Ibelieveinmiracles's version is the first, and good enough for me to accept this edit; there are few minor fixes:
* p.9 - the bubble "This feeling from insertion..." needs redoing, it's cut
* p.16 - let's use the translator's suggested "Coupling with Motosuwa-san, huh..."
Bounty for AVIVA 4 coming as soon as this one is posted in the galleries (IMG:[
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Also, please note we usually don't do any translator or editor races; this is why it's always best to wait for a go ahead from a project coordinator (like me) before doing any work; it's a shame to see wasted effort when sometimes some projects wait for months for find a translator or an editor.
This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Jul 14 2013, 22:07