Semen dropped a Short Sword.

これが次なる桃色ドラゴンの手掛かりになるはずだ
This has to be the next clue about the pink dragon.

でも手掛かりっていったって
You said it's a clue, but...

キラッ
*sparkle*


p201
なんだぁ　こりゃ
What's this!?

きゃ
Kya!

ズバァ
*woosh*

サンタァ　ピンク
Santaaa! Pink!

カーッ
*baaang*

カツ
*crack*

シュン
*hiss*


p202
サ…サンタとピンクが消えちゃった
Sa-... Santa and Pink disappeared!

二人とも　どこ行っちまったんだ
Where did those two go?

そ…そんなぁ〜〜
No... waaay.

サンタァ　ピンク
Santaaa! Pink!

シーン
*silence*

ＳＡＶＥします
SAVE GAME

DRAGON PINK XVI／おわり
Dragon Pink XVI/End


p203
アイデアコンテスト　第2回　3回応募者名簿
Participant name register for the 2nd and 3rd idea contest

設定集
Creation Collection


p204
ドラゴンピンク
Dragon Pink

秘　設定集
(Secret) Creation Collection


p205
ピンク
Pink


p206
ピンク
Pink

ピンク
Pink

Bottom right:
コレはダメ？
It's no good?


p207
ピアス
Pierce


p208
ピアス
Pierce

ピアス
Pierce


p209
Top right:
剣別紙参照
Sword reference on a separate page

サンタ
Santa

ボボ
Bobo

ボボ
Bobo

Bottom left:
アックス別紙参照
Axe reference on a separate page

(TL Comment: Thanks to Hitsuyou-H for deciphering the three tiny lines on pages 206 and 209!)


p210
サンタ
Santa

ボボ
Bobo


p211
サンタ
Santa

対比表
Comparison chart


p212
スレイブクィーン
Slave Queen

On the little figure in front of the Slave Queen side view:
ピュク
Pink

スレイブマスター
Slave Master

Below the helmets:
いろいろある
There are various of these.


p213
行け行け　ピンク！
Go! Go! Pink!
目指すは奴隷戦士だぁ！
Aim to become a slave warrior!

…ま、冗談はさておいて
ドラピンも2巻目。
これからもげしげし
描いてもらって、行くは
裏ファミコンかアニメ化
だぁね
...well, jokes aside, this is already the second volume of Dragon Pink. I'll keep on drawing from here on and in the future there should also be an underground NES game and an anime adaption.

またカニ食いに
行きましょねっと。
Let's go and eat crab again, okay?

あのね…
Excuse me...?

とってもかわいいピンクのコメント　どうもありがとうございます。
Thank you very much for the comments about Pink being really cute.


p214
■スレイブドール
■Slave Doll

　右のイラストはスレイブドールのファースト
デザイン（ちょっとアレンジしてますけど…）
To the right, you can see an illustration of the first design of the Slave Doll (although I arranged it a bit...).

　本編に登場したのはこの後に描いたラフを
ベースにＩＴＯさんがアレンジしたもの……
というよりほとんどＩＴＯさんのオリジナル
The one that appears in this book was arranged by ITO-san, based on a rough, later drawing... Or rather, she's almost an original made by ITO-san.

　私は基本的に”ノリの悪い人間”
なのでＩＴＯさんの要求にきちん
と答えられなかったのが　心残り
です　もーしわけない！
I'm basically someone who doesn't get into things easily, so I didn't properly respond to ITO-san's request, but I regret it. I'm very sorry!


p215
■ルーンチャージドール
■Rune Charge Doll

こちらは見ての通り防空ズキン
みたいなものを除いてほとんど
本編と同じ（みたい…）
As you can see, this one is almost the same as the one in the book (it seems...), if you remove that anti-air-raid hood like thing.
(Note: Boukuuzukin (防空頭巾) were hoods used in Japan during WW2 to provide protection for the head during air raids.)

こいつはこのデザイン１点しか描けま
せんでした　でも　けっこう気に入っ
てたりなんかするんですけど……
For this one's design, I could only draw one piece, but somehow I'm rather pleased with the result...

こいつらのデザインはひょっとすると
自分で描くマンガに使っちゃうかもし
れないけど　その時はゆるしてね……
　　　　　　　　　　　　ＩＴＯさん
Maybe I'll use these designs in a manga I'm drawing myself. Please give me permission in that case, okay, ITO-san?

Ｐ．Ｓ　ＩＴＯさん　この本の印税で
　　　　マックを買おう!!
P.S. ITO-san, let's buy a Mac with the royalties from this book!!

ｂｙ　森木靖泰
by Moriki Yasuhiro


p216
■タツミコミックス■
■Tatsumi Comics■

ドラゴンピンク２
Dragon Pink 2

平成３年４月１日　初版発行　　　　　　（検印廃止）
1st of April 1991 First print run (Seal of approval abolished)
(Note: Before the mid-1950's, Japanese books often contained a field marked 著者検印 (author's seal of approval), which would be stamped by the author. This would signify that the book was an official copy and the author was paid for it. After the abolishment of this system, a corresponding 検印廃止 (seal of approval abolished) field can be found in books, which notifies readers that the absence of the seal of approval is intentional.)

著者　　ＩＴＯＹＯＫＯ
Author: ITOYOKO
編　集　コミックハウス
Editing: Comic House
発行者　宮　本　正　生
Publisher: Miyamoto Masao
発行所　辰巳出版株式会社
Publishing house: Tatsumi Publishing Co., Ltd.
　　　　東京都新宿区新宿5—18—20
Tokyo Metropolitan area, Shinjuku-ku, Shinjuku 5-18-20
　　　　　　　　　 (郵便番号　160)
(Postal code 160)
　　　　電話　東京03(3208)8701(代)
Phone: Tokyo 03(3208)8701 (with costs)
　　　　振替　東京　４—７１５８４
Transfer: Tokyo 4-71584
印刷所　光栄印刷株式会社
Printing: Koei Printing Co.
写　植　有限会社光洋写植
Phototypesetting: Yuugengaisha Kouyou Shashoku ("Koyo Phototypesetting Limited")

落丁・乱丁の場合は本社にてお取りかえいたします。
Can be exchanged at the main office in case of missing or out of order pages.
定価はカバーに表示してあります。
The list price is given on the cover.

Agreement about the "Dead Dieter" spell name?

Since my free time has disappeared the last days, this one took a bit longer. For that reason, I'll also have to take a break with translations for a while. Anyway, this was fun to work on, and I hope you'll make good progress with the next volumes.

This post has been edited by jfji552: Mar 16 2012, 16:59

Excellent. Ch/Ep 16 editing bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=5454

Agreement about the "Dead Dieter" spell name?

I read it with a German pronunciation ("deeter") instead of "person on a diet", but that's not entirely a bad thing. And that seems to be how the few instances that a search shows use it, so sure.

Excellent. Ch/Ep 16 editing bounty: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=5454

Added to it.

Minor proofreading note:

"royalties of this book" -> "from this book"
"the author was payed for it" -> paid

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Mar 13 2012, 23:57

I read it with a German pronunciation ("deeter") instead of "person on a diet", but that's not entirely a bad thing. And that seems to be how the few instances that a search shows use it, so sure.

Heh, okay.

Minor proofreading note:

"royalties of this book" -> "from this book"
"the author was payed for it" -> paid

Fixed.

I was wondering if I could have a shot at this, here's a sample.

I'll be changing the font to Wild Words later, and picking a different font for sfx (and adding those *s).

リバイス　（再生）
Revise! (Revive)
(Just a comment not a note: Maybe "Rebirth!"?)

Probably "Regen(eration)" instead of Revive. He only got his leg/tentacle cut off.

Otherwise, I can't think of a better option than "Revise" right now.

This post has been edited by PeopleDon'tDanceNoMore: Mar 16 2012, 14:58

I was wondering if I could have a shot at this, here's a sample.

I'll be changing the font to Wild Words later, and picking a different font for sfx (and adding those *s).

It looks fine to me. And it' a good thing someone came along to, otherwise I probably would've ended up doing it. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/laugh.gif)

Always glad to have more editors aboard (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

Edit about editing:
* editing for ep 14 is not accepted, I thought gtdragon wanted to work on it? https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=5432


This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Mar 16 2012, 22:14

I'll do 14 in the next couple days after I finish these other tasks unless the new guy wants it too.

It'll depend. I originally wanted to finish 16 in 2 days but for some reason I got a ton of stuff to do on Saturday and Sunday suddenly. Kinda weird how my weekends always turn out busier than my weekdays. I'll do it if it's still not claimed by the time I'm done with 16 (looking at Monday - Tuesday now).

(EPISODE 11...)

088

"Hyoeeh"...maybe manually redraw that "H", or something, but right now it looks like "U".

096
"Hieeeh", that "H" again...it's not too bad here, but I think it'd be nice if it looked more like an "H".

Now that you mention it, you're right... guess I'll have to find a different font, as I've been fond of Shonen Punk for sharp exclamations.

Anyway, I'll make those corrections once I'm done with episode 15 (which is about half done right now). Thanks, People

Episode 15

p180
ビチャビチャ

You missed a translation here, jfji552. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

This post has been edited by lightshader: Mar 17 2012, 07:07

Episode 15

p180
ビチャビチャ

You missed a translation here, jfji552. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

Oops. This should do:

*drip* *drip*