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This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Nov 27 2011, 23:46

Hey Piotrus!

SFX are still missing, but I'm finally done with the script! Yay lol

Don't know if you have time to proofread or anything (already done a few times, but with my English there should still be room for improvement), but I'll post the translation - may help speeding things up.

SFX wise: is there any link to Tonigobe guide? I thought it would be of great help with me lacking any kind of experience, but it seems like I cannot find a working link. :<

One more thing: as you can see, I went with the English version of the characters' names (essentially, Eva Kadan for Eri Kisaki, Rachel Moore for Ran Mori, Meitantei Conan being referred as Case Closed), is that okay or do you want me to go with Japanese names? Fixing it won't really take any time.

Edit #1: updated with Japanese names!

Edit #2: fixed some stuff after proofreadings, added SFX!

Edit #3: updated once again with derpymal awesome proofreading! Only change was Vodka's laughter on page 13.

Edit #...: updated the final script, made several fix & improvements thanks to Galdric!

Anyway, here's the translation script. About the legend, I was inspired by rookie84's one, it seemed very easy on the eyes and well structured. I hope that's not a problem...

[ ] Page Number (refer to e-hentai gallery here https://e-hentai.org/g/11115/a0334ac1ad/)

( ) Outside of bubbles

[*] Translator's notes

< > SFX

- Double space: Separate bubbles
- Single space: Conjoined bubbles


[03]

P 05 Lust Tribunal - The sudden fall of the Queen - ZOL

P 29 Winter Vacation - Yuri Tooru

P 45 Memorie's - Yuri Tooru

P 53 Sex with Ran, Videotape - Kuribee

Front Cover - ZOL

[04]

Lust Tribunal
- The sudden fall of the Queen -

Summary of the previous episodes

The influence of the Black Organization has slowly extended to the center of Japan.
In order to save Ran, who went missing, Eri tries to get in contact with the organization by herself, but...

[05]

Your performance was magnificent as usual, Miss Kisaki...

With the way things are proceeding, we should quickly get an innocent verdict.

Do me a favor and give me a break...

This whole trial is a farce...

How many of your people do I have to prove innocent for you to let me see my daughter!?

Ah, I'm sorry... It's that I've yet to receive authorization from above.

Miss Kisaki, about your unwilling collaboration with the organization...

<Hee Hee>

Stop it! Who'd want to willingly cooperate with you kidnappers...

[06]

Saying such things about us may have consequences, Miss Kisaki.

Anyway, your daughter will voluntarily show herself at our place.

Will you please stop with this nonsense! What on earth are you people-

!

<*Crackle*>

<Geh>

My my, what a strong-willed woman.

<*Wobble*>

If you wanna see your daughter that badly, I'll let you meet.

I was really astonished...

[07]

You are old enough to know better, aren't you ashamed of drinking during the day?

Shaddup... I'll do as I please...

You're disgusting...

I don't ever want to see your face again!

<BAM!>

It's all so strange...

Since that brat disappeared...

(He's right...)

(Everything changed...)

(Ever since the day that kid vanished...)

Uh...ngh...

[08]

Ugh...

!

No...

<*Rustle*>

No!

<*Clatter Clatter*>

W-Why am I...

<*Clatter Clatter*>

[09]

You finally woke up, Miss Kisaki.

Wha... What's the meaning of this?!

Please, it's not really how it looks.

See, this is a secret place where our organization runs its business.

The rule here is that women can't wear ordinary clothes.

Wh-what did you just say...

Hey, can't you hear that amazing moan? Doesn't it sound familiar?

Nhu...
Hmu...

That's...

[10]

<*Suck*>

Ran!

<*Smack*>

Mmh...

Nhh...

<Squelch>

<Squash>

Ran! Ran!

It's your mother! Can't you hear me!?

After we went through so much trouble to have you meet, this is really unfortunate. See, once she starts sucking on a dick, she won't listen to anything.

[11]

Ran sure showed a talent for it from the very beginning.

<Slurp>

<Splash>

<Shplush

<Splat>

<Haaah>

She's in great demand with the big shots from the political and business circles.

Eheheheh!

Man, I can't wait anymore!

<*Plunge*>

<Aaah>

[12]

<*Thrust*>

Ah, ahh!

<Joop>

Ahn

<Squash>

Ahhn

Ugh...

<*Rub*>

Hahh

Haa...

You... What did you do to my daughter!?

<*Thrust Thrust*>

You wanna know?

[13]

Eheh...

<Beep>

!

<Bzzz Bzzz Bzzz>

AAAAAHH

<Bzzzz>

<*TREMBLE*>

<*SHAKE*>

E he he...

Looks like a simple rotor is enough for our straight-laced lawyer to get this excited.

Wh-What is this? It's like a rush of electricity...

Aagh

Haaa

I had your body injected with plenty of Neuro-Tamers... It's a type of nanite our organization developed.

<Bzzz>

Aaah...

Ah...

They attach to your nervous system, artificially producing a variety of sensations. That's the reason why your entire body feels like one big erogenous zone.

[14]

No... No way...

Ah... Ahh...

<*SHIVER*>

<*TREMBLE*>

<Fwisshh>

HAAAAAAAAH!!

Heh heh...

See this woman here? We just brought her in.

Uh, which means... She's that skilled lawyer...

Exactly, she's Ran's mother. I thought you'd want to taste both mother and daughter.

Hahh

Haa

<Whishh>

<*Drip Drip>

These breasts are so elastic... Who would've thought that you've got a teenage daughter?

I can't believe... I can feel it this much...

<*Squeeze*>

Stop... Ahh...

[15]

<Schlup>

<Squelch>

Ah ah ah! Even the Queen of the Courtroom ended up like this! What a spoiled woman!

Hahh

Ahh

Ohh

Haa

Aahh

<Squish Squash>

<Schlop>

N-Noo! Don't touch me there!

<*Rub*>

Your pussy's already drenched! Hehehehe...

[16]

Hey now, I'm putting it in!

Ah... Ahh...

Haa

Hah

Hahh

<*PLUNGE*>

NGHAAAH!

Don't- Don't do it that...

<*Ram*>

<*Thrust*>

<Joop>

...Violentlyy! Nnhaa!

[17]

<*Shove*>

It's... It's all the way in... Ahh... It's shaking!

Stop, I'll go crazy... I'm already...

<Zoop>

<Zuup>

Ha ha ha! Really? Is that so? Then enjoy it as much as you wish!

<*Thrust*>

<*Shove*>

Hah

Ahh

Uhh

[18]

Guhaha! What a beauty we got here!

<Squelch>

It'd be such a waste to have you do only your attorney job...

<Zoop>

<Shtup>

Ahh

Ohh

Let's have the mother and her daughter give their best, alright?

Come on, I'm gonna cum inside of you!

<Shuv>

Gahh

Ahh

Ohhh

<Shlup>

Hah

Inside... ?! N-No!

Don't come inside of me!

[19]

<*Spurt*>

<*Squirt*>

GYAAAAHH!

It's... It's so hot... I feel like my body's melting...

<*Sluggish*>

S-Stop... !

It's not over yet, baby! I'm having you next!

<Splat>

<Squish>

<*Twitch*>

Eeek!

[20]

<*Rub Rub*>

It's your fault, my darling, that my company lost the case and suffered huge losses-

I'll get my revenge now! Gehehe!

Gaaah!

Ahhh... Even if he's just rubbing his thing against me...

<*Plunge*>

<*Thrust*>

Oh!

<Shlup>

Huhh...

<Fop>

Ngh...

<*Lunge*>

[21]

D-damn, I can't hold back any longer! I'll take your ass!

<*Grind*>

Aahh...

Don't... Don't churn it up so muuuch!

Huhh

Ohh

They... They're rubbing against each other inside of me...

<Zoop>

<*Thrust*>

<Squish>

Hah

Gwhahaha! Boy, this is too tight!

Ahh

<Shlop>

<Squelch>

[22]

Hey, how come your mouth is all alone?

Mguh!!

<*Rub*>

Heh heh! You shouldn't restrain yourself, I'm sure you like cocks so much you can't do without one!

Aahhh... This smell is...

<*Sip*>

<Ahmm>

<Shlurp>

Woah! She just clung on to it!

Mmh

Nhu

Oh... I'm cumming just by having his dick rub the insides of my mouth...

It's like I'm a different person altogether...

<Slurp>

<*Smack*>

<*Suck*>

Mmh... Nguuh!

Ahh

Hyahaha! Your cunt is overflowing!

You're making some pretty nasty noises, pumping up and down like that...

<Squish>

<Splash>

<Shlup>

<Squelch>

[23]

<*Squirt*>

I-I'm cumming! Make sure to savor it!

Aahhhn...

<Splotch>

Here goes mine, take it!

<*Spurt*>

I want... Mo-more...

<*Drip*>

Huh? You desire more rods? Then you gotta beg for it. 'Please, give me lots of dicks!' Say it out loud!

<*Ram Ram*>

Give... me... lots of... dicks... please!

I WANT YOUR COCKS... MORE OF THEM... FILL ME!

Haa

Haa

Yes... Yes... I'm a pig... a piggg... Gaaaah!!

<Zup Zuup>

GWAHAHA! What a slutty pig!

<Zoop>

<Squash>

[24]

AHH

OHH

AAHH...

HAH

[25]

Neuro-Tamers...

Looks like our tests on human subjects were pretty much a success.

Ah... Ahhh...

Yeah... They were able to change this much, even that stubborn attorney...

Eheh...

I'll turn this whole country into one big slave supply center.

And looks like I'll be making big money selling these piggy women...

To be continued... Maybe.

[28]

The blue sea

The white, sandy beach

The scorching sun

[29]

For me

[30]

Winter Vacation

Smile for me!

Yuri Tooru

[31]

What is this nonsense...

We've gotta leave tomorrow, hurry up and choose...
Your swimsuit...

GAH!

Why are you being so mean?

Miwako... weren't you the one asking to stay because it was close to the airport?

Well... That's true, but...

Then stop babbling...

And help me choose! I'll help you choose yours, too.

I ...

<*Gulp*>

I got it, meh...

[32]

Eeek! Gaah!

Waaah! Sigh...

Yu... Yumi...

CAN YOU MAKE UP YOUR MIND?

I can doooo it!

Because I reached...

My main goal!

Are you FOR REAL?

[33]

Ta-daaa! ♪

How is it, Miwako?

[34]

<*Twitch*>

For you, isn't that a bit...

Sober?

<*Grin*>

You brought your costume too, why don't you show it to me?

Eh?

My costume?

Yep!

<*Push*>

Hurry up and go change! ♥

[35]

How's it going?

Don't you think it's a little too... extreme?

[36]

Hey! You're drunk, aren't you!?

Of cooourse nooot ♪

Mmh!!

Mh...

Nhhu

Nhaa

Haa

Ahnn

You don't really mind this after all... right, Miwako?

...

Seee? ♥

<*Gush*>

[37]

Ohh

Haaa

Hahh

Ngh

Haa

Uhn

I think this costume...

... really suits you

...

Answer me, be honest.

NYAA! ♥

[38]

HAH!

<Squelch>

If you want me to go on... Shouldn't you tell me?

<*Bite*>

...

Keep... Keep going... Yumi...

Don't tease me...

<*Shiver Shiver*>

FUA! ♥

Alright ♥ I'm glad you said it ♪

[39]

Mmh... ♪ Your breasts Miwako... ♥ They're perfectly ripe! ♥

No! ♥

Ahh...

They are sweet and delicious, just like cherries ♪

[40]

You look dizzy, your face is the color of the cherry blossoms... ♥

And it's the same color down here too ♪

Noohh... Yumii...

If you suck on it that much...

Looks like I'm gonna end up drunk with your dew, Miwako ♪

[41]

Ahh!

<*Lick*>

Don't...

Don't stop...

You're the only one having fun here, Miwako...

Lick me down there, come ooon! ♪

...

<*Plug*>

Ah!

No, not my ass! ♥

[42]

Yuuup, I've long thought anal would be your weak point ♪

This is no good... ♥

I'M...

No... OHH! ♥

[43]

I'M CUMMIIING!

AAAH!

Man, Sato and the others sure are late...

It's already time for our meeting...

[44]

Memorie's

Yuri Tooru

[45]

Ahh

Ohh

Hahh

As always, the amorous affair between the two girls takes place on a boring afternoon, following the PE class.

[46]

Even the usually determined Miwako...

Quickly turns into a cute kitten ♥

[47]

Little kitten...

Why don't you purr a bit with your cute voice... ♥

[48]

Oh my... Your 'mouth' down here is moaning... ♥

[49]

You are drooling...

My little kitten, you're hopeless ♥

[50]

What a naughty kitten, I'll have to punish you ♪

[51]

And now, time to 'meow'!

No, it's not!

And Miwako...

Was the kitten! ♥

Eeeh? Is that so Miwa-chan?

[52]

Sex with Ran, videotape

Orgasm addiction, Sex addiction

Ran - Bust:89 . Waist:56 . Hip:91

Ran's bust seems like it's about to pop out of her bra, with such a firm and attractive body.
She loves masturbating with vibrators, so she always uses them with a lot of vigor.
Also, with fellatio being her forte, she gets extremely greedy for a guy's penis.
After that, she has unprotected sex and she ends up cumming.
In this volume, Ran lures men with her cute face, covered in sweat and fluids.
She looks completely satisfied.

Karakuribee

[53]

Hello Kazuha! Here, this is the investigation data we recently collected.

Ah, you brought it!

But I sure didn't think you were into that kind of stuff...

Well... Not really that much...

Hey, don't spill the beans to your father!

I know, I know! Thanks!

[54]

Some time ago, when I visited the Police Headquarters...

Ahn

Ahh

I stumbled upon Ootaki and his colleagues dubbing some porn they had previously seized.

Because of that, in exchange for my silence, I got to borrow those videos.

Wow... You can see everything...

Ootaki looked pretty surprised that a girl like me watched these kinds of videos.

Yeah... Those pornographic videos I borrowed, just like always.

It was with one of them that the whole thing started...

[55]

Let's see... The next one is...

<Beep>

Eh?

Now, open your legs and show your panties.

More, spread them more.

Like that, good.

[56]

Your pussy, where is it?

<*Tremble*>

Try pressing against the spot with your fingers.

It's... It's embarrassing...

Isn't that... Ran?

Why? Why is she on the tape?

[57]

Next, take off your skirt.

Wow, that's a cute butt you got there.

<*Rustle*>

Could you unbutton your blouse without taking it off now?

That's great... Incredibly sexy!

[58]

And now, use this to enjoy yourself.

Exactly like that, good girl. Soak it with your saliva.

<*Lick*>

Be sure to lick it till it's all soaked.

<Shlurp>

Why don't you try touching your vagina and your clitoris with your free hand?

<Schlop>

This looks like everyday stuff for you!

[59]

Unh

Alright, feel like putting it in?

<*Rub*>

Ngh

<Fopp>

Nnhh

Hah... Uhh...

<Fuup>

Hahh

<Foop>

Aaaahhh

<Shlop>

[60]

Haa

Ahh

<Shmuck>

Nhh

<Shclip>

Ahn

Hah

<*Twist*>

Aaah

NNHAAAAAA!

[61]

Uh-oh, you came?

<*Throb Throb*>

<*Twitch*>

...... Yeah.

To shake that violently...

Hah

Hahh

You must really love vibrators.

Oh Ran...

Good. This time, give this guy's wand a good time.

You like dicks too, don't you?

[62]

Hah

<*Kiss*>

Nhh

<*Lick*>

Hahh

I never thought licking a dick could be this good...

<Shlurp>

Nchuu

Mmh

Nhh

<Schlip>

[63]

<*Pull*>

<Schlap Shlurp>

Hya!

How is it? This guy's good at licking, isn't he?

<*Lick*>

Yes...
It feels so goomff...

<*Sssuck*>

<Joop>

<Schlip>

You're really good too, Ran.

[64]

Ran, isn't it time to put it in?

Hah

<Schlup>

Haah

Open your legs.

This big cock is going to enter your vagina, Ran.

Ah... It's... It's going in

Ohh

<*Rub*>

Uuh

<*Fiddle*>

Aah

AAAAGH!

[65]

<*RAM*>

Aaahh

It's hitting my deepest spot...

Hahh

Ahh

Your pussy is throbbing... gah!

<*Thrust*>

Ngh!

<Shuv>

Ahh

It's incredible...

<Woha>

[66]

Ahh

<Shlup>

Haa

<Schlop>

Nnhh

Ran...

Ohh

Yes...

Guh...

It's...so good...

Haa

<Zup Zoop Zuup>

Ahh

Haangh

[67]

Ah

Ahh

I'm, I'm gonna-

On... On my face...

Let it out on my face...

<Shtup>

<*Spurt Spurt*>

[68]

Hahh

Ohh

<Hummm>

<Schmuk>

It appears you took a liking for this boy's dick.

Oh... Ran...

Haa

Ahh

<Shlup>

[69]

Let's do it from behind this time.

<*Plunge*>

Ahhn

Ah!

<Zoop>

<Zuup>

Nnh

<Shlop>

Ahh

Huu

[70]

<Squelch>

<Squash>

Ahh

Hahh

<*Squeeze*>

If you... thrust that hard-

I'll... Agh! Cuuum!

[71]

You seemed to have a thing for vibrators, Ran.

Eh?

<*Rub*>

<*Plunge*>

Let's plug one of those in your asshole now!

Aah! Huaaaa!

[72]

Ohh

Hahh

Mnnh

Hya

Aha

A-Amazing...

Hahh

You're filling my pussy...

Nnh

Ahh

I'm overflowing... oohh!

<*Fiddle*>

<*RUB RUB*>

Huaa

[73]

At home, I got all excited watching Ran having sex...

I could feel her indecent figure...

Aah... My fingers won't stop moving...

I want to touch Ran's bare body...

I want to experience her sensitive spot...

[74]

Ran...

I want to violate Ran!

Ahh...

AAAAAAAHHH!!

<*TWITCH*>

<*TREMBLE*>

[75]

Hahh

Ahhh

<Bzzzzz>

Ah, Ran!
It's me, Kazuha...

Are you free on Sunday? Yeah...I'd like to drop by...

There's a video I'd like to watch together...

~ END ~

[76]

ZOL here!

This is bad!

I really don't have any time! I'm very sorry!

I'll do my best next time!

[77]

Hello theeere! ♪

I'm sorry you haven't heard from me since August. After the summer Comiket I was completely sucked in by Ragnarok [Online]...
Up to now I didn't really pay much attention to roleplay, but MMORPGS are just so much fun... ♪
I'll end up enslaved by RO. It's gonna be the end for me, just like the cherry blossoms blooming out of season... *sweat drop*

Yuri Tooru

[78]

Hey guys, Karakuribee here.

Gosh, I'm running out of time...
I know it's everyday stuff, but I always leave things half done.
This time the story took too much time.
I thought the plot alone would take about 5 volumes, but I didn't like the result much and in the end I just scrapped it.
I guess I should just say that I wanted to draw Kazuha's onani scene lol.

This time we launched a new series.
In the end though, what we're doing is just the same.
I think I'll continue working on this for a bit. Please keep rooting for me.

[79]

When they say 'a horse comes from a gourd', I guess it's really like this...
We were motivated by the 10th anniversary of the volume, so we decided to once again resume activities with our former circle ‘Mengerekun'!
Even the volume's name has changed, it's now ‘Potemayo'.
We could almost hear a voice asking ‘Did anything really change with your naming sense?', but nothing really changed! ♪
We just felt that way... *sweat drop* It's always like this...
We're planning to work on Meitantei Conan for a while, so please support the reborn Mengerekun!

[80]

Potemayo

Potemayo

Let me know if it's good enough, as I said I think it can be made much smoother...

I really hope Tonigobe guide is still out there (well, not that I know what it's written in it lol), I'm afraid I'm not good enough to do it without it taking like forever... :<<

This post has been edited by wr4st3r: Nov 28 2011, 02:15

First off, congrats on finishing Potemayo! I found it hot but way too long to tackle myself. Anyway, here's Tonigobe's SFX guide. Yeah, this is invaluable when people want SFXs to be done as well.
 JapaneseSFX_110424.pdf ( 590.93k ) Number of downloads: 138

wr4st3r, great to see the progress

the bounty is yours, but yes, I'd appreciate it very much if you could change the names into Japanese/sub version, and do the SFXes

I'll proofread the script within 48h the most

any editors willing to work on some Detective Conan stuff?

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Nov 16 2011, 10:34

First off, congrats on finishing Potemayo! I found it hot but way too long to tackle myself. Anyway, here's Tonigobe's SFX guide. Yeah, this is invaluable when people want SFXs to be done as well.
 JapaneseSFX_110424.pdf ( 590.93k ) Number of downloads: 138

Thank you so much rookie, I only had a quick glance but woha, the .pdf looks amazing, Tonigobe's the man! :>

I haven't really watched the whole series (they broadcasted some episodes some time ago), but really enjoying detective stories, Conan was fairly interesting and thus an easy pick. Luckily enough Potemayo didn't require much knowledge of the anime/manga, so my experience with the series seemed enough.

wr4st3r, great to see the progress

the bounty is yours, but yes, I'd appreciate it very much if you could change the names into Japanese/sub version, and do the SFXes

I'll proofread the script within 48h the most

any editors willing to work on some Detective Conan stuff?

Alright, I updated the previous post with the Japanese names (though I maintained 'Black Organization' for 'Kuro no Soshiki', seemed much better).

I've also fixed a couple of punctuation/caps mistakes, never trust your own proofreading I guess lol.

I'll start working on the SFX asap, hopefully it won't take that much with the guide!

Thank you so much rookie, I only had a quick glance but woha, the .pdf looks amazing, Tonigobe's the man! :>

I haven't really watched the whole series (they broadcasted some episodes some time ago), but really enjoying detective stories, Conan was fairly interesting and thus an easy pick. Luckily enough Potemayo didn't require much knowledge of the anime/manga, so my experience with the series seemed enough.
Alright, I updated the previous post with the Japanese names (though I maintained 'Black Organization' for 'Kuro no Soshiki', seemed much better).

Ah, that's fine. I tend look at the sub names as canon, as sub retains Black Organization. If I see anything else, I'll mention in in proofreading notes.

And I am glad to hear you enjoyed the DC series. I plan to have all Potemayo series translated, so when you feel like coming back and helping with vol. 2, the bounty for it should be waiting. In fact, I'll post a bounty for it as soon as you claim the bounty for this one (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

Proofreading comments:

[04]

"In order to save Ran, who went missing, the unaided Eri tries to get in contact with the organization"

I am not sure if unaided sounds right. How about "lonely"?

[06]

"Anyway, Your daughter will voluntarily present herself to our place."

no need to capitalize Your

also, there is something wrong here. "at our place"?

[09]

"Please, it’s not really as it looks. "

how about

"Please, it’s not really how it looks. "

[13]

"That’s the reason why your entire body feels like big erogenous zone. "

I think it is missing one a

"That’s the reason why your entire body feels like a big erogenous zone. "

[15]

"Ah ah ah! Even the Queen of the legal word ended up like this! What a spoiled woman!"

I think her title is Queen of the Courtroom

[23]

"I-I’m blasting! Make sure to savor it! "

Blasting? Cuming, perhaps? Exploding, maybe... blasting is a bit strange.

[39]

"Mmh... ♪ Your breasts Miwako... ♥ They're perfectly ripen! ♥"

Not sure if ripen is correct English, grammar wise, but this is a bit beyond me (I am not a native speaker, neither). I'd say just "ripe", without the n at the end.

Overall, an excellent job, thank you and I hope you'll consider helping out with the rest of the series!

Bounty for part 2: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=4845

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Nov 17 2011, 05:47

Proofreading comments:

<snip>

Not sure if ripen is correct English, grammar wise, but this is a bit beyond me (I am not a native speaker, neither). I'd say just "ripe", without the n at the end.

Ummm, I'll take a look at proofreading, then, since I'm a co-sponsor and English is one of the languages I speak fluently. I probably won't be able to do it until tomorrow, though.

Ummm, I'll take a look at proofreading, then, since I'm a co-sponsor and English is one of the languages I speak fluently. I probably won't be able to do it until tomorrow, though.

The more, the merrier (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

Proofreading comments:

[...]

Overall, an excellent job, thank you and I hope you'll consider helping out with the rest of the series!

Bounty for part 2: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=4845

Thanks for taking your time and proofread it Piotrus!

Quick update: only have to finish SFX for the last chapter, I'll update the script as soon as I'm done with it!

[04]

"In order to save Ran, who went missing, the unaided Eri tries to get in contact with the organization"

I am not sure if unaided sounds right. How about "lonely"?

Yeah, I didn't like 'unaided' that much, but it was about conveying that she was alone after the organization, and that was the best I could come up with.

I thought lonely generally referred to someone who lacks company, or is simply isolated... Alone maybe? Perhaps derpymal can help us with this...

[06]

"Anyway, Your daughter will voluntarily present herself to our place."

no need to capitalize Your

also, there is something wrong here. "at our place"?

Lol yeah, damn caps, has heppened so many times when I go for a certain sentence and then change my mind.

To tell you the truth tho', I thought I changed that sentence, since after checking a couple of dictionaries, I wasn't that sure about "to present oneself". Vodka there was essentially saying that Ran will be coming to their place, of her own will.

I'm not sure "at" is okay there, but again, I'm no mothertongue :E

[09]

"Please, it’s not really as it looks."

how about

"Please, it’s not really how it looks. "

Uhmm I'd have gone with the first one, but... Now that I read that again, I feel "Please, it's not the way it looks" it's better!

[13]

"That’s the reason why your entire body feels like big erogenous zone. "

I think it is missing one a

"That’s the reason why your entire body feels like a big erogenous zone. "

Argh I did it again (decide to change something, then mess up with it)! It was supposed to be "feels like one big erogenous zone". Fixing asap!

[15]

"Ah ah ah! Even the Queen of the legal word ended up like this! What a spoiled woman!"

I think her title is Queen of the Courtroom

That's what I get for checking the wrong wiki lol. And ultra fail @ 'word', I'm really help people are helping with this...

[23]
"I-I’m blasting! Make sure to savor it!"

Blasting? Cuming, perhaps? Exploding, maybe... blasting is a bit strange.

Yeah it sounded funny, it's that I found that in a couple of novels/doujin in the past, so I thought it was okay to use something different. Guess I'll just go back to cumming and such.

[39]

"Mmh... ♪ Your breasts Miwako... ♥ They're perfectly ripen! ♥"

Not sure if ripen is correct English, grammar wise, but this is a bit beyond me (I am not a native speaker, neither). I'd say just "ripe", without the n at the end.

Totally right! :>

Ummm, I'll take a look at proofreading, then, since I'm a co-sponsor and English is one of the languages I speak fluently. I probably won't be able to do it until tomorrow, though.

The more, the merrier (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

Absolutely, thanks derpy! I'll have the script updated in a while (at the least with the most important fixes, then I'll just update it with SFX), so please check that again!

8,743C added to this bounty <3

The right wiki: [onetruthprevails.com] http://onetruthprevails.com/Eva_Kadan

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Also, we have an editor (here).

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Nov 17 2011, 19:12

I thought lonely generally referred to someone who lacks company, or is simply isolated... Alone maybe? Perhaps derpymal can help us with this...

by herself/singlehandedly

Edited first post with SFX!

Some feedback on this would be much appreciated, lots of onomatopoeias were made of 2 sounds (really struggled with some popping sounds, god bless Tonigobe!) and I think it might get a bit repetitive at some points...

I'm also not sure whether the script is clear enough for the editing, I went for the standard top to bottom, right to left order. If necessary, I can write the corresponding kanas for each SFX.

by herself/singlehandedly

Great stuff People, thanks! :>>

The sentence is now as follows, should be okay methinks

In order to save Ran, who went missing, Eri tries to get in contact with the organization by herself, but...

This post has been edited by wr4st3r: Nov 17 2011, 23:00

Okay, notes.

Cut this! Who'd want to willingly cooperate with you kidnappers...

'Cut this!' doesn't really make any sense. I think this would sound better:
Stop it! Who'd want to willingly cooperate with you kidnappers...

Anyway, Your daughter will voluntarily present herself to our place.

Was mentioned before. My suggestion:
Anyway, your daughter will voluntarily show herself at our place.

You are old enough to know better, it's daytime, aren't you ashamed of drinking?

This feels a little awkward.
You are old enough to know better, aren't you ashamed of drinking during the day?

I don't want to see your face one more time!

This, too.
I don't ever want to see your face again!

(Everything has changed...)

(Since the day that kid vanished...)

I think this has a better flow.

(Everything changed...)

(Ever since the day that kid vanished...)

Please, it's not really the way it looks.

This was already mentioned, also, and this makes sense to me:
Please, it's not really how it looks.

The rule here is that woman cannot wear ordinary clothes.

Just a derp.
The rule here is that women cannot wear ordinary clothes.

Eh eh eh eh...

Looks like a simple rotor is enough for our straight-laced lawyer to get that excited.

In the context, it seems more like an exclamation of surprise, so I think this makes more sense.

Eehhh...

Looks like a simple rotor is enough for our straight-laced lawyer to get this excited.

I had your body injected with plenty of Neuro-Tamers... It's a type of micro-machines our organization developed.

It looks like it literally says "micro-machines" in the text, but to be more accurate
I had your body injected with plenty of Neuro-Tamers... It's a type of nanite our organization developed.

They cling to your central nerves, artificially producing a variety of sensations. That's the reason why your entire body feels like one big erogenous zone.

That first bit seems awkward.
They attach to your nervous system, artificially producing a variety of sensations. That's the reason why your entire body feels like one big erogenous zone.

These breasts are so elastic... Who could've thought you're mother to a high schooler?

Now this is more of a question of "literal" versus "non-literal" translation, aside from some awkward grammar.
These breasts are so elastic... Who would've thought that you've got a teenage daughter?

<*Kned*>

Knead?

Don't... Don't churn up so muuuch!

Derp.
Don't... Don't churn it up so muuuch!

They'... They're rubbing each other's inside of me...

Just some awkwardness.
They... They're rubbing against each other inside of me...

Hey, how come you mouth is all alone?

Typo.
Hey, how come your mouth is all alone?

Heh heh! You shouldn't restrain yourself, I'm sure you like cocks so much you cannot do without one!

Awkward.
Heh heh! You shouldn't restrain yourself, I'm sure you like cocks so much you can't do without one!

Woha! She just clung on to it!
Its an onomatopoeia expression, I think "whoa" is a good equivalent.
Whoa! She just clung on to it!

Huh? You desire more rods? Then you gotta beg for it. 'Please, give me lots of dicks!', say it, out loud!

Awkwardness.
Huh? You desire more rods? Then you gotta beg for it. 'Please, give me lots of dicks!' Say it out loud!

Yeah... They were able to change this much even that stubborn attorney...

Punctuation.
Yeah... They were able to change this much, even that stubborn attorney...

====
I think there's a limit to how many quote tags I can use in a single post, so TBC.

This post has been edited by derpymal: Nov 18 2011, 04:10

Cont'd
===

Becaused I reached...

Typo.
Because I reached...

... really fits you

More appropriate.
... really suits you

Man, Sato and the others are sure late...

Word order.
Man, Sato and the others sure are late...

Ran's bust seems to be about to pop out of her bra, with such firm and attractive body.
She loves masturbating with vibes, so she always uses them with a lot of strength.
Also, with fellatio being her forte, she gets extremely greedy for a guy's penis.
After that, she has unprotected sex, and she ends up cumming.
In this volume, Ran lures mans with her cute face, covered in sweat and fluids.
She looks completely satisfied.

Some rewording. "Vibes" was changed to "vibrator" in all instances and "strength" doesn't seem quite right. "Vigor" seems more appropriate.

Ran's bust seems like it's about to pop out of her bra, with such a firm and attractive body.
She loves masturbating with vibrators, so she always uses them with a lot of vigor.
Also, with fellatio being her forte, she gets extremely greedy for a guy's penis.
After that, she has unprotected sex and she ends up cumming.
In this volume, Ran lures men with her cute face, covered in sweat and fluids.
She looks completely satisfied.

But sure I didn't think you were into that kind of stuff...

Word order.
But I sure didn't think you were into that kind of stuff...

Ootaki looked pretty surprised that a girl like me watched this kind of videos.

Awkwardness.
Ootaki looked pretty surprised that a girl like me watched these kinds of videos.

And now, open your legs and show your pants.

This isn't Strike Witches.
Now, open your legs and show your panties.

Will you now unbutton your blouse, without taking it off?

Awkward.
Could you unbutton your blouse without taking it off now?

Be sure to like it till it's all soaked.

Typo.
Be sure to lick it till it's all soaked.


Awkward.
I never thought licking a dick could be this good...

How's it? This guy's good at licking, isn't he?

Wrong use of contraction.
How is it? This guy's good at licking, isn't he?

Ran, Isn't it time to put it in?

Typo.
Ran, isn't it time to put it in?

I'm sorry you haven't heard from me since August. After the summer Comiket I was completely sucked in by Ragnarock...
Up to now I didn't really pay much attention to roleplay, but MMORPGS are just so much fun... ♪
I'll end up enslaved by Ragnarock. It's gonna be the end for me, just like the cherry blossoms blooming out of season... *sweat drop*

Fixed.

I'm sorry you haven't heard from me since August. After the summer Comiket I was completely sucked in by Ragnarok [Online]...
Up to now I didn't really pay much attention to roleplay, but MMORPGS are just so much fun... ♪
I'll end up enslaved by RO. It's gonna be the end for me, just like the cherry blossoms blooming out of season... *sweat drop*

I know it's everyday stuff, but I always leave things halfdone.

Typo.
I know it's everyday stuff, but I always leave things half done.

We were motivated by the 10th anniversary of the volume, and so we decided to resume once again the activities for our former group ‘Mengerekun'!

A little awkward.
We were motivated by the 10th anniversary of the volume, so we decided to once again resume activities with our former circle ‘Mengerekun'!

===
And to make it easy, here's the proofed version of the entire script with my changes.

[ ] Page Number (refer to e-hentai gallery here https://e-hentai.org/g/11115/a0334ac1ad/)

( ) Outside of bubbles

[*] Translator's notes

< > SFX

- Double space: Separate bubbles
- Single space: Conjoined bubbles


[03]

P 05 Lust Tribunal - The sudden fall of the Queen - ZOL

P 29 Winter Vacation - Yuri Tooru

P 45 Memorie's - Yuri Tooru

P 53 Sex with Ran, Videotape - Kuribee

Front Cover - ZOL

[04]

Lust Tribunal
- The sudden fall of the Queen -

Summary of the previous episodes

The influence of the Black Organization has slowly extended to the center of Japan.
In order to save Ran, who went missing, Eri tries to get in contact with the organization by herself, but...

[05]

Your performance was magnificent as usual, Miss Kisaki...

With the way things are proceeding, we should quickly get an innocent verdict.

Do me a favor and give me a break...

This whole trial is a farce...

How many of your people do I have to prove innocent for you to let me see my daughter!?

Ah, I'm sorry... It's that I've yet to receive authorization from above.

Miss Kisaki, about your unwilling collaboration with the organization...

<Hee Hee>

Stop it! Who'd want to willingly cooperate with you kidnappers...

[06]

Saying such things about us may have consequences, Miss Kisaki.

Anyway, your daughter will voluntarily show herself at our place.

Will you please stop with this nonsense! What on earth are you people-

!

<*Crackle*>

<Geh>

My my, what a strong-willed woman.

<*Wobble*>

If you wanna see your daughter that badly, I'll let you meet.

I was really astonished...

[07]

You are old enough to know better, aren't you ashamed of drinking during the day?

Shaddup... I'll do as I please...

You're disgusting...

I don't ever want to see your face again!

<BAM!>

It's all so strange...

Since that brat disappeared...

(He's right...)

(Everything changed...)

(Ever since the day that kid vanished...)

Uh...ngh...

[08]

Ugh...

!

No...

<*Rustle*>

No!

<*Clatter Clatter*>

W-Why am I...

<*Clatter Clatter*>

[09]

You finally woke up, Miss Kisaki.

Wha... What's the meaning of this?!

Please, it's not really how it looks.

See, this is a secret place where our organization runs its business.

The rule here is that women can't wear ordinary clothes.

Wh-what did you just say...

Hey, can't you hear that amazing moan? Doesn't it sound familiar?

Nhu...
Hmu...

That's...

[10]

<*Suck*>

Ran!

<*Smack*>

Mmh...

Nhh...

<Squelch>

<Squash>

Ran! Ran!

It's your mother! Can't you hear me!?

After we went through so much trouble to have you meet, this is really unfortunate. See, once she starts sucking on a dick, she won't listen to anything.

[11]

Ran sure showed a talent for it from the very beginning.

<Slurp>

<Splash>

<Shplush

<Splat>

<Haaah>

She's in great demand with the big shots from the political and business circles.

Eheheheh!

Man, I can't wait anymore!

<*Plunge*>

<Aaah>

[12]

<*Thrust*>

Ah, ahh!

<Joop>

Ahn

<Squash>

Ahhn

Ugh...

<*Rub*>

Hahh

Haa...

You... What did you do to my daughter!?

<*Thrust Thrust*>

You wanna know?

[13]

Eheh...

<Beep>

!

<Bzzz Bzzz Bzzz>

AAAAAHH

<Bzzzz>

<*TREMBLE*>

<*SHAKE*>

Eehhh...

Looks like a simple rotor is enough for our straight-laced lawyer to get this excited.

Wh-What is this? It's like a rush of electricity...

Aagh

Haaa

I had your body injected with plenty of Neuro-Tamers... It's a type of nanite our organization developed.

<Bzzz>

Aaah...

Ah...

They attach to your nervous system, artificially producing a variety of sensations. That's the reason why your entire body feels like one big erogenous zone.

[14]

No... No way...

Ah... Ahh...

<*SHIVER*>

<*TREMBLE*>

HAAAAAAAAH!!

Heh heh...

See this woman here? We just brought her in.

Uh, which means... She's that skilled lawyer...

Exactly, she's Ran's mother. I thought you'd want to taste both mother and daughter.

Hahh

Haa

<Whishh>

<*Drip Drip>

These breasts are so elastic... Who would've thought that you've got a teenage daughter?

I can't believe... I can feel it this much...

<*Knead*>

Stop... Ahh...

[15]

<Schlup>

<Squelch>

Ah ah ah! Even the Queen of the Courtroom ended up like this! What a spoiled woman!

Hahh

Ahh

Ohh

Haa

Aahh

<Squish Squash>

<Schlop>

N-Noo! Don't touch me there!

<*Rub*>

Your pussy's already drenched! Hehehehe...

[16]

Hey now, I'm putting it in!

Ah... Ahh...

Haa

Hah

Hahh

<*PLUNGE*>

NGHAAAH!

Don't- Don't do it that...

<*Ram*>

<*Thrust*>

<Joop>

...Violentlyy! Nnhaa!

[17]

<*Shove*>

It's... It's all the way in... Ahh... It's shaking!

Stop, I'll go crazy... I'm already...

<Zoop>

<Zuup>

Ha ha ha! Really? Is that so? Then enjoy it as much as you wish!

<*Thrust*>

<*Shove*>

Hah

Ahh

Uhh

[18]

Guhaha! What a beauty we got here!

<Squelch>

It'd be such a waste to have you do only your attorney job...

<Zoop>

<Shtup>

Ahh

Ohh

Let's have the mother and her daughter give their best, alright?

Come on, I'm gonna cum inside of you!

<Shuv>

Gahh

Ahh

Ohhh

<Shlup>

Hah

Inside... ?! N-No!

Don't come inside of me!

[19]

<*Spurt*>

<*Squirt*>

GYAAAAHH!

It's... It's so hot... I feel like my body's melting...

<*Sluggish*>

S-Stop... !

It's not over yet, baby! I'm having you next!

<Splat>

<Squish>

<*Twitch*>

Eeek!

[20]

<*Rub Rub*>

It's your fault, my darling, that my company lost the case and suffered huge losses-

I'll get my revenge now! Gehehe!

Gaaah!

Ahhh... Even if he's just rubbing his thing against me...

<*Thrust*>

Oh!

<Shlup>

Huhh...

<Fop>

Ngh...

<*Lunge*>

[21]

D-damn, I can't hold back any longer! I'll take your ass!

<*Grind*>

Aahh...

Don't... Don't churn it up so muuuch!

Huhh

Ohh

They... They're rubbing against each other inside of me...

<Zoop>

<*Thrust*>

<Squish>

Hah

Gwhahaha! Boy, this is too tight!

Ahh

<Shlop>

<Squelch>

[22]

Hey, how come your mouth is all alone?

Mguh!!

<*Rub*>

Heh heh! You shouldn't restrain yourself, I'm sure you like cocks so much you can't do without one!

Aahhh... This smell is...

<*Sip*>

<Ahmm>

<Shlurp>

Woah! She just clung on to it!

Mmh

Nhu

Oh... I'm cumming just by having his dick rub the insides of my mouth...

It's like I'm a different person altogether...

<Slurp>

<*Smack*>

<*Suck*>

Mmh... Nguuh!

Ahh

Hyahaha! Your cunt is overflowing!

You're making some pretty nasty noises, pumping up and down like that...

<Squish>

<Splash>

<Shlup>

<Squelch>

[23]

<*Squirt*>

I-I'm cumming! Make sure to savor it!

Aahhhn...

<Splotch>

Here goes mine, take it!

<*Spurt*>

I want... Mo-more...

<*Drip*>

Huh? You desire more rods? Then you gotta beg for it. 'Please, give me lots of dicks!' Say it out loud!

<*Ram Ram*>

Give... me... lots of... dicks... please!

I WANT YOUR COCKS... MORE OF THEM... FILL ME!

Yes... Yes... I'm a pig... a piggg... Gaaaah!!

Haa

Haa

GWAHAHA! What a slutty pig!

<Squash>

<Zup Zuup>

[24]

AHH

OHH

AAHH...

HAH

[25]

Neuro-Tamers...

Looks like our tests on human subjects were pretty much a success.

Ah... Ahhh...

Yeah... They were able to change this much, even that stubborn attorney...

Eheh...

I'll turn this whole country into one big slave supply center.

And looks like I'll be making big money selling these piggy women...

Continues... Maybe.

[28]

The blue sea

The white, sandy beach

The scorching sun

[29]

For me

[30]

Winter Vacation

Smile for me!

Yuri Tooru

[31]

What is this nonsense...

We've gotta leave tomorrow, hurry up and choose...
Your swimsuit...

GAH!

What's with such remarks?

Miwako... weren't you the one asking to stay because it was close to the airport?

Well... That's true, but...

Then stop babbling...

And help me choose! I'll help you choose yours, too.

I ...

I got it, meh...

[32]

Eeek! Gaah!

Waaah! Sigh...

Yu... Yumi...

CAN YOU MAKE UP YOUR MIND?

I can doooo it!

Because I reached...

My main goal!

Are you FOR REAL?

[33]

Ta-daaa! ♪

How is it, Miwako?

[34]

<*Twitch*>

For you, isn't that a bit...

Sober?

<*Grin*>

You brought your costume too, why don't you show it to me?

Eh?

My costume?

Yep!

<*Push*>

Hurry up and go change! ♥

[35]

How's it going?

Don't you think it's a little too... extreme?

[36]

Hey! You're drunk, aren't you!?

Of cooourse nooot ♪

Mmh!!

Mh...

Nhhu

Nhaa

Haa

Ahnn

You don't really mind this after all... right, Miwako?

...

Seee? ♥

<*Gush*>

[37]

Ohh

Haaa

Hahh

Ngh

Haa

Uhn

I think this costume...

... really suits you

...

Answer me, be honest.

NYAA! ♥

[38]

HAH!

<Squelch>

If you want me to go on... Shouldn't you tell me?

<*Bite*>

...

Keep... Keep going... Yumi...

Don't tease me...

<*Shiver Shiver*>

FUA! ♥

Alright ♥ I'm glad you said it ♪

[39]

Mmh... ♪ Your breasts Miwako... ♥ They're perfectly ripe! ♥

No! ♥

Ahh...

They are sweet and delicious, just like cherries ♪

[40]

You look dizzy, your face is the color of the cherry blossoms... ♥

And it's the same color down here too ♪

Noohh... Yumii...

If you suck on it that much...

Looks like I'm gonna end up drunk with your dew, Miwako ♪

[41]

Ahh!

<*Lick*>

Don't... Don't stop...

You're the only one having fun here, Miwako...

Lick me down there, come ooon! ♪

...

<*Plug*>

Ah!

No, not my ass! ♥

[42]

Yuuup, I've long thought anal would be your weak point ♪

This is no good... ♥

I'M...

No... OHH! ♥

[43]

I'M CUMMIIING!

AAAH!

Man, Sato and the others sure are late...

It's already time for our meeting...

[44]

Memorie's

Yuri Tooru

[45]

Ahh

Ohh

Hahh

As always, the amorous affair between the two girls takes place in a boring afternoon, following the PE class.

[46]

Even the usually determined Miwako...

Quickly turns into a cute kitten ♥

[47]

Little kitten...

Why don't you purr a bit with your cute voice... ♥

[48]

Oh my... Your 'mouth' down here is moaning... ♥

[49]

You are drooling...

My little kitten, you're hopeless ♥

[50]

What a naughty kitten, I'll have to punish you ♪

[51]

And now, time to 'meow'!

No, it's not!

And Miwako...

Was the kitten! ♥

Eeeh? Is that so Miwa-chan?

[52]

Sex with Ran, videotape

Orgasm addiction, Sex addiction

Ran - Bust:89 . Waist:56 . Hip:91

Ran's bust seems like it's about to pop out of her bra, with such a firm and attractive body.
She loves masturbating with vibrators, so she always uses them with a lot of vigor.
Also, with fellatio being her forte, she gets extremely greedy for a guy's penis.
After that, she has unprotected sex and she ends up cumming.
In this volume, Ran lures men with her cute face, covered in sweat and fluids.
She looks completely satisfied.

[53]

Hello Kazuha! Here, this is the investigation data we recently collected.

Ah, you brought it!

But I sure didn't think you were into that kind of stuff...

Well... Not really that much...

Hey, don't spill the beans to your father!

I know, I know! Thanks!

[54]

Some time ago, when I visited the Police Headquarters...

Ahn

Ahh

I stumbled upon Ootaki and his colleagues dubbing some porn they had previously seized.

Because of that, in exchange for my silence, I got to borrow those videos.

Wow... You can see everything...

Ootaki looked pretty surprised that a girl like me watched these kinds of videos.

Yeah... Those pornographic videos I borrowed, just like always.

It was with one of them that the whole thing started...

[55]

Let's see... The next one is...

<Beep>

Eh?

Now, open your legs and show your panties.

More, spread them more.

Like that, good.

[56]

Your pussy, where is it?

<*Tremble*>

Try pressing against the spot with your fingers.

It's... It's embarrassing...

Isn't that... Ran?

Why? Why is she on the tape?

[57]

Next, take off your skirt.

Wow, that's a cute butt you got there.

<*Rustle*>

Could you unbutton your blouse without taking it off now?

That's great... Incredibly sexy!

[58]

And now, use this to enjoy yourself.

Exactly like that, good girl. Soak it with your saliva.

<*Lick*>

Be sure to lick it till it's all soaked.

<Shlurp>

Why don't you try touching your vagina and your clitoris with your free hand?

<Schlop>

This looks like everyday stuff for you!

[59]

Unh

Alright, feel like putting it in?

<*Rub*>

Ngh

<Fopp>

Nnhh

Hah... Uhh...

<Fuup>

Hahh

<Foop>

Aaaahhh

<Shlop>

[60]

Haa

Ahh

<Shmuck>

Nhh

<Shclip>

Ahn

Hah

<*Twist*>

Aaah

NNHAAAAAA!

[61]

Uh-oh, you came?

<*Throb Throb*>

<*Twitch*>

...... Yeah.

To shake that violently...

You must really love vibrators.

Oh Ran...

Good. This time, give this guy's wand a good time.

You like dicks too, don't you?

[62]

Nhh

<*Kiss*>

<*Lick*>

Hah

I never thought licking a dick could be this good...

<Shlurp>

Nchuu

Mmh

Nhh

<Schlip>

[63]

<*Pull*>

<Schlap Shlurp>

Hya!

How is it? This guy's good at licking, isn't he?

<*Lick*>

Yes...
It feels so goomff...

<*Sssuck*>

<Joop>

<Schlip>

You're really good too, Ran.

[64]

Ran, isn't it time to put it in?

Hah

<Schlup>

Haah

Open your legs.

This big cock is going to enter your vagina, Ran.

Ah... It's... It's going in

Ohh

<*Rub*>

Uuh

<*Fiddle*>

Aah

AAAAGH!

[65]

<*RAM*>

Aaahh

It's hitting my deepest spot...

Hahh

Ahh

Your pussy is throbbing... gah!

<*Thrust*>

Ngh!

<Shuv>

Ahh

It's incredible...

<Woha>

[66]

Ahh

<Shlup>

Haa

<Schlop>

Nnhh

Ran...

Ohh

Yes...

Guh...

It's...so good...

Haa

<Zup Zoop Zuup>

Ahh

Haangh

[67]

Ah

Ahh

I'm, I'm gonna-

On... On my face...

Let it out on my face...

<Shtup>

<*Spurt Spurt*>

[68]

Hahh

Ohh

<Hummm>

<Schmuk>

It appears you took a liking for this boy's dick.

Oh... Ran...

Haa

Ahh

<Shlup>

[69]

Let's do it from behind this time.

<*Plunge*>

Ahhn

Ah!

<Zoop>

<Zuup>

Nnh

<Shlop>

Ahh

Huu

[70]

<Squelch>

<Squash>

Ahh

Hahh

<*Squeeze*>

If you... thrust that hard-

I'll... Agh! Cum!

[71]

You seemed to have a thing for vibrators, Ran.

Eh?

<*Rub*>

<*Plunge*>

Let's plug one of those in your asshole now!

Aah! Huaaaa!

[72]

Ohh

Hahh

Mnnh

Hya

Aha

A-Amazing...

Hahh

You're filling my pussy...

Nnh

Ahh

I'm overflowing... oohh!

<*Fiddle*>

<*RUB RUB*>

Huaa

[73]

At home, I got all excited watching Ran having sex...

I could feel her indecent figure...

Aah... My fingers won't stop moving...

I want to touch Ran's bare body...

I want to experience her sensitive spot...

[74]

Ran...

I want to violate Ran!

Ahh...

AAAAAAAHHH!!

<*TWITCH*>

<*TREMBLE*>

[75]

Hahh

Ahhh

<Bzzzzz>

Ah, Ran!
It's me, Kazuha...

Are you free on Sunday? Yeah...I'd like to drop by...

There's a video I'd like to watch together...

~ END ~

[76]

ZOL here!

This is bad!

I really don't have any time! I'm very sorry!

I'll do my best next time!

[77]

Hello theeere! ♪

I'm sorry you haven't heard from me since August. After the summer Comiket I was completely sucked in by Ragnarok [Online]...
Up to now I didn't really pay much attention to roleplay, but MMORPGS are just so much fun... ♪
I'll end up enslaved by RO. It's gonna be the end for me, just like the cherry blossoms blooming out of season... *sweat drop*

Yuri Tooru

[78]

Hey guys, Karakuribee here.

Gosh, I'm running out of time...
I know it's everyday stuff, but I always leave things half done.
This time the story took too much time.
I thought the plot alone would take about 5 volumes, but I didn't like the result much and in the end I just scrapped it.
I guess I should just say that I wanted to draw Kazuha's onani scene lol.

This time we launched a new series.
In the end though, what we're doing is just the same.
I think I'll continue working on this for a bit. Please keep rooting for me.

[79]

When they say 'a horse comes from a gourd', I guess it's really like this...
We were motivated by the 10th anniversary of the volume, so we decided to once again resume activities with our former circle ‘Mengerekun'!
Even the volume's name has changed, it's now ‘Potemayo'.
We could almost hear a voice asking ‘Did anything really change with your naming sense?', but nothing really changed! ♪
We just felt that way... *sweat drop* It's always like this...
We're planning to work on Meitantei Conan for a while, so please support the reborn Mengerekun!

[80]

Potemayo

Potemayo

Okay, notes.

[...]

Whoa, that's how you do it! Thank you so much for the detailed work derpy, I learnt a friggin' lot!

A couple of quick notes:

In the context, it seems more like an exclamation of surprise, so I think this makes more sense.

Well I don't know if that sounds better (I guess it does) but Vodka is just laughing at her, at least from the dialogue...

It looks like it literally says "micro-machines" in the text, but to be more accurate
I had your body injected with plenty of Neuro-Tamers... It's a type of nanite our organization developed.

You're right! Damn, I just thought of some childhood toys lol...

Punctuation.
Yeah... They were able to change this much, even that stubborn attorney...

Uhm I know this (mine) is probably the most useless remark in history, but I can't pass the chance to get better...

I'll ask: is 'even' always preceeded by a comma? I really didn't think you'd put it there...

Some rewording. "Vibes" was changed to "vibrator" in all instances and "strength" doesn't seem quite right.
"Vigor" seems more appropriate.

Mans.

Mans.

I want to kill myself. Sigh.

This isn't Strike Witches.
Now, open your legs and show your panties.

God I don't even know what Strike Witches is about, and I burst into laughter!

But please, do tell about Strike Witches lol.

Again, thanks a lot derpy! I guess I should work more on my English, rather than translating from Japanese... :E

Well I don't know if that sounds better (I guess it does) but Vodka is just laughing at her, at least from the dialogue...

Is he laughing at her? I found it kinda tough to tell, based on the character used in the text bubble. "Eh eh eh" also seems like an odd way to laugh, but whatever. If you say he's laughing, then he's laughing; you're the translator.

Uhm I know this (mine) is probably the most useless remark in history, but I can't pass the chance to get better...

I'll ask: is 'even' always preceeded by a comma? I really didn't think you'd put it there...

Its more of an intonation thing. There's a pause between the two simple sentences "They were able to change this much" and "that stubborn attorney", with "even" as the word that joins/transitions/whatever them into the compound sentence. Herp, I don't remember all the proper terms for grammar stuff, its been too long.

Mans.

Mans.

I want to kill myself. Sigh.

The vibes thing is no big deal, its an easy mistake if you're not familiar with certain Japanese vernacular. Although that thing looked more like an ordinary dildo than a motorized model to me.

God I don't even know what Strike Witches is about, and I burst into laughter!

But please, do tell about Strike Witches lol.

In Strike Witches, girls don't wear pants, just underwear to which they refer to as pants. 'Pantsu' being usable for 'pants' and 'underwear' and all.

In Strike Witches, girls don't wear pants, just underwear to which they refer to as pants. 'Pantsu' being usable for 'pants' and 'underwear' and all.

Yes, but no. Your first part is completely right. The second part...yes, 'pantsu' could be either "pants" or "underwear" (though the vast majority of the time it's "underwear"); but no, that's not how they call their garments in Strike Witches, they call them 'zubon', which is pretty unambiguously "trousers"/"slacks"/"pants".

...Unless you were trying to say something else?

This post has been edited by PeopleDon'tDanceNoMore: Nov 18 2011, 06:47

Yes, but no. Your first part is completely right. The second part...yes, 'pantsu' could be either "pants" or "underwear" (though the vast majority of the time it's "underwear"); but no, that's not how they call their garments in Strike Witches, they call them 'zubon', which is pretty unambiguously "trousers"/"slacks"/"pants".

...Unless you were trying to say something else?

I meant it more in the sense of the wordplay, but it never hurts to be more specific.