[X] My Assistant

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H: It was just a dream...

Y: Idiot. --> Don't split the word.

But the word is split in the original RAW though, what should I do then?

Hmm... After looking at the raw, what she actually says is, "baaaka"; long and drawn out, making it sound like a term of endearment.

In that case, you can use "You dummy" instead. It's much milder, and more of a playful jibe than an insult. You can write it like this, without splitting any words:

You
dummy

Hmm... After looking at the raw, what she actually says is, "baaaka"; long and drawn out, making it sound like a term of endearment.

In that case, you can use "You dummy" instead. It's much milder, and more of a playful jibe than an insult. You can write it like this, without splitting any words:

You
dummy

Ok then good idea, will probably publish the new chapter tonight

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Y: Didn't you say that you don't want to see me cry? // But you're getting bigger because of that. --> You might want to double-check the translation, because I don't understand how the second sentence relates to the first.

Pretty sure I'm correct, though "but it's causing//making you bigger down there" is probably the more correct translation.

This post has been edited by chung2795: May 26 2015, 13:38

Hey chung, is there anything I should be posting an editing bounty for? I am tad confused about this "Chapter 5" stuff. If it's your project, it's totally cool too discuss it here, it's your thread as much as mine those days, just making sure I know what's going on.

Hey chung, is there anything I should be posting an editing bounty for? I am tad confused about this "Chapter 5" stuff. If it's your project, it's totally cool too discuss it here, it's your thread as much as mine those days, just making sure I know what's going on.

Sorry if I confused you there, it's my personal translation. Should I need to start my own thread?

Sorry if I confused you there, it's my personal translation. Should I need to start my own thread?

Not unless you want to. Given as we have no other Chinese TLs posting here, as I said, this is pretty much your turf.

Heck, I could even re-edit the first post to change its name to Red's and Chung's Chinese Project Thread or something.

How I feel now XDXD

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Proofread Script for VeryShy03 (version I have no idea how many times this has been edited lol)
Note: Red make sure your editor rereads the whole script there has been some correction on the reddened words thanks to MaxAndEmilytate's proofreading.

Translator: Herreis
RAW: https://e-hentai.org/g/703981/a1183c259c/

I cried and laughed so hard while doing this translation, I hope the jokes are able to transpire through the lingual barrier XXDD

Page 00:
VeryShy03
Produced by LaoMeng
Kantai Collection –Kancolle-

This scan is only for exchange and learning, please purchase the original book if you like this.
RAW: PK-kun
Editor: 9YU

Page 01:
VeryShy03
Produced by LaoMeng
Kantai Collection –Kancolle-

Page 02:
Bottom Right: Abandoned draft

Page 05:
Panel 1:
Box: Autumn Event Ironbottom Sound E-4
Raiding
Haruna: S…Shit! It didn’t even scratch her armour. I’ve never heard of an Abyssal this powerful!!
Girl: We’ll be fine, let’s put in more effort!!
Panel 3:
Kirishima: Admiral!! The reinforcement fleet is ready.
Kir: You can dispatch them to the field any time now!!
Panel 4:
Admiral: … Dispatch
Admiral: Shoukaku, Zuikaku, I’ll leave Kongou and the rest to both of you.
Panel 5:
SH: Roger that!! Leave them to us
SH: Standard Carrier 5th division, Shoukaku, Zuikaku, reinforcement fleet moving out!!
Panel 6:
Har: OK!!
Har: This is the last strike! My sisters, let’s give them hell before reinforcement arrives!!

Page 06:
Panel 1:
Har: All Guns…
Har: Fi…
Har: Fire…? Ehh?
SFX x2: BOOM---
Panel 2:
Kir: Onee-sama!! What’s going on there?
Kir: The other escort ships are malfunctioning!!
Kir: Please retreat immediately if this goes on…
SFX: Menacing---
Panel 3:
Har: Kirishima, please send the reinforcement team to rescue the others
Kir: But… the reinforcements should arrive at your location soon, you should…
Har: Please, this is my final request as your sister.
Kir: Onee-chan!?
Har: Disconnecting communication.
Panel 4:
Har: Akagi…
Har: Kaga…
Har: …Taihou
Har: Yamato…
Panel 5:
Har: There are still a lot of children in the naval base…
That are not independent yet.
They need someone to watch over them
Background: Admiral, there are some panties missing lately.
Have you seen them?
Har: Even if I’m gone…
Everything will be alright if all of you are still there…
Background: Admiral what do you want to eat today? I’ll make it for you
Har: Hei… Admiral
You’ll praise me… right?
Panel 6:
Har: Admiral…
Har: *sniff*… Admiral
Panel 7:
Har: Admiral!! I’ll always watch over you…
Har: Even from… Valhalla…

Page 07:
Panel 1:
Adm: Kongou My Waifu!!// Kongou My Wife!! (The former is funnier lmao)
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
SFX: BOOM—
Panel 2:
Arrow: Kongou
Arrow: Wo-class
Adm: Admiral is coming to save you nowwwwwwwwwww!!
Panel 3:
Har: …..
Director, there’s something wrong here
Panel 4:
Wo-class: Woo~
Panel 5:
Adm: Kongou you did well
Loving you is not in vain~
Har: Ad… Admiral… I…
Har: I… I…
SFX: Pats—
Panel 6:
Har: I’ve already placed the death flag dramatically, what…
What am I supposed to do now?
Har background: What are the readers that worried about me last page supposed to feel now?
Adm: Tsk Tsk Tsk, Kongou although you are my waifu (/wife), you should have a silver line of hope to live on even in the darkest of times.
Like now you’re saved aren’t you?
Admiral background: It’s okay that was intentional~
Panel 7:
Adm: Everyone seems to have misunderstood something
Adm: Do you really think that
Adm: An admiral is only good for making love?
Panel 8:
Adm: You’re completely spot ONNN!! Even in this situation,
activating my special abilities on the Abyssal Torpedo Bomber is nothing to me!!
Adm background: Next is the Admiral’s turn!
Panel 9:
Wo: Wo!?

Page 08:
Panel 1:
Wo: Woo~
Adm: Wo-class!! Did you know how many admirals wanted you?
Adm: Why are you unobtainable!?
Wo: Wo
Wo: Woo…
Adm: Swimsuit feels too good!!
Panel 2:
Adm: And you!! Airfield Princess! Why do you have such a high armor!? Why do I must use Type 3 to fight you!?
Panel 3:
Adm: Today I’ll represent all of the admirals
Adm: in place of all the admirals that gave up on this stage//level here!!
Panel 4:
Adm: I’ll use this huge penis!!
TO PUNISH YOU!!
Airfield Princess: Wait…
Air: Uhm~~

Page 09:
Panel 1:
Air: Uhm~
Adm: Uhh Ohh! There’s such a magnificent hole underneath all that heavy armor. Witness this all of my fellow admirals!!
Adm: The fearsome demon is just an insatiable slut after all!!
Panel 2:
Adm: What a marvelous pussy
Air: Hah Uhn
Adm: Of course we can’t forget about your asshole now!!
Panel 3:
Air: Hah Unh~
Air: Ahh Umh
Adm: Take this Airfield Princess!! I’ll turn all of the Admirals’ regret
Adm: into thick cum!!
Adm: I’ll fill up your womb!! Then you’ll give birth to my babies!!
Panel 4:
Adm: Now that she’s done I guess it’s your turn Wo-class?
Panel 5:
Adm: Hoo Hoo!? You actually bend over on your own will
Adm: My penis is irresistible isn’t it?
Adm: It must be hard having no one to take care of you properly in the deep sea.
Wo: Wo!
Wo: Woo~
Adm: Have no fear, today admiral will

Page 10:
Panel 1:
Adm: Love you properly!!
Wo: Wo!?
Panel 2:
Adm: Wo-class’ pussy feels so… You lewd standard carrier!!
Panel 3:
Wo: Ahh Uhm Uhm Unh Uhn Umh!!
Panel 4:
Adm: You look like you really enjoy the feeling of your pussy getting penetrated!!
Wo: Wo!
Wo: Woo~
Adm: I never thought that the Abyssal would have such a different flavor!!
Panel 5:
Adm: Uoh? Now this is really something to behold
Wo-class have this kind of expression too
Wo: Ahh ahh…
Wo: Uhh Nnh
Adm: The Wo-class that regularly bombards my shipgirls like it’s nothing
Adm: Can actually make such a cute face, I want to bring you home even more now, ha ha ha!!
Panel 6:
Adm: Uhm Unh!? What are you trying to do?
Wo: woo~
Panel 7:
Adm: Unh Umh Nnh!?
Adm: The Wo-class is trying to tell me something huh~

Page 11:
Panel 1:
Wo: Kyaa Ahh Ahh Ahh!!
Wo: Ad… Admiral’s hot cum is coming inside of me!!
Panel 2:
Yamato: Taihou look~ the admiral is here for us~
Taihou: Uun… but…
Panel 3:
Tai: The admiral looks like… he’s murmuring something strange to himself…
Panel 4:
Adm: Uhh Hnnahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh!!
Adm: Mmmmmyyyyyyy reeeessssssoooouuuurrrrcceeeesss
Panel 5:
Adm: Interrogation mode activated!! Target: The first division!!
Panel 6:
Kaga: Huh…?
Akagi: Admiral?
Adm: Are you still trying to play dead!! First division Akagi and Kaga!!
Panel 7:
Adm: Taihou you too!! Don’t try and play dead like them!!

Page 12:
Panel 1:
Adm: Just now
Adm: Wo-class told me something before she fainted.
Adm: And it made me really angry
Really angry
Yam: Unh Umh?
Yam: Nnh~
Panel 2:
Adm: Akagi-chan
Adm: Where is the barrel of bauxite that I placed in the freezer last night?
Aka: Ab… About that…
Aka: I… I
Aka: got a bit hungry…
Panel 3:
Aka: Uhm~~!!
Aka: Admiral’s penis…
Adm: Didn’t I give you 10 times the normal amount already!?
Adm: Those were meant for Souryuu and Hiryuu!!
Panel 4:
Aka: Bu… Hah… But … admiral… Hah
Aka: Isn… Isn’t it 5 times this year?
Adm: Don’t just listen to the gibberish you hear at the Naval Base!!
Aka: Hah Nnh
Aka: Ahh
Aka: Uhm~
Panel 5:
Kaga: That… admiral…
Kaga: Akagi only ate…
Kaga: Half of the… amount
SFX: Appear—
Panel 6:
Adm: Then where did the other half goooooooooooo!?
Ka: So fast!?
Ka: Tha… That
Ka: Hah

Page 13:
Panel 1:
Ka: Be… Because…
Ka: Everyone shared it together… so…
Ka: Hah
Ka: Uhm~~~
Adm: Uoh Uoh? Together?
Panel 2:
Adm: Kaga-chan is very honest!!
Adm: Here’s a special reward!!
Ka: Than… Thank you Admiral
Panel 3:
Tai: Admiral wait!!
Tai: Taihou didn’t eat any of those!!
Adm: Don’t care
Panel 4:
Tai: At least… At least spare my panties
Tai: Nooo
Tai Kyaa Ahh Ahh Ahh!!
Panel 5:
Tai: Uhh Uhh~ Don’t… Don’t look admiral…
Tai: It’s embarrassing
Adm: Tai… Taihou…
Tai: Uhh Uhh
Adm: Ahh Ehh? This…
Adm: Could this be... the legendary... the legendary item that would only appear during a newlyweds' first night!!
SFX: Doki doki (or Badump Badump)
SFX: Nervous
Panty: Admiral Love (No need to translate this)
Panel 6:
Admiral’s first confession
In twenty years
Panel 7:
Taihou has your…
My position as a secretary…
Background: Victory decisive Pantttiiiiiiiiiiieeeesssss

Page 14:
Panel 1:
SFX: Nervous---
Tai: Be… Because…
Admiral seems to…
Tai: Like big breasts like Atago’s
Tai: To serve Admiral…
Tai: I even consulted Ryuujou for advice…
Panel 2:
Tai: Rubbing admiral like this…
Tai: is one of the weapons that small-breasts possessed
Panel 3:
Adm: Wuuuooohh Ohh Ohh Ohh Ohh Ohh Ohh Ohh!!
Panel 4:
Adm: Taihou you’re wonderful!! Even if your breasts are small
Tai: Uhh Uhm~~
Adm: Small breasts have their own strength too!!
Adm: Look at your petite nipples, their sweetness completely surpasses oppai’s (big-breasts’)!!
Panel 5:
Adm: However Admiral still thinks that a loli’s best part is over here
Tai: Ehh?
SFX: *Thump*---
Panel 6:
Tai: Umnh Kyaahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh!!
SFX: Double penetration—

Page 15:
Panel 1:
Adm: Taihou’s meat holes feel so good!!
Both of them went inside completely!!
Tai: Ad… Admiral
Tai: I’m fine as long as Admiral likes Taihou
Panel 2:
Tai: Hah Ahh
Tai: Tummy… feels so hot
SFX: Shudder
Tai: It’s all in me
Adm: Uhm…
Adm: Looks like this is the last shot of the day
SFX: Drips
Panel 3:
Yam: Admiral please wait for a moment!!
Adm: Ehh? Yamato!?
Yam: I’m okay with you always putting me on the sidelines during raids
Yam: But this?
Yam: No fair!!
Bubbleless: I’ve already made my appearance at the very beginning
Bubbleless: It’s unfair if I’m the only one left without any fun
Adm: But I’ve already came so many times today, let’s return and we’ll…
Panel 4:
Yam: No way!!
Yam: Admiral says this every time, but then you’ll push me away with various excuses!!
Bubbleless: And you were so happy when you first got Yamato
Yam: Tonight, I'll take back everything with interest!!
Adm: Ehh Ehh Ehh Ehh Ehh Ehh!?

Page 16:
Hello everyone, this is LaoMeng.
I want to thank you all first for purchasing my third VeryShy.
I started this game roughly around the August of 2013.

Actually I already heard of this game around FF22, then after checking out proxy servers and VPNs, I finally managed to play this game after some effort lololol
Kancolle is a very special game, it’s simple but addictive,
and it even managed to produce so many doujins, I hope that after reading the first two pages, All of you can appreciate your shipgirls more.
I cried after making the first two pages, so I forced myself to change the story into a happier one.

Next I must apologize to everyone, besides the first two pages, the original setting is completely different from what we have now. The main reason being I started this work around 17-1-2014, initially I planned to have Shoukaku, Zuikakau, Atago and Takao to join in the fun, but having so many characters will ruin the screen time for everyone and even Yamato's part had to be trimmed, so it was inevitable that they only have minor trace in the final product.

And also this last page.

This Shimakaze was planned to appear in the end, but after all the other shipgirls’ appearance, she’s only left with this half page. I felt that this ending is really bad when I was coloring her, and so I gave up in the end.

I’m planning to do Date-A-Live Season 2 for FF24, I look forward to your care (laughs)
10-2-2014 LaoMeng

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VeryShy03
Premier: FF23 (Fancy Frontier 22) 2/15 2/16
Author: LaoMeng
Printing: Interprint Prepess Service
Pixie ID
Gmail
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Bahamut homepage:

This post has been edited by chung2795: Jul 22 2015, 17:41

Edited version of "The voice that woke the Sleeping Beauty is as sweet as chocolate"

Link: https://e-hentai.org/g/745696/205e977f53/

Translator: Herreis
Page 01:
Title: 眠り姫を目覚める声がチョコのような甘く(The voice that woke the Sleeping Beauty is as sweet as chocolate)

Page 03: The words here are just the Chinese scanslator’s credits so I think you should clean those up.

Page 04:
Pnl 1: I said it before right?
Pnl 2: I’ll certainly… return to the Admiral’s side!
Pnl 4:
AM: What a pleasant breeze…

Page 05:
Pnl 1:
Black bubble: Ugh
AM: Uh?
Pnl 2:
AM: Uwa Ahh Ahh!
AM: Admiral!
SFX: Hish
SFX x2: *Whoosh*
Adr: Uh
Pnl 3:
AM: My bad
Pnl 4:
AM: I shouldn’t have opened the window that widely, the sea breeze blew away all of the documents…
Adm: It’s fine (Ah Ha Ha-)
Adm: Now that summer’s here, isn’t it nice to cool ourselves with the pleasant sea breeze?
Pnl 5:
Box: It has been 3 months since I returned to the Admiral’s side…
AM: You’re right.
Adm: Oh right! The watermelon should be chilled by now, shall we have some?
Box: I remember that time…

Page 06:
Pnl 1:
Box 1: The sky is as blue as ever…
Box 2: I lost my precious gears during the fierce battle
Box 3: Not to mention the pirates I met on my way back gave me an exhausting battle too.
Pnl 2 and beyond:
Box 1: Having the thoughts of
Box 2: “Will I return to the admiral’s side?”
Box 3: Who knows how many dark nights have passed since then…

Page 07:
Pnl 1:
Box: And when I opened my eyes again…
Pnl 2:
SH: I found Amatsukaze ~
AM: Uwah!
SFX: Dash
SH: Let’s race
Pnl 3:
SH x2: Let’s race~
Box: That’s right…
AM: Hold,
AM: Hold On!
Pnl 4:
SH: You promised yesterday!
SH: Don’t go back on your word~
SH x2: Race~
Box 1: During this period this brat showed up…
Box 2: …Shimakaze
Box 3: A weirdo that keeps pursuing speed all of her time…

Page 08:
Pnl 1:
AM: Who would race with you when it’s so hot today~~!
SH: Where are you going?
AM: Getting some watermelons!
SH: Oh! Then let’s race to see who gets to the watermelons first!
Box: For real~~ Shimakaze is really annoying!
Pnl 2:
AM: Having only curry everyday
AM: Don’t you get tired of it?
Pnl 3:
Adm: Curry is not only convenient but also time-saving
Adm: Besides Amatsukaze’s curry tastes different every time, I’m sure that I won’t get tired of it!
Left Side:
SFX: *Blush*
Bubbleless: Well, I added some chocolate today so it should taste great…
AM: Is, is that so?
AM: Hum Uhm~~
Pnl 4:
SFX: *Dok* / *Crash*/ *Bang*
AM: Admiral?!

Page 09:
Pnl 1:
AM: Ad…
AM: Admiral...? Died…?
SFX x2: Tremble…
SH: This tastes like…
SFX x2: *munch*
SH: the flavor of “Seduction Chocolate”.
Pnl 2:
AM: “Seduction Chocolate”?!
Bubbleless: Then why are you still eating it?
SH: This chocolate was prepared by Kongou
SH: To capture her admiral (?)
Bubbleless: Though I don’t really get it…
Kongou: I will be the one who wins over the Admiral's heart~
Kongou: I have arrived
Pnl 3:
AM: Capture?
AM: Is this rat poison?
Adm: Amatsukaze…

Page 10:
Pnl 1:
AM: Yeeahh!
AM: Where are you touching!
SFX x2: *Shudders*
Pnl 2:
AM: Uhh Uhm~
AM: Uhh!
AM: Uhm Uhm~~!
AM: Uh <3
Box: What is happening? Why did the Admiral suddenly…?
Most of the SFXs are just generic shudder and twitch
Pnl 3:
Box: Such a sacred stuff… How could we do it so lightly?
SFX: *Twitch*
AM: I can taste the chocolate from the inside of his mouth just now…
SFX: Hah Ahh-----
Box: Is it because of the chocolate?

Page 11:
Pnl 1:
AM: My body feels so hot… this is weird~~!! This is so embarrassing~~
Ok basically all of the SFXs in this page are shudder and twitch, besides the one beside Admiral’s mouth, which is “suck”
AM: Ahh Ahh
AM: Hold,
AM: hold on…
Box: Although I don’t dislike being touched by the Admiral…
Bottom Pnl:
Box 1: But this is my first time…
AM: Hah Ahh
AM: Ahh Ahh
AM: Unh~
Box: He should be more careful, and gentler…

Page 12:
Again, almost all SFXs are shudder and twitch
Pnl 1:
AM: Uhh Ahh
AM: Ahh Ahh
Pnl 2:
Box: Why did he suddenly lick there… This is so embarrassing~~
Box: I would have cleaned that part if I knew this was going to happen…
AM: Ahh <3
AM: Don’t…
AM: Don’t lick there~~
AM: Hah Ahh!
AM: Uhm ahh
AM: Stop, stop please~
Box: Something is about to come out… Not good! Please stop Ahh Ahh~~
Pnl 3:
AM: Kyeahh ahh ahh
AM: Hah Ahh
AM: No~~
AM: Ahh
AM: Umh Ahh
AM: Coming yeeahh ahh~
AM: No~~ this is so humiliating!

Page 13:
Pnl 1:
Box: What was that sensation…
AM: Hah Ahh
AM: Hah
AM: Uhm
Box: This is bad, I can’t even think properly now…
SFX: *pissing* // *leaking* // *spurting*
Box: It feels like being shocked... stimulating and pleasant...
Pnl 2:
SH: My body is getting hot too… let me take part too!
Pnl 3:
SH: Admiral, it seems that Amatsukaze can’t wait any longer…
SFX: *Waa* (like showing something in amusement)
SH: Quickly put it in <3
Box: Only if there’s something going in there… I’ll feel even better!

Page 14:
Pnl 1:
AM: Ya Ah!
AM: Ahh… I’m still a bit scared after all…
Pnl 2:
AM: Ahh
Box: Uhm Uhn~ Ouch…
AM: Yeeahh Ahh~
Pnl 3:
AM: Not Good Ahh
Box: It’s really in…!!
AM: Hah Ahh
AM: Uhm Ahh~
Pnl 4:
Box: It hurts so much down there… but it feels so good…
Moan: Uhm~~
Moan: Uhn
Moan: Hum Uhm
Box: These kinds of things actually feel so good…

Page 15:
Pnl 1:
AM: Ahh Ahh
AM: Hah
Pnl 2:
AM: No~
AM: I’m… I’m at my limit~ Ahh~
AM: Ahh
AM: Hah Ahh
AM: Uhm~
Box: That stimulating sensation is coming back again…
AM: Shima, Shimakaze?
Pnl 3:
AM: Ahh <3
SFX x2: *lick*
AM: Don’t lick~~ This is so embarrassing!
AM: Hah <3

Page 16:
Pnl 1:
AM: Don’t, Shimakaze please stop immediately!
AM: I, I…
AM: can’t hold back anymore~~
Pnl 2:
AM: Ahh
AM: Hah
AM: Noo~~
AM: I’m at my limit~~ Ahh Ahh Ahh
AM: Yaa
AM: Cumming Yaa Ahh ahh
SFX x2: (Sounds of ejaculation, I can’t remember what to write, please kindly remind me after this lol)
Pnl 3:
SH: So nice~~ Amatsukaze looks like she enjoying… Looks so pleasant…
SH: I want to feel good with Amatsukaze too…

Page 17:
Pnl 1:
AM: Ehh?
SH: However…
Pnl 2:
AM: Yaa ahh!
SH: See~~
SH: Now we can share the Admiral together!
AM: Hold, hold on…
Pnl 3:
SH: Next we’ll have to trouble the Admiral~
SFX x2: Hah---
AM: Uhh~~
Box: How did it turn out like this~~?

Page 18:
Pnl 1:
Moan: Uhh Uhm uhm
Moan: Hah Ahh Ahh
AM: Hah ahh
AM: Unh
AM: Uhm Ahh
AM: Hah
SH: Feels so great~
SH: Amatsukaze…!
Pnl 2:
Moan: Hah Ahh~ Ahh
Moan: Ahh Ahh
SH: Adimral…
SH: Faster, faster…!

Page 19: Bad editor lol
Right side:
Moan: Ahh Ahh~~
SH: I’m cumming Ahh Ahh Ahh ahh~~
SH: Ahh Ahh
SH: Ahh
SH: Hah ahh
Left Side:
Moan: ahh
Moan: Hah Ahh
Moan: Uhm
AM: Ahh, Noo~~ YeeAhh Ahh Ahh~
AM: No~
AM: Hah ahh ahh
AM: Hah
AM: Uhm~

Page 20:
Pnl 2:
Adm: Amatsukaze…
Adm: Amatsukaze…!
Box: I still remember… The voice I heard on those endless nights…
Pnl 3:
Adm: Are you alright?
Box: Ahh Ahh… It’s the Admiral…
Pnl 4:
Adm: Sorry… It must have hurt right… What happened to me…? I did something so horrible…
Adm: It hurts right? I don’t know how to redeem myself now…
AM: It’s alright.
Pnl 5:
Adm: Ehh?

Page 21:
Pnl 1:
AM: You saved me when…
AM: The superiors ordered to have me executed because I lost a battle horribly…
AM: And didn’t I say this before?
AM: I’ll certainly return to the Admiral’s side…
Pnl 2:
AM: And also…
AM: I love you…
Pnl 3:
I will take responsibility! Marry me! Amatsukaze
Ehh~~?
Yes, yes I do… If you don’t mind…
And… can you be gentler next time?
Just the two of us…
Box: Just like the sleeping beauty, I was awakened from this endless night by you…
Box: My Prince Charming…

Page 22:
Afterword:
This is Sakurano Ru, thanks for reading til the end~
The theme this time is “Summertime! Amatsukaze & Shimakaze”
Although there are no summertime bikinis, I made this with summer’s atmosphere~ (Scoff scoff XD
When I saw Amatsukaze for the first time, I decided that “I must draw her as the main character at least once”!!
Thus this chapter was born~
This chapter's theme also focuses on Amatsukaze’s pure maiden heart…
Sweet and pure sex, is my favorite hentai plotline///
The synergy between Shimakaze and Amatsukaze really stroke my heart <3
Added with my friend’s godly title “The voice that woke the Sleeping Beauty is as sweet as chocolate”
Full score on the sweetness!! My heart just keeps beating///

This chapter was also finished in a very limited time! With just a mere 14 days...
I tried to complete 2 pages per day, every day is counted with pages, and the days flew by quickly~

Does this chapter satisfy you?
I’ll work harder from now on, so please take care of me~
Sakurano Ru 2014 SUMMER

I'm the one who's editing this right now, and I got some suggestions that will improves the dialogues.
I put changed contents in []. I marked my notes in **
**None of my suggestions are perfect, feel free to criticize my suggestions**

Page 05:
Pnl 3:
AM: My bad[I'm sorry!] **girls rarely say 'my bad' unless they're boyish**
Pnl 4:
AM: I shouldn’t have opened the window that[so] widely, the sea breeze blew away all of the documents…

Page 06:
Pnl 1:
Box 1: The sky is as blue as ever[always]…

Page 10:
Pnl 1:
AM: Yeeahh![KYahhh!] **Looks better since the girl seems surprized when the admiral touched her**
Pnl 3:
Box: Such a sacred stuff… How could we do [such sacred stuff…] it so lightly?
AM: I can taste the chocolate from the inside of[the curry I made in] his mouth just now…
Box: Is it because of the chocolate? **No kidding**

Page 15:
Pnl 3:
AM: Don’t lick[Stop licking]~~ This is so embarrassing!

Page 17:
Pnl 3:
SH: Next we’ll have to trouble the Admiral[we’ll need the Admiral to do the rest]~~

Page 20:
Pnl 4:
Adm: Sorry… It must have hurt right… What [just] happened to me…? I did[How could I do] something so horrible…
Pnl 5:
Adm: Ehh?[Eh?] **Just my preference since the admiral is like "um, what?" in a short brief moment**

Page 21:
Pnl 2:
AM: I love you… **Not sure about this one since the raw version didn't finish its sentence, but sure it'll be more romantic if it was added at the end**
Pnl 3:
Box: My [Charming] Prince Charming…

This post has been edited by leungmanchiu: Jul 23 2015, 12:17

If you like the improvisations better then why not? (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif) I don't really mind

The script has been edited

This post has been edited by chung2795: Aug 25 2015, 13:43

excellent, glad to have you back

editing bounty https://e-hentai.org/g/616304/45dcaa3468/

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Aug 25 2015, 11:36

Yoo the editing bounty link is wrong bro
Correct editing bounty link: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=12987

This post has been edited by chung2795: Aug 25 2015, 11:49

Proofread for Slave's Carnival:

Page 06

Although Melty’s breasts are small, but they’re very sensitive!

C: Although Melty's breasts are small, they're very sensitive!
or Melty's breasts are small but they're very sensitive!

Page 07

I’m going to urinate…

S: I'm going to pee

Audience, please watch closely!

S: Everyone, please watch closely!
or Gentlemen, please watch closely!

Page 15

the idols of Gargantia are licking off us!

C: the idols of Gargantia are licking us off!

Page 18

These tender holes won’t get loose no matter how many times you came in them

C: These tender holes won't get loose no matter how many times you cum/come in them

Something to note, I noticed that you're still using "Hei" in your translations. I've mentioned it before so I'll remind you again, it's better to use "Hey" instead, it's more commonly used and is considered the correct way of spelling it. "Hei" can be mistaken for a name.

Something to note, I noticed that you're still using "Hei" in your translations. I've mentioned it before so I'll remind you again, it's better to use "Hey" instead, it's more commonly used and is considered the correct way of spelling it. "Hei" can be mistaken for a name.

Oh yeah my bad, kinda in a trance when translating this just now

After being inactive for more than 3 mounts, I guess it's time to contribute a new script (lol) This is quite a weird one cause there's a Japanese and Chinese raw, and there are some slight differences in translation, this script is leaning more onto the Japanese side.

Chinese raw (uncensored): https://e-hentai.org/g/616304/45dcaa3468/
Japanese raw: https://e-hentai.org/g/638761/3aaa2d7da2/
Reminder: Use Chinese raws because they're uncensored

Script proofread by CC

Page 01:
Title: Slave’s Carnival

Page 03:
Pnl 1:
Box: “Carnival” is one of Gargantia’s traditional festivals, women dress themselves up with splendid attires and express their own charm, in hopes of getting a suitable partner.
Pnl 2:
Man: That was a superb performance! Let’s have a toast if you don’t mind?
Amy: But, what about Ledo…
Melty: Let’s go let’s go, it looks like we’ve gotten ourselves some good men.
Pnl 3:
Man: Your friend? No problem! My friend will invite him later.
Pnl 4:
A: Huh? This is…

Page 04:
Pnl 1:
A: Nh
A: …Mi…!
Pnl 2:
A: Uhm…?
Pnl 3:
Saaya: Amy! Wake up!
M: We were tricked! And… our clothes!
Pnl 4:
A: I can’t move…
A: Noo, even here…
Pnl 5:
A: Ehh!
A: This, This is?
Pnl 6:
Man: Sorry for the wait! Welcome to this time’s Secret Carnival! Today’s slaves are all cream of the crop!
Pnl 7:
Man: Allow me to introduce the three flowers of Gargantia---
Page 05:
Pnl 1: Next let us showcase the quality of our merchandises, first of all is Amy!
Pnl 2:
A: No…
A: Stop…
Pnl 3:
Man: Everyone look clearly at her pink pussy!
A: Hah Nnh
A: Noo
A: Hah Ahh
Pnl 4: Hah Ahh
Pnl 5:
Man: I’ve always wanted to squeeze Saaya’s big and soft tits, quite a pair of lewd breasts you have here!
S: Nooooo
Man: Hmm? You’re getting hard…
Pnl 6:
S: Hah Hah
S: Hah
Man: You’re feeling it already? Saaya is naughty after all.
Pnl 7:
S: No…
S: That’s not true… <3

Page 06:
Pnl 1:
Man: Amy looks like she’s enjoying it too! It’s quite wet over here…
Pnl 3: Next is… “Tasting time”
Pnl 4:
Man: Let everyone have a good taste
Man: It’s Saaya’s boobs!
S: Kyaa!/Yiiks! (Under that is Ahh, dunno why the author drew it this way)
S: Hah Ahh Uhn
Man: So good! What a lewd scent
Pnl 5:
M: Ahhh
M: Ahhh
Man: Although Melty's breasts are small, they're very sensitive!
M: No, stop
Pnl 6: Your pussy is hot and drenched, and your love juice keeps flowing out!
Pnl 7:
M: Umnh
M: Unh Nnh

Page 07:
Pnl 1: Ahh… don’t, don’t use your tongue…
Pnl 2:
Man: Amy’s pussy looks delighted
Man: She’s shaking incessantly
Pnl 3: Her clit is twitching!
Pnl 4: My fingers feel like they’re being sucked in…
Pnl 5:
Man: It’s my turn now! I want to touch them too!
S: Ahhhh
S: Ahh Ahh
Pnl 6:
Man: Ohh Ohh Ohh This feels great! Her pussy is so wet and slippery!
A: I, I’m going to pee…
A: Hah Ahh
A: Noooooo
Pnl 7: Uhm? Then I’ll let you pee as much as you want! Gentlemen, please watch closely!

Page 08:
Pnl 1:
A: Stoppp / Nooooo
A: Hahh Ahhh Ahh Ahh Ahh
Pnl 2:
A: Hah x2
Man: Amy spurted a lot, did she endure from the very beginning until now?
Pnl 3:
Man: Being tied up feels uncomfortable right? Let’s take that off now! Your wet clothes too…
A: Uhm? What?
Pnl 4:
Man: Next is our turn to spurt out a lot of different things!
Black: “Opening display” begins

Page 09:
Pnl 1: Ohh Ohh… It’s very tight!
Pnl 2:
A: Ahhh
A: Hah Ahh
Pnl 3:
Man: It’s in! I’m inside the idol of Gargantia
Man: I’m inside Amy’s pussy!
Pnl 4:
A: Ahh Ahh
A: Stop
A: Please stoppp
A: No, don’t! Please take it out.
Pnl 5: Look at Saaya, she looks so happy that she can’t even talk now.
Pnl 6:
Man: How is it Melty?
Man: Looking at how your pussy is swallowing up cocks
M: Uhm
M: Uhn Nnh

Page 10:
Pnl 1:
Man: Hey! Put your waist to good use. What happened to the dancing steps that you’ve trained for the performance?
A: Le, Ledo…
Pnl 2: How dare you call out another man’s name! I’ll have to punish you for this.
Pnl 3:
A: Hah Ahhh
A: Ahh
A: Hah Ahh
Pnl 4:
A: Will… come and save us
A: Ahh
A: Hahh Ahhh
Pnl 5: You’re not being honest with yourself, you’re already so wet here! Even your nipples are hard now.
Pnl 6: Hah Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh

Page 11:
Pnl 1:
Man: Uohh Ohhh! Saaya is dancing hard now!
S: Ahh x2
Pnl 2: If that’s the case, then let’s reward your clit for that!
Pnl 4:
Man: No one is going to save you now
A: Hah Ahh
A: Ahh
Pnl 5:
Man: We’ll just have to inform the old geezer that this is for the freedom of copulating, and they should accept it as well! (This is a very questionable translation since I don’t know much of the series, please do correct me if I’m wrong)
Background: Ohh Ohh… they look like they’re enjoying themselves
A: How, how can this…

Page 12:
Pnl 1:
Man: That’s why… you all shouldn’t hold back from disgracing yourselves and climax to your hearts’ content!
Man: There’s still a lot of people waiting in line
Pnl 2:
Moan: hah ahh
M: Too, too fast! There’s something hot coming inside my pussy…
Pnl 3: No more, stop, please take it out
Pnl 4:
Man: Gentlemen, witness!
S: Hah ahh
S: Nooooo
Man: We’re live streaming the climaxes of the three flowers of Gargantia!

Page 13:
Pnl 1:
A: Hnngh
A: Hhnngghh
A: Hah ahh ahh Hah Ahh Ahh
A: Noooo Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh Ahh!
Pnl 2: Uhh Ohh this feels too great, I can’t stop cumming!
Pnl 3: She took it all in, she’s really a perverted sow.

Page 14:
Pnl 1 : Next is time for freestyle. You may pick your favorite partner.
Pnl 2:
A: Wha, What?
Man: If you all give proper services to all these cocks.
Man: We’ll let you go!
Pnl 3:
Man: Then I’ll leave my cock to your care!
Background: Uhh Uhh… What a heavy smell
Man: Uhh Ohh! Ami’s small mouth is super warm
Pnl 4:
Man: Really!?
A: Wait, Wait…
Pnl 5: Me, me too!

Page 15:
Pnl 1: Ohh Ohh Ohh the idols of Gargantia are licking us off!
Pnl 2:
A: Umh Umh Nnh Unh
Man: They’re sucking it vigorously!
Pnl 3:
S: Nnh
Man: I, I can’t bear this any longer!
Pnl 5:
Man: Use your mouth properly!
A: Nnh Hah Ohh
A (mono): Uhh… Uguu
Man: Here too, lick all of them until they’re all clean.
Man: Don’t waste them! Swallow them all!

Page 16:
Pnl 1: Heh heh, these sows. Licking so eagerly…
Pnl 2:
A: Wait, what? Didn’t you say that you’ll let us go!
Man: What are you saying? No one is having their fill yet.
Pnl 3: and… we haven’t used these holes behind yet.
Pnl 5:
A: Nooooooooo!
A: Stop
Man: This time we’ll do both sides at the same time!
A: Hahh Ahh Ahh Ahh
A: Not, not at the same time… You’re… you’re breaking me apart!!

Page 17:
Pnl 1: Your ass and boobs are so big and soft, they’re very nice to squeeze!
Pnl 2:
Man: Saaya’s back is very tight too
S: Stoooooop
Man: Yes yes~
Man: Then I’ll handle opening up the front end!
Pnl 3: You’re so happy that you’re unable to speak now right? Amy?
Pnl 4: Her pussy keeps flowing out love juice that I just want to keep thrusting.
Pnl 5: The small mouth here is soft too!

Page 18:
Pnl 1:
Man: Melty’s tongue techniques are very well-trained.
Man: Did you train it to fish other guys? Ahh?
M: Hah
M: Hah Ahh
M: Uhm Uhn
Man: Ahh Ahh I can’t take this anymore, I’m cumming again!
Pnl 3:
Man: These tender holes won't get loose no matter how many times you cum in them
Man: My turn my turn! I wanna cum too!
Pnl 4: Ohh Ohh Ohh Amy’s uterus
It’s being filled by us!
Pnl 5:
A: Stooopppp
A: Hah ahhh
A: Ahh <3 Unh <3
Man: uhm? You’re climaxing again

Page 18:
Pnl 1:
Man: How dare you come before we do, you’ll need more punishment!
A: cum <3 cum <3
Man: Let’s defile your small mouth
A: Nnh
A: Uhm Hah ahh
Pnl 2:
Man: Hey! Don’t spill it out! Swallow them all!
M: Uhm x2
M Uhm x3
Pnl 3: Ohh Ohh Ohh!! The fifth person to come inside!
Pnl 4:
S: Cum… ming
S: Hah Ahhh
S: I’m… I’m already…

Page 19:
M: Hah ahh ahh ahh ahh ahh ahh
M: Ahh
M: Ahhhhh
S: Ahh Ahh
S: Hah Ahh
S: Nooooooo

Page 20:
Pnl 1:
A: Nnh
A: Uhm Ahh Hah
A: Ahhh Ahhh Uhmm Unhh Ahh Ahh
Pnl 2:
Man: Uohh Ohh! It’s spurting out it’s spurting out~
Man: How much did we come inside
Pnl 3:
A: Le… Ledo
A: Uhmm

Page 21:
Pnl 1:
Man: What a catch! We should be able to get high prices from selling these!
Man: You’re right… Ahh!
Pnl 2: Groups rally performing non-humane activities detected, extermination complete
Pnl 3:
S: Ahh~ It’s Ledo!
A: Ledo is going to come and play with us as well?
A: We can give lots of services to you now
A: Ahh
M: I’ll let you come inside me too!

Page 22:
Free talk:
Hello, I’m Chiyami.
This time I’ve taken on the challenge of publishing two books, Gargantia and Hataraku Maō-sama.
Now that I think about it, why did I do that (?)
(I’m still currently in the battlefield as I wrote this OTZ…)

This time I tried to debut three of the female protagonists,
although Amy still takes the lead in the end, but…
mastering the charms of three different characters in a short time… is really hard (lol)

That’s right
I drew a Mech this time! (Although there’s only one panel)

As usual, I hope I’ll have improvements with every book I draw.

Thank you for reading and buying this book,
and also to my friends that have helped me in the process of making this book m(_ _)m

Well then, see you next time!

Chiyami
2013/7

This post has been edited by chung2795: Aug 25 2015, 13:48

Btw Red do you have anymore Chinese doujins you want me to translate for EHCOVE?? Or do I start translating the ones that I scanned??

It's been awhile since I made a script for EHCOVE, so....
Hopefully we can get more CN>ENG translators here, I'm so lonely here lol

-Editor, please refer to the proofread version script over here (https://forums.e-hentai.org/index.php?s=&showtopic=169938&view=findpost&p=4256904) Thank you-


Script for Bride’s Practice
My raw: https://e-hentai.org/g/868239/dbc027c25d/
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Page 04:
A: Ah!
A: Kiri… Kirito
K: This really suits you, Asuna!
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Page 05:
PL Right:
A: Don’t…
A: Don’t look here…
PL 2:
A: Kiri…
A: Unh Nnh
PL 3:
A: Jeez…
A: Kirito you sly fox!
PL 4:
A: From now on…
A: I’m Kirito’s woman
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Page 06:
PL 1:
A: Kirito…
PL 2:
K: Asuna you’re getting better at this
PL 3:
A: I have been practicing everyday for Kirito
K: Being able to marry Asuna is the happiest thing in my life
PL 4:
A: Hey
A: Don’t forget about me when you've returned to the real world.
K: Uhm
K: I promise
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Page 07:
PL 1:
The Real World
A: It’s freezing…
A: Kirito is late
A: Ahh Ahh Ahh
Big Text: Kyaaaaaaa
PL 2:
K: Sorry for the wait, Asuna
A: You… You scared me there! Jeez…
PL 3:
K: Don’t tell me you’re feeling it…
PL 4:
K: Even with such thick clothings?
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Page 08:
PL 1:
A: Dum… dummy
A: I’m only feeling it because it’s Kirito
PL 2:
K: I love you
PL 3:
A: Don’t do it here
K: It’s been a while since we've done it…
K: It’s fine, no one passes here anyway…
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Page 09:
PL 1:
K: I can’t hold back anymore
PL 2:
Ahh~
PL 3:
A: Kirito’s…
A: Hot penis is twitching inside…
A Moans: Hah Ahh x2
PL 4:
Moan: Uhm Uhm
Hyaa Ahh Ahh

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Page 10:
PL 1:
Hah Ah
Ha---
Hah Ahh
PL 2:
Hah Ahh
PL 3:
A: Uhh Uhm Nnh
PL 4:
K: Does it feel good like this?
A: Hah Ahh…
A: Ahh Ahh Ahh
A: Ye… Yes it does (the original text is like Gw…. Fwels Gwood)
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Page 11:
PL 2:
A: Hah Ahh
PL 4:
A: Cumming!!! Ahh Ahh Ahh!!
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Page 12:
A: Ahh Ahhn
A: Kirito’s… semen is coming in!!
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Page 13:
PL 1:
A: The real world feels better than the virtual one, right?
A: Jeez…
A: I love you, Kirito….
PL 2:
Bubble: But it’s really cold out here…
PL 3:
K: Achoo!
A: Good grief…
PL 4:
-The next day-
A: You got a cold!?
K(phone): Doing it at the park during the winter is really a bad idea after all…
-END-
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Page 14:
Hello~ Sousouman here.
This is my sixth SAO book, and the second season was announced when this book was being made.
I wanted to draw more pages, but due to time constraint only this much could be drawn.
Although it’s a short book, it’s filled with my love for SAO,
I hope everyone would like this.

Then, til the next book we meet.
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Page 16:
Hello~ I’m Hanahanamaki.
I’m responsible for paneling, most of the coloring,
dialogue, editing, printing etc
basically an assistant,
although it was a very busy work,
but since everyone seems to be liking this work,
that made everything worth it.

Truth to be told, now that this is our sixth SAO book,
and we’ve also gained a variety of readers within the course of time,
When I think about the fact that we have so much readers reading this book,
it made me feel so proud.
I hope one day,
If I could personally give our SAO doujins to the original author, Reki Kawahara sensei, that would be great.

Speaking of which, due to work last year,
I was fortunate enough to attend Dengeki Bunko’s year-end party, it felt like Weiya*.
There was a lot of famous authors there, including Reki Kawahara sensei.
The editor even managed to introduce us to him,
but I got too overjoyed that I forgot to give him the books,
even if I did I would be seen as a strange foreigner…

Then, til next time.
TL note*: [en.wikipedia.org] https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Weiya
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This post has been edited by chung2795: Nov 21 2015, 05:04

Nice translation. I don't see any major mistakes and some of the minor ones are debatable. I also learned how to use the world 'jeez' lol.