[X] My Assistant

Here's the proofread script. I'm pretty sure I caught everything.

silent saturn 4 Translation is here. This could be better than the previous one as Super Shanko suggested.

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Order From Top to Bottom, and From left (For example: Upper 1) to right (Upper 4).
Page Script
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Cover • Title Page
Painter Maki hideto(牧秀人)
Coloring Sawara kazumitsu(佐原一光)
manga Maki hideto Sawara kazumitsu7～ 61~
illust Escaped Kyou san 32~
manga ume san 48~
illust haribara makiko san 54~
illust happiness we rou san 56~
illust fred.kerii san 58~
illust Maki hideto 59~
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Square Hotaru and Chibiusa series: " Dead Moon Chapter"
Previous on Hotaru and Chibiusa
Soon after the fight against the death busters, another force called 'DEAD MOON CIRCUS' rose from the shadows.
Therefore, the sailor senshi end their normal life and start to fight against them, again.
Besides the threat of the 'DEAD MOON', Hotaru also found a mysterious senshi, who appeared and saved them from danger, is watching over the ‘DEAD MOON', and surely she cannot be Hotaru's Sailor Saturn.
With the addition of the unknown alien force…
Serious conflicts were starting again.
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Despite all this, why have all the lemures appeared around the solitary sailor senshi only...
It ought to have been a plain day in Sailor Neptune's home...
One day, Chibiusa-chan brought a machine back from the future, which could let Hotaru's hard play imagination come true. Just before Hotaru was noticed, she accidentally actives this machine. Soon she realized that she was thrown into an artificial world: by daylight, being bound and in the center of the street with a pack of thirsty beasts surrounding her. After pursuing, Usagi Tsukino and Chibiusa also faced the same trouble.
Seventh Episode: Chased in Illusion Street
Story: Maki hideto
Painter Maki hideto, Sawara kazumitsu
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Upper 1 Hotaru: Err ah ah ah, let me go…
Upper 2 Hotaru: Please let me go…
Lower 1 Hotaru: Ah ah ah er
Lower 2 Hotaru: Don't, Don't look at me~~~
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Upper 1 Chibiusa: Eh ah ah ah, that hurts…
Upper 2 Chibiusa: Ass, my ass~~~
Upper 3 Man: One more to go
Upper 4 Chibiusa: No, don't
Lower 1 Chibiusa: Ah ah ah ah
Lower 2 Chibiusa: It's inside of me! In and out!
Lower 3 Chibiusa: No ah ah err
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Upper 1 Man: Your breasts are so huge.
Upper 2 Tsukino: No, stop sucking, it's not working!
Upper 3 Man: Hum Hum, is there any milk coming out?
Lower 1 Man: Come~ on~. I am a little baby~ (sound: sucking)
Lower 2 Man: Tits Tits
Lower 3 Tsukino: I said stop it. Stop!----
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Upper 1 Tsukino: Stop, ahhh, don't bite them.
Upper 2 Tsukino: Stop it, you're gonna to bite them off.
Upper 3 Man: They might be cut off by doing this.
Upper 4 Tsukino: It hurts!!
Mid 1 Tsukino: Ah~ Stop it~
Mid 2 Tsukino: If this keeps up, my breasts will…my breasts…Ah ah….
Mid 3 Tsukino: It hurts!!
Mid 4 (Sound:straining)
Lower 1 Yah yah ah ah ah
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Upper 1 Man: Alright, come over here.
Upper 2 Tsukino: Stop pulling…off… they'll be ripped off…
Upper 3 Man: You're coming too.
Upper 4 Chibiusa: Hurts…it hurts!!
Mid 1 Man: Hey, have a closer look of where we fucked you're friend.
Mid 2 Hotaru: No~Stop~ (sound: Ha Ha)
Lower Tsukino: Yah ah, don't look at it~
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Upper (Sound: Yoro Yoro)
Upper 1 Chibiusa: Hotaru chan…
Upper 2 Hotaru: Tsukino!?
Upper 3 Hotaru: Chibiusa chan
Upper 4 Hotaru: why did you come here?
Lower 1 Man: Hey, come and lick it.
Lower 2 Hotaru: Ah
Lower 3 Man: Let's bind you three together with strings.
Lower 4 Yah, please don't
Lower 5 AhAh…
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1 Man: come on, everyone connected together~~
2 Hotaru: Stop it~~
3 Hurts! It's so painful!!
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1 Man: Move slower, or your friends' tits will be pulled off~~~
2 Tsukino: Higiii
3 Chibiusa: YahAh, don't, don't~!!
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1 Hotaru: Gyaaaa Iyaaaa
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Upper Chibiusa: AhYah, they're gonna be pulled off~~~!!!
Lower 1 (sound:Paa Paa)
Lower 2 Tsukino: Stop! They're gonna be pulled off!
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Upper 1 Chibiusa: Owwie
Upper 2 Chibiusa: Huh!?
Mid Hotaru: Guh Wu
Lower 1 Chibiusa: Ah—…
Lower 2 Chibiusa: Ah ah ah...
Lower 3 Hotaru: Yah, ah, don't look
Lower 4 Hotaru: don't look at me, Chibiusa-chan
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Upper 1 Chibiusa: Fucking so hard…
Upper 2 Chibiusa: Hotaru-chan really hates this…
Upper 3 Chibiusa: Stop…Please…let Hotaru-chan go
Lower 1 Man: This girl's ass is full of cum now, looks like it's about to spill out
Lower 2 Man: What's gonna happen if I pull out~~~
Lower 3 Chibiusa: Stop it~~~
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Upper 1 Man: Come on, open your mouth!!
Upper 2 Chibiusa: Ah Gar Ah
Upper 3 Hotaru: No way!
Lower 1 Chibiusa: Err ah ah ah
Lower 1 Hotaru: Chibiusa-chan!
Lower 3 Hotaru: I can't stop, it's coming~~
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Upper 1 Man: Hey, you know it's not over yet——
Upper 2 Hotaru: Stop it
Upper 1 under Err ah ah——
Upper 3 Man: By the way, this girl's butt has also stored a lot
Upper 4 Tsukino: Yah ah ah
Upper 5 Tsukino: Don't…Don't pull it out——
Lower Tsukino: Yah ah ah ah
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Upper Chibiusa: Wu
Mid 1 Man: Hey, come watch~ watch your friend's face while she's being fucked!!
Mid 2 Chibiusa: Wu
Mid 3 Hotaru: Chibi…Chibiusa-chan…
Lower 1 (sound: Pa Pa Pa)
Lower 2 Chibiusa: Guuu
Lower 2 Chibiusa: Ngu Nguuu
Lower 3 Hotaru: Yah
Lower 4 Man: HaHaHa, look, her nose shoots!
Lower 5 Looks so sick~~
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Upper 1 Man: Hey, watch your friend's face!
Upper 2 Man: The face she makes when she's been fucked senseless~
Mid 2 (sound: ZuLiu ZuLiu)
Mid 3 (sound: Pa Pa )
Mid 4 (sound: Bi Bi)
Lower 1 Chibiusa: Err Err Err
Lower 2 Tsukino: Ha Ha
Lower 3 Hotaru: Err…AhAh…
Lower 4
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Upper 1 Doctor: Very good, you've calmed down now.
Upper 2 Fish Eye: …Thank you…
Mid Fish Eye: AhYah?
Lower 1 Fish Eye: This kid is…?
Lower 2 Doctor: Do you recognize Chibiusa and her friends ?
Lower 3 Fish Eye: Hah? Err Err…
Lower 4 Doctor: what a coincidence.
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Upper 1 Doctor: Oh my
Upper 2 Doctor: It's time to go!
Upper 3 Doctor: There is something I need to do.
Upper 4 Doctor: I have to leave now, feel free to relax here for now.
Upper 5 Doctor: Bye
Upper 6 Fish Eye: (leaving a stranger home alone, how careless…he's really far to kind)
Mid 1 Fish Eye: ( I feel something strange in this place)
Mid 2 Fish Eye: (Let's check it out——❤)
Lower Diana: Huh~?
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Upper 1 (Sound: Unnn Unnn Unnn)
Upper 2 Diana: what's going on here, everyone?
Mid 1 Diana (Pa)
Mid 2 Tsukino: (Sitting up) Wah
Lower 1 Thank you for waking us up, Diana
Lower 2 Tsukino: What bad luck…
Lower 3 Chibiusa: I'm so sorry…
Lower 4 The feeling still exists…
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Upper 1 Tsukino: At least we should erase Hotaru's memory of this part——Hey, what are you doing?
Upper 2 Chibiusa: (putting the equipment on) Atonement.
Upper 3 Tsukino: I can imagine that she is suffering a lot——
Mid 1 Tsukino: (Considering Chibiusa is willing to punish herself, I'll forgive her this time)
Mid 2 Ah
Lower 1 Tsukino: What are you doing here?
Lower 2 Fish Eye: No, well…
Lower 3 Fish Eye: There was a very kind uncle…
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Upper 1 Tsukino: Anyway, Get back to the living room and wait
Upper 2 (smaller font: get this kid to sleep first)
Upper 3 Fish Eye: Yes——
Mid 1 Wu——Err——
Mid 2 Haruka: Wu——
Mid 3 Haruka: Difficult…it's so difficult
Mid 4 Pegasus:…
Mid 5 (background: Michiru: Come on! Come on! Don't lose to a horse~~!)
Mid 6 Pegasus！！？
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Zircon: What!?
Zircon: Who is over there!? Where are they from!!?
Fish Eye: That…That is….
Lower P61 continue
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From 'Tokyo Miu Miu'
Both the manga and anime become a little abnormal at this time (middle of May)….
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From 'riOki-sefutei(TV)'
Do we need some boundaries for the maniac?
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From 'Z-Gundam' - Haman
Boss, we don't expect that all the characters are not repetitive!?
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From 'Z-Gundam' A.E.U.G Uniform
AhYah, we drew the gloves before, but it looks too ugly (so the gloves are hide)
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Looks like it is the first time drawing Ami-chan's picture. (how many years have past)
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sailor-iron-mouse… Everyone knows it even I don't write this on. The posture in very minor…
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Mid 1 Mother of Illusion
Mid 2 Ume (Stamp)
Lower 1 Girl: SikuSiku (Crying)
Lower 2 Girl: SikuSiku
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Upper 1 Hotaru: Aunt, what's going on? Why are you crying?
Upper 2 Girl: Why call me aunt…why do you call me aunt…
Mid Girl: You even forget your mother?...
Lower 1 Hotaru:!?
Lower 2 Hotaru: Mom…! Are you my mother?!
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Upper 1 Hotaru: ! (waking)
Upper 2 Hotaru: A dream about my Mom…first time I made...
Mid 1 Hotaru: What does my mom looks like?
Mid 2 Hotaru: I don't remember her at all…
Lower 1 Doctor: Hey! Want to know something about your mother?
Lower 2 Hotaru: Please, Papa.
Lower 3 Doctor: Wuh Wuh
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Upper 1 Hotaru: She should be a nice person...
Upper 2 Hotaru: Right?
Upper 3 Doctor: Ah, you see…
Lower 1 Doctor: (I…I can't tell…that Hotaru is a machine which created by myself...
Lower 2 Doctor: HaHaHaHaHaHa
Lower 3 Hotaru: Nei~ Nei~ Papa~
Bottom My dog, Harino Makiko (sold at its 24 years old), was a great help line-drawing and blacking. Thank you~ (stamp: ume)
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Upper 1 Jeffy: The pressure is stressful, but please keep trying.
Upper 2 Jeffy: I…will wait for you…
Upper 3 Hotaru: And allow me to encourage you…
Bottom Long time no see, Jeffy & Hotaru
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Hotaru: Please don't give up, keep trying…trust you…
Men: WuWuWu…
Left tag: Sawara Shifu
Right tag: Maki Sensei
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Lower right We haven't try any scat play this time, so I made this one.
But there was not any scat play for Chibiusa in this main story.
Auh? So I failed?
Mid Chibiusa: ErWuWuWuWuh (YahAh, so dirty~ don't look ~~!!!)
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Eighth Episode: Tuning
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Upper 1 On the other side, Chibiusa returned to the overhead world and suffered…
Upper 2 Chibiusa: ErEr!
Mid Chibiusa: …but…
Lower 1 Chibiusa: (Usagi and Hotaru-chan are still here)
Lower 2 Chibiusa: (but we rescued Hotaru-chan already…)
Lower 3 Chibiusa: (Perhaps some data was still here, as a character only…)
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Upper 1 Hotaru: No, I can't…
Upper 2 Hotaru: Please let me go…Ha Hah
Lower 1 Chibiusa: (Hotaru is so cute, her smile is so beautiful when she get this)
Lower 2 Man: Well, let's have fun with this——(He is not listening)
Lower 3 Chibiusa: ( Since then I don't dare try this for real because Hotaru-chan will be really pissed off, but now, Hotaru-chan is just a illusion…
Lower 4 Man: Hey, pull it out.
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Upper 1 Man: Hey hey, here we go…get ready for this
Upper 2 Chibiusa: (In that case, let me see how cute this Hotaru-chan would be)
Upper 3 Hotaru: No…don't…
Lower Chibiusa: (Hotaru looks so cute…for this view, I don't even care about myself…)
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Upper 1 Chibiusa: Hotaru-chan more more——
Upper 2 Hotaru: Ah, Chibiusa chan
Lower Both: Ah AhAh
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Upper 1 Tiger Eye: Jade of magic!! (ask for clarification for this line)
Upper 2 Fish Eye: Let the dream mirror
Upper 3 Both: Recovered!!
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1 Pegasus!!
2 MOON GORGEOUS
3 Meditation
4 stage out
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Upper 1 Pegasus: Let me guide your souls
Upper 2 They will surely be saved, though only a few of you are here.
Upper 3 Sailor senshi: why do you show up so late…
Lower 1 Pegasus: Please don't give up
Lower 2 Chibiusa: (Pretending to be calm)
(Forgot to translated the text outside of the image margin)
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Upper Dead moon: Damn it~~
Dead moon: A sailor senshi like this? Doesn't look like we were told.
Lower Saturn?: Leave
Saturn?: ——or all of you will die here
Dead moon: thought we could take advantage of this, what a pity——
Saturn?: Without Pegasus's protection, they…
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Upper 1 Doctor: Huh~~~
Mid 1 Doctor: Thought I got a chance to have an interview
Mid 2 Doctor: Seems like this won't be as easy as I thought…
Lower 1 Doctor: I know as an ex-president of a council, it's hard to find a casual job in a short time.
Lower 2 Doctor: But it seems pretty difficult to live alone, if I could get a job that fits my knowledge…
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Upper 1 Doctor: I just mustn't take too much advantage of Michiru's kindness…
Upper 2 Doctor: Anyway, if I could make Mugen Academy be rebuilt more quickly…
Upper 3 Doctor: though as I thought…
Mid 1 Nagase: Err
Mid 2 Nagase: Souichi? Is that you, Tomoe Souichi?
Mid 3 Doctor: Huh?
Lower 1 Doctor: Nagase
Lower 2 Doctor: You are Nagase?
Lower 3 Nagase: So you are Souichi.
Lower 4 Nagase: What's going on, what made you come here?
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Upper 1 Doctor: Oh, I see, you came here for a job.
Upper 2 Nagase: Huh, a technical chief.
Mid 1 Nagase: I heard something happened to you, but I couldn't reach you and got worried
Mid 2 Nagase: So I'm glad to meet you, safe and sound.
Mid 3 Doctor: Thanks for your concern.
Lower 1 Multi: Your tea
Lower 2 Doctor: Huh, thank you
Mid left Multi: You're welcome
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Upper 1 Doctor: She looks too young for an employee…
Upper 2 Doctor: an experiment perhaps
Upper 3 Nagase: I'm sorry, Tomoe, I don't have so much power as to influence the HR dept.
Upper 4 Nagase: I couldn't offer much help for your job hunting.
Mid 1 Doctor: Don't worry,
Mid 2 Doctor: I didn't expect you could.
Mid 3 Doctor: It's good to be here to meet my old friend.
Mid 4 Nagase: I'm glad to hear you say so.
Mid 5 Nagase: Well, about the jobs… something like part-time jobs… actually we need some…
Lower 1 Nagase: ——Rather to say,
Lower 2 Nagase: we do need your help, please accept!!
Lower 3 Doctor: Huh?
Lower 4 To be continued
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Upper 1 Golden arrow
Upper 2 On next episode, is it the key for victory!?
Lower 1 Haven't seen this 'preview for the next episode' model for a long time
Well— finally Multi(?) got on the stage… So the SS Series is getting better now
How many parts does Multi have in the future? Do you mean there's more!?
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A picture made by me, as my style of Eternal Sailor Moon
I think the boots need some improvement…
Compared with the hard one, I do prefer the softer one…
(Stamp of kazumitsu)
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Postscript
Maki hideto ('M'): ——Finally, time for postscript
Sawara kazumitsu ('S'): It is not easy to finish this, the dead line is so stressful
M: We should have already finish this 'Collection 4' for the Comic Revolution in spring, but because our circle was not chosen to attend. It is totally wrong to hold a 'should be done doujin' from publishing.
S: So something shitty happened… you guys…
M: I can say the dead line of the 'Collection 4',' manga and the 'SS 4' are a JET STEAM ATTACK for me… Besides that there are some requests from other circles that I need to do as well.
S: I made the 'Collection', the Cushion and 'SS4'… and some requests, it's also a JET STEAM ATTACK!
M: Cushion?
S: Yes, I made it. Ah, you said you made a manga. Congratulations! How many years past since the previous time?
M: … It would be the 91s, so it is 11 years ago…sensei and you?
S: …It was 94s (?), about 10 years ago…sounds like we are so alien from the manga. Especially for me, the Anthology of the super robot which I made these years is so hard to make into a manga, you know… Anyway, congratulate for your new manga——
M: …You may right, but in this industry, we cannot believe anything until the manga is surely published.
S: Right! Indeed, as the time we made the manga 'Shell Buster'
78 S: Suffered a lot. And I also heard some examples that the publishing manager can only make little profits… It should not be so frequently, but we do know what is going on.
M: …so the conclusion is we can't be satisfied until everything comes to an end…——what about the cushion?
S: …I made this for that circle which made cushion.
M: Like?
S: Saturn-chan, for sure.
small font: Ah, I made it wrong, the character is not Saturn-chan （——？）
M: Jealousy….
S: You said you want to make one for Chibimoon, you do draw one for Chibimoon——You are very good at drawing this, aren't you! And Chibiusa is super cute and popular, right?
M: …You said you dislike her, I remember…
S: People changes all the time…heading to the way which cannot be done…
M: Don't say it cannot be done! Chibiusa is very cute, right!!
S: …Err…Well, she is cute indeed…I want that special gift: the video of 'Katyusha milk', so I bought it…
S: ——about this cushion, I planned to make some advertisement for it, however, a few days ago, before the summer Comic Market opened, I was told the cushion has nearly sold out… So I don't even know how many we have for the summer CM…
M: Real thing is real thing, just not like the doujins, short on number all the time. The stocking number will easily become deficit if we don't plan it well…
S: But, Hotaru-chan is so awesome! Popularity is very high all the time. The senshi who coupled with Mars would be popular too.
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M: ——so, what is the left one (P79)?
S: Err, completed version and initial version.
M: The initial?
S: Drawing it on the drawing board (especially for the skirt), there are many versions on hand, well, the best one should be the one of the other side…
M: The initial version has a clearer view of the clitoris.
S: Because the initial version is a draft by pencil, more details are added in the later version.
M: You still have the ambitious to draw up 10 sailor Senshi, no matter the cost?
S: More or less. Well, putting Saturn and Mars together on my first doujin, does it have a sense of curve ball?
M: Something like that, It would be very excitable for sailor moon fans.
S: From the second half of 'S' to 'SS', we haven't seen many doujins out yet…
M: As the principle of luck equality, we will roll out a lot Sailor Mye (?)in this Expo.
S: We can not buy so many…most likely…
S: Ah, 'Amada' will sell the Sailor Mye' trading cards in this Expo, I am a little excited of that. Perhaps they will sell some previous cast card? I really want to buy Takabatake Kasumi-chan's card. If it is, that would be a great relief!!
82 M: ——so, what is this draft (P80) used for?
S: This was made when I accepted the request, and my initial idea of it. The details of the request is: face up and lying, so I drew this initially.
M: Of course, there is no cushion as the character is laying back.
S: But I really want a cushion with her laying back-style…
M: Once upon a time, a circle called 'akkaLB:-' made a lot of drafts, one of the drafts was a lay-back posture, that would be the Yuri Yuri's.
S: I nearly forgot this character, but as I see this draft, I may say:'This one, this is it! Please give me this one!' …maybe someday I will make one for myself… as I think…
M: So what? If we made some cushions this way, do you think anyone would like to buy it?
S: Er~What will it be? Well, we'll think about it later.
M: Ah, before we ended.
S: This is our new member, Haribara Makiko san.
M: Thank you very much. But, I don't know anything about him
S: Nor do I.
M: Huh?
S: (only know) he is from Ume-san's team, nothing else…Anyway, thanks a lot.
M & S: So, see you later.

This post has been edited by Bloodmare: Oct 9 2011, 21:53

Sorry, I found a mistake made by myself.
In postscript:
M: As the principle of luck equality, we will roll out a lot Sailor Mye in this Expo.
S: We can not buy sell so many…most likely…

This post has been edited by sandmaning: Oct 10 2011, 03:19

And 4 is posted: https://e-hentai.org/g/422413/cbef9d3c89/ - good job, everyone!

A reminder that translation bounty for 5 has been posted a while ago: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=4508

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Oct 14 2011, 18:09

I was just thinking that we are a bit overdue for the next translation here. Any takers? C'mon, the bounty is hardly an insignificant one...

Yes, I was thinking the same thing too. If this does get done without my knowing, just send me the final script (or notice) and i'll hopefully plow through it in a quicker time than my recent sluggishness.

The problem is all the handwritten text that it's clogged with. I'm not sure about others but I'm not a native speaker so stuff like this gets really hairy when trying to translate. Personally I tend to not touch anything like this with a ten feet pole, the only exception being that it's only a few lines of handwritten text, which this doujin clearly is not.

Maybe you can wait for one of the regulars who have done the previous SS works to take it up. Admittedly, the reward is pretty attractive, but it's not attractive enough for me to be straining my eyes out trying to make out what the author has actually written before I can even start translating it.

And there's not too much left to translate too ...

Officially working on Vol.5 starting...
NOW!

Wow, he's back! (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/biggrin.gif)

And so it begins again (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

Heads up, Shanko.

Official Countdown: T-Minus 0 pages.

Current Status: Revision.

This post has been edited by KageSennin: Jan 4 2012, 03:02

Heads up, Shanko.

Official Countdown: T-Minus 3 pages.

Oh no~! (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/laugh.gif)

Hay gaiz, here's the vol. 5 script:
[www.mediafire.com] on mediafire

If anyone wants the full text version here I can edit this post with that as well.
I'll be watching this thread for a bit to see if anyone changes anything in the script, but all in all I guess good luck and god speed...?

Well, i'll probably give it a once over after I finish this Nami doujin.

I have no comments after reading, I think it does not require any serious proofreading like some of the past bounties, but it certainly never hurts. Blood?

For the time being THE EDITING STARTS NOW!, after that i'll make any corrections that need to be done, alter in the script itself and post it here (provided that there are any). It's been a while since I did a SS, but i'll try to have it done by the weekend.

This post has been edited by Super Shanko: Jan 5 2012, 05:28

Yay (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

Welp, finished and sent off to Red. Now then, who's paying for this? =3

This post has been edited by Super Shanko: Jan 10 2012, 04:37

Red needs to set up some bounties.

I do, don't I?

Editing for 5: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=5100

Translation for 6: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=5101

5 will be posted in the galleries after we are done with few editing fixes.