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Aug 2 2014, 19:40
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zam005
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Here's version 3, based on Red's proofed version. [ www.mediafire.com] http://www.mediafire.com/download/fobi8eqz44o9clo/[EHCOVE]_MOVIE_STAR_IIIc_ver3.rar This post has been edited by zam005: Aug 2 2014, 19:42
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Aug 3 2014, 08:45
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I just started to work on [SILENT BELL infection] and I'll apply the new script form to this. Some bounty poster asked me to make the script in this form and I found it good. Let me show the sample of that new form.
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Page5 ===1 (<-Panel No.) #ん。。。 (<-Japanese characters to tell you which panel it is) Mm (# means printed word in the bubble or box) #ふ。。。あっ。。。 Ha...aahh...
@ハッ (X2) (<-@ means Handwriting in bubble) Hahh (X2)
@グッ *GROPE*
$ツ ( <-$ means HW outside of bubble.) *SLIP* -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
But I'm not 100% sure that Japanese characters will help you when it's HW. Please tell me what you think about this form.
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Aug 3 2014, 12:29
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zam005
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It's looks MUCH better. A little suggestion though, if you don't mind. While each translators use different formats for their scripts. But for editors (at least for me), bubbles order are the MOST important things. It should always go by read order, right>left, up>down and frame by frame regardless of their contents.
For example, in MOVIE STAR IIIc, there are the sentences that have been separated into different boxes. Instead of trying to put them together, ignore that and go by bubbles order will be less confusing.
Something like this.
page 8
b1) ...This is the place // where big sister called me from...
b2) I made up my mind, knocked on the door and opened it up and, just as I expected...
b3) Aha Ah! Naked... Big sister, called me from hotel. And... and...
b4) Oh... right. I see, I see. // He-y! Someone just came to meet our princess! (small print: I really don’t know what’s happening.)
b5) ...Yesterday...
b6) Yes... Big sister was there.
b7) ...I don't // want to go in here...
b8) So... // you came here, huh?
b9) Being groped by a man.
b10) It's O.K. // Don't be bothered with... this.
b11) She saw me came in but... she never... It was like she was enjoying it...
b12) Wait... for a while... // I have something to tell you after this.
b13) Hey, Hey, Hey. What do you mean 'after this'? Don't be hard on me.
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Aug 3 2014, 12:38
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Yeah, I appreciate those with Japanese characters, especially with heavy dialogue involved. You don't have to complete the whole script, just the first few characters so editors can get an idea where's where. Something like, QUOTE Page## ちゃんと You should have rescued me!
いや But the two of you looked as if you were having so much fun…
楽しく I wasn't having fun! There doesn't have to be much. Context of the story will also help where placement of the text will end up.
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Aug 3 2014, 12:51
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asdkg
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I guess that '//' can make it much better. Now I learned another thing. QUOTE For example, in MOVIE STAR IIIc, there are the sentences that have been separated into different boxes. Instead of trying to put them together, ignore that and go by bubbles order will be less confusing. https://e-hentai.org/s/3a4689d13e/93626-5So I guess you would be less confused if I make a script (with the last panel of linked page, as an example) in order of this. 目線こっち//カメラ見って -> はっ -> はっ -> ! -> ぞう、ココ -> はっ And not like this. 目線こっち//カメラ見って -> ぞう、ココ -> はっ -> はっ -> はっ -> !
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Aug 3 2014, 12:59
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asdkg
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QUOTE(Ser Maggot @ Aug 3 2014, 12:38)  Yeah, I appreciate those with Japanese characters, especially with heavy dialogue involved. You don't have to complete the whole script, just the first few characters so editors can get an idea where's where. Something like, There doesn't have to be much. Context of the story will also help where placement of the text will end up.
Uh... so the PANEL NO. is not really necessary, I guess.
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Aug 3 2014, 13:08
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QUOTE(asdkg @ Aug 3 2014, 18:59)  Uh... so the PANEL NO. is not really necessary, I guess.
Personally, yes. But if you think editor needs extra guidance, why not? 目線こっち <English text here> カメラ見って <English text here> はっ (x3) <breath sounds> ぞう、ココ <English text here> This post has been edited by Ser Maggot: Aug 3 2014, 13:10
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Aug 3 2014, 13:28
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QUOTE(asdkg @ Aug 3 2014, 17:51)  So I guess you would be less confused if I make a script (with the last panel of linked page, as an example) in order of this.
目線こっち//カメラ見って -> はっ -> はっ -> ! -> ぞう、ココ -> はっ And not like this.
目線こっち//カメラ見って -> ぞう、ココ -> はっ -> はっ -> はっ -> !
Yes, it's more easier this way (IMG:[ invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif) Actually, it's not much different with this example because those bubbles are only moan which easy to figure it out which one go to which bubbles. But it's another story for speech bubbles. And for panel's number. No, it's not necessary since each bubbles are already separate by line spacing and // for continuous bubbles. Try here if you want to look for more formats example. [ mangahelpers.com] http://mangahelpers.com/translators/This post has been edited by zam005: Aug 3 2014, 13:47
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Aug 3 2014, 13:36
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asdkg
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[quote name='Ser Maggot' date='Aug 3 2014, 13:08' post='3445124'] Personally, yes. But if you think editor needs extra guidance, why not?
Right. I just tried that and I found it necessary when I'm translating the SFXs outside of bubble.
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Aug 3 2014, 19:32
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How about this? I separating speech and sfx.
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P5 ==========1
#ん。。。 Mm...
#ふ。。。あっ。。。 Ha...ahh...
@ハッ Haahh
@ハッ Haahh
$ツ。。。 *SLIPPY*
$グツ *GROPE*
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@はっ Haah
@ふっ。。。 Haah...
$ザッ [*It's SFX for white noise and I guess it is to show that it's a recorded video.(Or someone's recording it.) There's so many 'ザッ' all around this episode so I'll just skip it.]
$ニュルッ *WET*
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$ヂュル *SLURP*
$ヂュルウ *SLURRP*
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@んは Mmmhh
@ふはっ Haahh
$プッ *DRIP*
==========5 #見線こっち Look this way. // Look at the camera.
#そう、 Right, right here.
@は Hahh
@はっ Hahh
@!
@はっ Hahh ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P6 ==========1
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#。。。夜の ...It's past 10 and...
#これから I'm in the old clubroom... of automobile club
#状況を From now on... I'll make a... experience-based report
#えー。。。 Uh-... to introduce our club activity // to everyone who... is interested in... I mean...
@はっ Haahh
@はっ Haahh
$ぶるっ *QUIVER*
$ぶるっ *QUIVER*
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ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P7 ==========1
#え。。。暗い。。。 Oh... Do I look...depressed? //More cheerfully...? You mean...
#はい。。。あの Like that video... O.K...
@するる *SLIDE*
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#えー。。。 Um-... //From now on, you'll see the activity record of us, the automobile club.
#一体 What's this automobile club? Let me introduce it to you. //And it won't be boring.
#興味が If you're interested, please join our club...! We always welcome you
$ピッ *BEEP*
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#こんな Like this...? ...Yes...
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P8 ==========1 #ん。。。ふ。。。 Mmm... Haahh... //This is... greeting.
#ん。。。コミュニケーションを Mmm... Greeting is very important thing... in communicating with... the others
#こう。。。して We... make our tongues tangled together like this... Mmm... Haahh... //Like every otherMmm...college student do...
#。。。しすぎると ...I keep doing it and I start to feel dazed...
$チュル *SLOSH*
$チュッ *CHU*
$クチュッ *SLOSH*
$ギッ *RUSTLE*
$ギシッ *RUSTLE* ==========2 #。。。この部室 ...This clubroom is pretty small so... //Once the mood got aroused, it easily infects the people
#そうなると And usually... it leads to some erotic thing.
$はふ *BLUSH* (*It's liberal translation)
==========3 #今日は Today I'll show you //the detailed picture of it
#これも It's the part of //club activity for sure.
@ぐっ *GROPE* ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー
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Aug 3 2014, 21:27
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Since I don't know which book it came from so I can't check with raws pages but overall it's looks good. Do not forget to add explanation at the start of the real script though. # mean *** @ mean *** $ mean *** If they read the script and compare to raws, it probably enough to understand what it mean. But it doesn't hurt to add them either (IMG:[ invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif) Oh, and Red, I already finished editing MOVIE STAR IIIc from your proofed. It's here, in case you missed it. https://forums.e-hentai.org/index.php?s=&am...t&p=3443596This post has been edited by zam005: Aug 3 2014, 21:32
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Aug 3 2014, 22:09
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QUOTE(zam005 @ Aug 3 2014, 21:27)  Since I don't know which book it came from so I can't check with raws pages but overall it's looks good. Do not forget to add explanation at the start of the real script though. # mean *** @ mean *** $ mean *** If they read the script and compare to raws, it probably enough to understand what it mean. But it doesn't hurt to add them either (IMG:[ invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif) Oh, and Red, I already finished editing MOVIE STAR IIIc from your proofed. It's here, in case you missed it. https://forums.e-hentai.org/index.php?s=&am...t&p=3443596Oh, it's Silent/infection which I just started to do. https://e-hentai.org/g/93626/f6727b3597/# mean speech, no matter it's inside or outside of bubble/handwritten or printed. So these are the things which have to be edited in any case. @ mean handwritten SFX in bubble. $ mean handwritten SFX outside of bubble. So I guess the editor can do his job by checking only #s in most cases (not editing SFX). Or # and @, if he's editing every bubble.
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Aug 3 2014, 22:43
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Read it again with RAWS. And yeah, it's much more easier to edit this way.
Also I have some comments.
P5 ==========1
#ん。。。 Mm... // Should've been double bubble here, right? Then please make it 2 lines. Don't leave it to editors, most editors don't know Japanese. The best they can do is make it up or typing the same line twice, which not a good idea.
#ふ。。。あっ。。。 Ha...ahh... // The same with above.
P6 ==========1
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#。。。夜の //??? ...It's past 10 and... //missing???
#これから I'm in the old clubroom... of automobile club
Sorry, I only read through the first few pages, those sfx's font give me a headache Orz
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Aug 3 2014, 23:27
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asdkg
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QUOTE #ん。。。 Mm... // Should've been double bubble here, right? Then please make it 2 lines. Don't leave it to editors, most editors don't know Japanese. The best they can do is make it up or typing the same line twice, which not a good idea.
#ふ。。。あっ。。。 Ha...ahh... // The same with above. Fixed. I'll keep that in my mind. QUOTE #。。。夜の //??? ...It's past 10 and... //missing???
The literal translation is 'It's past 10 in night and...'. I throw that 'in night' part away and it was mistake. I'll fix it too QUOTE Sorry, I only read through the first few pages, those sfx's font give me a headache Orz They're just @,# and $ but somehow it looks weird on the thread posts. They don't look weird when I'm working. I think it's because they're @#$ in Japanese font. I'll change it into @#$ in English font. Or would it help you if I change them into something like [S], [B] and [X]?
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Aug 4 2014, 01:05
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zam005
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QUOTE(asdkg @ Aug 4 2014, 04:27)  They're just @,# and $ but somehow it looks weird on the thread posts. They don't look weird when I'm working. I think it's because they're @#$ in Japanese font. I'll change it into @#$ in English font. Or would it help you if I change them into something like [S], [B] and [X]?
No no no. You're misunderstood me lol I mean sfx fonts in Japanese RAWS. I read your script and looking for which place it should go in the RAWS. And somehow those JAPANESE fonts for sfx kinda make me dizzy. It had nothing to do with your script. And for this one. #。。。夜の //ここ ...It's past 10 and... //missing???I mean it's double bubble and we only have a first half here while the next line jump to #これから I'm in the old clubroom... of automobile clubSorry for not make it clear enough. This post has been edited by zam005: Aug 4 2014, 01:28
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Aug 4 2014, 08:31
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Oh, I got it now (IMG:[ invalid] style_emoticons/default/laugh.gif) And yeah... He's like doing some typography or something.
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Aug 4 2014, 16:18
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@asdkg Yeah, that's how it is (IMG:[ invalid] style_emoticons/default/laugh.gif) @Red_Piotrus Yes, it's pleasure working with you guys, too. And yeah I plans to working on more EHCOVE projects too. But that will have to come after some gaming sessions (IMG:[ invalid] style_emoticons/default/tongue.gif)
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Aug 5 2014, 05:31
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[Silent] part done. I realized that I have read TLed version of this part while I'm working. Oh, and thank you zam005. Your gave me lots of useful advice.
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P5 ==========1 # ん。。。 Mm... //Mmh
# ふ。。。あっ。。。 Ha...ahh... //Haah...
@ ハッ Haahh
@ ハッ Haahh
$ ツ。。。 *SLIPPY*
@ グツ *GROPE*
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@ はっ Haah
@ ふっ。。。 Haah...
$ ザッ [*It's SFX for white noise and I guess it is to show that it's a recorded video.(Or someone's recording it.) There's so many 'ザッ' all around this episode so I'll just skip it.]
$ ニュルッ *WET*
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$ ヂュル *SLURP*
$ ヂュルウ *SLURRP*
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@ んは Mmmhh
@ ふはっ Haahh
$ プッ *DRIP*
==========5 # 見線こっち Look this way. // Look at the camera.
# そう、 Right, right here.
@ は Hahh
@ はっ Hahh
@ !
@ はっ Hahh ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P6 ==========1
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# 。。。夜の // ここ ...It's past 10 and...
# これから I'm in the old clubroom... of automobile club
# 状況を From now on... I'll make a... experience-based report
# えー。。。// 体験レポ_トを Uh-... to introduce our club activity // to everyone who... is interested in... I mean...
@ はっ Haahh
@ はっ Haahh
$ ぶるっ *QUIVER*
$ ぶるっ *QUIVER*
==========3
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P7 ==========1
# え。。。暗い。。。// もっと Oh... Do I look...depressed? //More cheerfully...? You mean...
# はい。。。あの Like that video... O.K...
@ するる *SLIDE*
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# えー。。。// これから Um-... //From now on, you'll see the activity record of us, the automobile club.
# 一体 // 。。。と言って What's this automobile club? Let me introduce it to you. //And it won't be boring.
# 興味が If you're interested, please join our club...! We always welcome you
$ ピッ *BEEP*
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# こんな Like this...? ...Yes...
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P8 ==========1 # ん。。。ふ。。。// 挨拶。。。 Mmm... Haahh... //This is... greeting.
# ん。。。コミュニケーションを Mmm... Greeting is very important thing... in communicating with... the others
# こう。。。して // 唇を We... make our tongues tangled together like this... Mmm... Haahh... //Like every otherMmm...college student do...
# 。。。しすぎると ...I keep doing it and I start to feel dazed...
$ チュル *SLOSH*
$ チュッ *CHU*
$ クチュッ *SLOSH*
$ ギッ *RUSTLE*
$ ギシッ *RUSTLE* ==========2 # 。。。この部室 // いいムードに ...This clubroom is pretty small so... //Once the mood got aroused, it easily infects the people
# そうなると And usually... it leads to some erotic thing.
$ はふ *BLUSH* (*It's liberal translation)
==========3 # 今日は // たっぷり Today I'll show you //the detailed picture of it
# これも // 部の活動 It's the part of //club activity for sure.
@ ぐっ *GROPE* ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P9 ==========1 # 最初は It begins with teasing my intimate part carefully
# 指で // 自分 He pokes it with his finger, or uses some toys //Or makes me do it by myself...
$ ピッ *BEEP*
$ ブルッ *QUIVER*
==========2 # そうやって He saw my... pussy got wet and dripping and
# 。。。アレを ...Now he's ready...right?
# だから // これから I know what he is ready for //I'll be stuck with this... My body starts to throb at that thought.
@ は Hahh
@ は Hahh
$ ぶるっ *QUIVER*
==========3 # 。。。今 // あちらで ...And //The others just started rock sissors paper over there.
# もっと (HW) Explain it
# 話。。。 (HW) In detail...
# 。。。一発 ...There's always compettition because they all want the first.
@ はっ Haah
@ はっ Haah
@ ずっぷ *SLURP*
==========4 # 。。。きゃっ ...Kiya
# これから I'll be stuck with this excellent THING from now.
# 。。。いつも最初に He always makes me watch it first. (*Or just 'He always show it to me first')
@ かあ *BLUSH*
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P10 ==========1 # えー。。。 Uh-... we're at the height of it(*)... [*The original word is '本番(HonBan)' and it's literally means the actual performance before the audience. So I can say that it's an antonym of rehearsal. But in this case, it means sexual intercouse with insertion, not a blowjob or handjob or sumata.]
==========2 # 。。。いつもは ...We talk about many things while we're doing it...
# 講義とか// 部の大会とか // けっこうね? About lecture //About club meeting //It's student-like topics, isn't it? Tell me something.
# 。。。緊張して // いつもは ...He looks strained. //He's cheerful in usual.
@ はっ Haahh
@ は Haah
@ はっ Haahh
$ ずっ (X 2) *SLURP* (X 2)
$ ちゅく (X 2) *SLOSH* (X 2)
==========3 # はいっ Alright We're taking commemorative photograph.
# かなり It's knocking my deepest place.
# 今日は And I'm squeezing it tightly, as an usual.
# 。。。乱れすぎ ...Was that too nasty?
@ ずっぷ *SLURP*
@ はっ Haahh
@ はっ Haahh
$ ヌプ *WET* ==========4 # んー。。。 Mmm-...
# どぴゅってして。。。 // 。。。ね? Give me your cum... //...Will you?
$ チュル *SLOSH*
==========5 # きゃっ。。。 Kiya...
# 今。。。びゅく//中に It's... flushing //Gushing in
# たくさん//二回三回と He's letting it out so much... Ah...A...h //Twice, three times, and again...! [*Or just 'Again, agian, and agian...!']
@ はっ Haahh
@ はっ Haahh
$ ド *GUSH*
$ ドッ *GUSH*
$ ドッ *GUSH*
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P11 ==========1 # えー。。。//夜の12 Uh-... //It's turned midnight.
# 。。。なかだし He just cummed inside of me.
==========2 # 。。。ほんとは//自動車部では ...As a general rule, he shouldn't do that but //It's normal in automobile club.
# 。。。私も ...And I like it too...
@ はっ Haahh
@ はっ Haahh
==========3 # 次は Now it's time to show my skill
# 。。。ぞの前に ...But before that
==========4 # 。。。やっぱり//改まって ...It's //pretty embarassing
# 照れちゃい To take off my cloth by myself.
$ シュル *SLIP (OFF)*
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P12 ==========1 # どきどきします My heart is pounding
# とても強い It smells so strong
$ ゴシッ (X 2) *RUB* (X 2)
==========2 # それが//たまりません I just //can't stop...
# んふっ Mmmhh
$ はっ Haahh
$ はっ Haahh
$ かぷん *SQUISH*
==========4 # ん。。。 Mmm... Mm-mm...
# ふん。。。ん。。。っ Mmhh...Mm...h
@ じゅる//じゅるる *SLURP* //*SLURP*
$ はふ Haahh
==========5 # とっても//おいしい Delicious milk //just came out.
$ ふっ Haah
$ はふっ Haahh
$ ズルルッ *DROOL*
==========6 # おしゃぶり It's licking time now.
# 実はかなり In fact, I'm pretty good at this.
# 順番に//いろんな形 I suck them in turn //I never get tired of watching their various shapes.
# おっぱいを//たっぷりでると I like to with my breasts //Because it makes them cum so much.
@ はっ Haahh
@ はっ Haahh
@ はっ Haahh
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P13 ==========1 # ああっと I'm surrounded before I knew it
# なんと言う事//大学生で Look what's going on here! //I'm about to be gang banged in college!
# 。。。でもすでに ...Well, I'm already stuck so many times and I'm just ready.
$ キュッ *GROPE*
$ キュッ *GROPE*
==========2 # 撮れてますか? Are you recording this? Really?
# これビデオに So you're making a video of this?
@ は Haah
@ はっ Haahh
==========3 # ちょっと//かも。。。 It's little embarassing //I think...
$ グプッ *SLURP*
==========4 # どうやら Somehow It seems
# 乱交に To turn into gang bang
# わたしも I should take my heart to swing my waste harder.
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P14 ==========1 # きゃ。。。//深夜の2 Kiya... //It's little after 2... in the morning
# ご覧の通り//後ろもしっかり As you can see We're at the height of gang bang. //They're sticking my another hole, too.
# ちなみに//。。。まだまだ And it's about...fourth time...? I think so. //...They don't look tired yet.
@ はっ (X 3) Haahh (X 3)
$ ズップ (X 2) *SLURP* (X 2)
==========2 @ んっ//うっ Mmh //Mmhh
@ んぶっ Mmbh
$ ドグッ *SPLASH*
==========3 # あは。。。//おいしく Haha... I'm sandwiched... //I'm ready to be eaten (*Or just 'They're going to eat me.) [*'食べる(Eat)' is also informal expression for 'to have sex']
# くるしい (HW) Stuffy
@ あっ Ahh
@ ん。。。 Mmm...
$ ズップ (X 2) *SLURP* (X 2)
==========4 # あー。。。 Ah-...
@ はっ (X 3) Haah (X 3)
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P15 ==========1 @ んぶー。。。 Mmmbh-... (*↑Does it look weird?)
@ んぶー。。。 Mmmbh-...
@ ビッ *TWITCH*
$ とびゅるっ *SQUIRT*
$ ドッ (X 3) *THUMP*
==========2 # 顔にだされ They cummed on my face. //...It's warm
# とろとろ//ぶっかけ? And sticky //Bukkake?
@ はっ Haahh
@ はっ Haahh
==========3 # ああっ Aahh
# また And again Together in sametime...
$ ズップ *SLURP*
$ ズッ *SLOSH*
==========5 # どっ。。。//あがってきました It's... It's getting hotter //And now it's a huge gang bang...!
@ はあ Haahh
@ はあ Haahh
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P16 ==========1 @ はふっ Hawwhh
@ はっ Haah
@ ビッ *TWITCH*
@ んっ Mmmh
@ ふん Hawwmm
@ んふう Mmmhh
@ ふん Hawwhh
@ ふうん Mmmhh
@ ふうん Mhmmm
@ んふうっ Mmmhhhh
$ ド (X 4) *THUMP* (X 4(
==========2 # かっかなり They're doing it pretty hard...
==========3 @ あんっ//はっ Anhh //Haahh
@ ああ Aaah
@ ああ Aaah
$ ぶるっ (X 2) *QUIVER* (X 2)
$ ドビュッ (X 2) *SQUIRT* (X 2)
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P17 ==========1 # やっ No
# だめ//だめっ Stop //Wait
# またっ//あっ Again //Ah
# ひっ//あっ Hii //Ah
==========2 # いっ//く I'm //cumming
# ひっ//あ Hii //Ah
# ああっ//ああっ Aaah //Aah
# あは//あはっ Ahn //Haahh
# あーっ//ああーっ A-h //Aa-h
$ ドッド *THUMP*
$ ドッ *THUMP*
$ ドッ *THUMP*
$ びく *TWITCH*
$ びくん *TWITCH*
$ びくっ *TWITHC*
==========3 # は。。。っ//は Haahh...h //Hahh
# な。。。 How... How many times have you...?
# おかしく//はっ It's making me crazy //Haahh
# はっ Haahh
# すごく。。。//どろどろ So... //Squishy
# して。。。 Feel like I'm...
# とけぞう。。。 Melting...
@ あ Ah
@ は Hahh
@ はあ
$ ぶる *QUIVER*
$ ぶるっ *QUIVER*
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P18 ==========1 # もっと?//あ。。。 More? More? //Ah...
# だすの? Gonna cum? Cum?
# おまんこに?//はい。。。 In my pussy? Inside? Alright...
@ はっ Haahh
$ ぞくっ *SHIVER*
==========2 # ね?//ひ Huh? //Hii
# ね?//ひっ Huh? //Hii
# いいの?//ひ Feel good? //Hii
# いいでしょ?//ひっ Do you feel good? //Hii
# どうぞっ//どうぞっ Please //Please
@ ひっ Hii
@ はっ Haahh
@ はっ Haahh
@ はっ Haahh
$ ビクン *TWITCH*
$ ビグッ *TWITCH*
$ ド (X4) *THUMP* (X 4)
$ ぶちゅ (X2) *SLURP* (X 2)
==========3 @ あはあ AAAAHH
@ はっ Haahh
@ あーっ Aa-hh
@ はっ Haahh
@ ひっ Hii
@ あっ Ahh
@ はっ Haahh
$ ズッ (X2) *SLOSH* (X 2)
$ ズプ *SLURP*
$ ギッ (X3) *CREAK* (X 3)
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P19 ==========1 # 。。。。。。えー。。。//間もなく .....Uh-... //It's almost morning... I think
# 少休止に。。。 I'm taking... short break.
@ は//ふ Haah //Haah
@ はっ Haahh
@ は Hahh
==========2 # 。。。本当に ...I know that you may not believe
# 。。。と思われる ...That we actually did it all-night long but
$ ツ。。。 *SLIP*
==========3 # 証拠//こんなに Here's the proof... //We have done this much)
# 女の子としては As a girl, it's pleasing and also embarassing...I don't know what to say
@ クイッ *GRIP*
@ ぶく *BLUB*
@ ぶくっ *BLUB*
==========5 # でも But it was great
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P20 ==========1 # とりあえず//自動車部 Give me your thoughts about this. (*Or 'SImple closing ment please')
$ シュル。。。 *SLIP*
==========2 # 。。。どうでしたか?//自動車部 ...How was it? //It was nighttime activity record of automobile club...
# どんな雰囲気か//少しでも I hope you catched //the atmosphere of our club through this video
==========3 # 興味のある方は Please come and join us if you're interested. ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー
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asdkg
Group: Gold Star Club
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And the infection. I skip the SFX outside of bubble. I'll do it if editor want to do the SFX.
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P23 ==========1 #どうして Why do you hide it from me!?
#部室 You were in the club room. I remember.
#知ってる 知ってるん You must know something //You know something, right!?
==========2 #って言われ Do we know something?
#。。。なあ ...No
==========3 #お? Oh?
#い。。。 その上 You...you've always abused her And now you even...
$ぐっ
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P24 ==========1 #きゃっ。。。 Kiya...
#おいおい いきなり Hey, //You treat me like a scum, huh?
#いたっ。。。 Ouch...
$どっ
==========2 #。。。あんまり ...I didn't treat her that bad.
#やっ。。。 No... Get off me... Wait...!
==========3 #さっ。。。散? You... You wrecked her just for fun...
#そっその上 And you even sell SUCH A THING...!
#かえしなさいっ Return it Return it!!
$ギッ
==========4 #それは It is you who made THAT THINGS, isn't it?
#回収する Don't you think you should think about it before you blame me?
==========5 #俺たちだけ Am I the only one who is responsible for that?
#敎育 Do I have to teach you about that?
#うっ。。。 Ooh...
#そう云うコト Come to think about it-...
$ぐっ
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P25 ==========1 #やっ。。。 いやっ No... //No
#あんた部長 You're the club president, right? Why are you trying to take that back?
#相当 You're pretty striving for that but tha't impossible.
#やあ。。。 Stop...
@ギュッ
@ぐっ
$ドッ (X3)
==========2 #てってっ。。。 手を Ge, get... //Get off me
#へー。。。 やっぱ あんな部に Ooh-... //You're not familiar with this. //Although you are the president of THAT CLUB
#かっ関係 T,That's nothing to do with this
==========3 #まあ見た通り No wonder. As I see it,
#興味はあるけど You're interested in it. But unfortunately, you don't have any partner... right?
@!!
$ビクッ
==========4 #やっ いやっ No //No...
#おおっと Oh, don't worry I don't feel feel sex appeal from you.
#そんな調子じゃ Actually no one does, I guess?
@ぐいっ *PUSH*
@ぐい *PUSH*
@ひっ Hii
@わっ Woa
$ドキッ
$ドキッ
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P26 ==========1 #あっ Hmm... may be you're jealous of her.
#。。。だから どう頑張っても ...And that's why you ignored THAT. //Because you can't be like her, whatever you do.
@カチン
==========2 #ばっ Don't... Don't fool me...!
#あの That club That club is
#あなた達が Not like what you think it is...!
#今は。。。今は Senpai... Senpai is just bearing it now but...
#だから。。。!! But...!
$ドキッ (X4)
==========3 #。。。で? その先輩は ...But what? //That Senpai is willing to sells her body to us
#あいつ等だって 。。。誰も And they're benefited from it. //...No one's loosing anything.
==========4 #だっ 。。。だから 。。。だから Bu //...But //...But
#何とか なんとか。。。! I have to... //Do something...!
$ギッ
==========5 #。。。ふ-ん ...Heh. (*It's actually snorting. Laughing at her)
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P27 ==========1 #。。。それじゃ 間に ...Alright Go to the toilet in the East building now. //I think you can't be in the time but Who knows.
#それとビデオは And I won't return that video since we never sold it.
==========2 #。。。。。。。
#頑張らなきゃ I have to do //whatever I can...
$チャッ
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P28 ==========1 $ダ (X4)
==========2 @?
==========3 $ヒュッ
==========4 $バキン
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P29 ==========1 #。。。怪我したく 今すぐに ...If you don't want to be hurt. //Get out
#出て行き RIght now...
#本気です 本気ですよ I'm serious. I'm serious.
@ハッ (X2) Haahh (X 2)
$ジャリ
$パキン
==========2 #。。。なんだ? ...What's this? Who is she?
#。。。やべ。。。 ...It's not good...
#部著だろ? She's club president. I guess we have to...
#仕方ね-。。。 Guess we have no option...
==========3
==========4 @ちぇ *TSK*
@ギュッ *GRAP*
@ギュッ *GRAP*
$ドキ (X2)
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P30 ==========1 #せっ せんぱい。。。 Se, Senpai...
#大丈。。。夫 Are you... alrig...
$ザッ
==========2 @ギッ *CREAK*
==========3 #は-。。。 Haa-...
#は-。。。 Haah-...
$トプ (X4)
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P31 ==========1 #いっ 今。。。 I'll //I'll
#ふきっ 拭きます Wa, Wash //Washi it right now... Oh... Ah...
@わ *MUDDLE*
@わっ *MUDDLE*
==========2 #。。。あ あ。。。 ...Ah //Ah...
#ごめ。。。 。。。なさい I'm... //...sorry
#少し。。。 気を。。。 I got... //for a moment
$ズルッ
==========3 #えっ!? Huh!?
#ど。。。 どうぞ。。。 P... //Please...
#はっ? なっ What? //What are you talking about!?
@は
@はっ
$ズイッ
==========4 #。。。お使い ...Please
#。。。ください ...Use me
@はっ Haah
@はっ Haah
$トロッ
==========5 #やっ。。。 No...
#だっ。。。。! Stop...!
#汚な。。。 It's (dirty)...
$ドッ
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P32 ==========1 #すいま。。。 What... you... mean
#。。。ないを 。。。して。。。 ...You're //...sorry...
$ぞゆっ
==========2 #で。。。 でば。。。 Th... Then...
#少し。。。 ますが。。。 It's little... //messed but...
#こちらを。。。 使えます。。。 use... //my... here... please...
@はっ (X2) Haah (X 2)
@ぐっ *GAPE*
$ピュッ
$ブピュッ
==========3 #すこし。。。 It's...
#。。。なら ...still
$ブピッ
==========4 #力が。。。 tight...
#入ります enough...
$キュッ
$プッ
==========5 #。。。ほら ...Look
$トプ (X2)
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P33 ==========1
#だめ。。。 ダメ Stop... //Please STOP...
==========2 #わたし。。。 わたしが I'll... //I'll
#。。。なんとか ...do something with this so
#。。。そんあコト 。。。しないで。。。 ...Stop ...saying such a things...
==========3 #あ-。。。 Ah-...
#あっ。。 はっ Ah... //Haah
#あはっ。。。 あ。。。 Ahaah... //Ah...
$ズプ
$ズップ
==========4 #はっ。。。 Haah...
#あっ。。。 Haah...
$ジュプ
$ズボ
$ジュプ
$ボ
==========5 #んっ ん。。。 Mmmh //Mmm...
#うん。。。 Unn...
$グキュッ
$ドップ
$ドッ
$ドップ
==========6 #っあ ああっ Ah //AAhh
$ビュプ
==========7 #は-。。。 Haa-...
#は-。。。 Haa-...
@はっ Haah
@はっ Haah
$ズルッ
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P34 ==========1 #うんっ。。。 Unnh...
#んんっ。。。 Mmmh...
#んっ Mmh
#ん Mm
#ん-っ。。。 Mm...h...
@はっ Haah
@はっ Haahh
#ふっ Fuu
$ドッ (X3)
$ビュル
$ビュルッ
==========2 #なっ。。。 What...
#何を。。。!? What are you...!?
$ぞっ
$ぞわわ
==========3 #す。。。 少しでも I... //I want to
#は。。。 入るように have... //it insime of me
@はふ
@はっ
==========4 #ひっ。。。 あっ Hii... //Ah
#あはっ。。。 Ahaah...
#あ-。。。っ A-...h
#あ-。。。っ A-...h
$ガクン
$ぶるっ
$ぶるるっ
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P35 ==========1 #。。。ど。。。 ...W...
$ザザザ
==========2 #。。。どうして ...Why
#。。。先輩。。。 ...are you...
$ザザザワ
==========3 #は-。。。 Haa-...
#は-。。。 Haa-...
#。。。笑うん 。。。どうして。。。 ...Smiling //Senpai...
@はっ
@はふ
$トプ (X3)
$トプッ (X2)
==========4 #わ。。。 。。。わたし.。。 It... //...It just...
#な なにをしても それで。。。 F //Feels good... no matter...what...
#ふわふわ 。。。ういてる they do //...to me... I...
#おちてる I can't... stop...
@はふ Hafuu
@はっ Haah
@ふ Fu
$ゾッ (X2)
$ゾ (X2)
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P36 ==========1 #やめて下 色情狂じゃ Please stop //That's just a nymphomaniac!
#違うでしょ You're not You're not!!
$バン”
==========2 #いやらしい You're making vulgar voice!
#何が What's so good?
#なにが What's so good about this thing!?
@あ Ah
@は Haa
@は Haa
@んは Mmhaa
$ドッ
$ビグ
$グイッ
==========3 #こんな こんなに You //You just
#ボロボロに Gave yourself to the men
#誰かも You don't even know (who they are)
#何度も Again and again
$ブキュッ
$プッ
$プッ
$グチュ
==========4 #こんな And you're messed like this
#こんな場所に You're gang banged in this dirty place...!
$ギッ
$ギギッ
==========5 #こっ こえを S //Stop that nasty moan!!
#そんあに Do you really feel that good!?
@あん あ Ahn //Ah
@ああ ん Aah //Mm
@あんあ Ahaa
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P37 ==========1 #いっ。。。いい It's... good It's cumming! It's cumming!!
#やらしいっ You dirty...!!
#こんなのが Do you really like it?
#気持ち It's disgusting!!
@あっ Ah
@ああん AAhh
@はっ Haah
@ハッ Haah
@ハッ Haah
@ぶちゅ *SLURP*
@ぷちゅ *SLURP*
$ドッ
$ズルッ
$ドッ
$ドッ
==========2 #あっ Ah
#おまんこ My pussy Ahaa It's good
#うるさいっ Bag it Bag it
#そんなに 勝手に If you like it that much //Have it your way Have it your way!
@はっ (X4) Haah (X 4)
$ぶるんっ
$ぷじゅっ
$ぷじゅ
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P38 ==========1 @ひっ あ Hii //Ah
@っあ はっ Ah //Haah
@あっ あっ Ah //Ah
$ビュル (X3)
==========2 #あ。。。 。。。あ。。。 Ah... //...Ah...
#ああ。。。っ AAh...h
@はふ Hahh
@ふう Fuu
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P39 ==========1 #。。。
#。。。きたない。。。 ...dirty...
$ズッ
==========2 #。。。ぞうですか 。。。そんなに ...Now I see ...You really like this.
==========3 #!
#それじゃあ 私も Then //Let me help you with this, too.
$グッ
==========4 #。。。?
@はっ Haah
@はっ Haah
==========5 #。。。先輩。。。。 こうゆうのが ...Senpai... //really like the things like this, huh?
$ツ。。。
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P40 ==========1 #先輩が 正気じゃ As Senpai //is not a sane person., #わたしだって I have to
#もともじゃ be little insane to play with you...
$ゾク
$ゾクッ
==========2 #んっ ん んっ。。。 Mmm //Mm //Mmmh...
#悪いのは。。。 It's all becasue of you... Senpai...
$ぶるっ
==========3 #目を 信じて You opened my eyes... //I trusted you... But you...
$ドズン (X2)
==========4 #ずっと憧れて ぞんあコト I admired you... //But you show me yourself pleased with these things...!!
$ドグン (X2)
==========5 #ひあっ!? なっ。。。 Hiya!? //What...
@ペロ *LICK*
$ぶるるっ ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P41 ==========1 #ああっ AAh
#んっ Mmh...
$ツル
==========2 #はっ Haah
#んっ Mmmh
$ッ (X3)
$ツプ
==========3 #な。。。 What...
#なんで。。。 ぞんな。。。 Are you... //Doing... it's
$ビグッ (X2)
==========4 #。。。なれ ...You'll //...feel good
#気持ち。。。 Once you...
#なるん。。。 get... familiar...
@はっt (X3)
@プクン
$ドッ(X4)
==========5 $キュッ
==========6 $ツ。。。
==========7 $チュル (X2)
==========8 #身体が。。。 Your body...
#そういう。。。 will learn... that...
@チュッ *LICK*
@くっ *GROPE*
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P42 ==========1 #ヘンタイ。。。 Pervert... (*Original word is 'Hentai')
#。。。今すぐ ...I'll
#よごして。。。 。。。あげます。。。 Mess you up... //...right now...
$ぶるっ (X4)
==========2 #。。。どうして 非道い ...Now I see ...the reasone //why everyone did cruel things
#。。。少し わかった。。。 ...to you //It's...
$ドッ (X3)
==========3 #その顔。。。 。。。です。。。 It's... ...Your face...
$ポッ
==========4 #あっ Ah
#あっ Ah
#滅茶苦茶に。。。 It makes me...
#よごしたく。。。 want to... ...mess you up...
$パシャ (X5)
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P43 ==========1 #これでも。。。 いいですか? Do you even... //like this?
#みんなに。。。 まるで。。。 Raped... by everyone... //And treated like... THIS PLACE
#。。。そのもの。。。 ...Just like...
@んっ
@うん
$パシャ (X4)
==========2 @プチ
$ブルルル
==========3 #。。。ココは。。。 そのための。。。 ...THIS is... //the place... made... ...for THIS...
#。。。気にせずに。。。 ...So don't be bothered...
@はっ (X2) Haah (X 2)
$パシャ (X2)
==========3 #。。。頭が 私。。。 ...I feel like I'm losing my mind... //Or... #。。。もう ...Already lost it, I guess
@ハッ (X2) Haah (X 2)
@ハ Haa
$パシャ (X3)
$パシャッ
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P44 ==========1 #も。。。 どうでも W... //Whatever...
#あ-っ。。。 A-h...
#あ-っ。。。 A-h...
@はっ Haah
@は Haa
$パシャッ (X2)
$パシャアッ
==========2 #っ!! Mmm!!
$ツプ
$パタ (X2)
==========3 #ん。。。 ふ。。。 Mmm... //Fu...
#かわ。。。 いい。。 It's... //cute...
@はっ Haah
@ふっ Fuuh
@はっ Haah
@ちゅ *CHU*
@くちゅ *SLOSH*
$ぶるる
$ジョッ。。。
==========4 #っあ 。。。はっ MmAAh... //Fuu...
#もっと。。。 だして。。。 Give me... //more...
@んふ Mmmh
@こくっ (X 2) *GULP* (X 2)
@んふ Mmmh
$ジュッ。。。
$ショッ
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P45 =========1 #ひっ。。。 Hii...
#んっ んん。。。 Mmmh //Mmm...
#あは。。。あ-。。。 AAhh... Ah-...
#あ。。。あ。。。 Ah... Ah...
@はふ Hahh
@はっ (X2) Haah (X 2)
@クチュ (X2) *SLURP* *SLURP* (X 2)
$ぶるっ (X3)
$パシャ
$パシャシャッ
$パシャッ
=========2 #ずっと。。。 ...I can see...
#。。。今まで。。。 ...that you...
#苦しんで。。。 have always been suffered...
@ふっ Fuuh
@はっ Haah
$ピクン
$ぶるっ (X2)
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P46 ==========1
==========2 #。。。私で ...I can help you...
#その苦しみを。。。 やわらげて。。。 soothing that pain... //...if you let me...
@はっ (X2) Haah (X 2)
==========3 #。。。ふたりで ...We can do it ...together...
ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー P45 ■今回は I used black too much for this time and it's gloomy. Even little sick... Sigh...
■えー。。。。。。、 Uh-..., I'm gathering my heart. I'm alright, I'm alright, I'm fine, I'm fine. So... according to the book I recently read, the imagination and intuition is the most importan facotr in field. ......in deed. in deed....dddd.....ddddd..... (Falling to the deepest bottom)
(*I can't read this sentece.)
(Returned) ...Hmm. I barely shook off the Blacky in my mind. Keep it up, me. I can be the detective heroin cat if I do my best. ...I wish.
■For that reason, Fujishima-Sensei, Director Gouda, Every fan of Goddess, especially of Hasegawa, I'm sorry sorry sorry sorry, from the bottom of my heart. I'm reflecting on myself deeper than the sea.
■Cast off every 2003 year's anguish, I'll WASH my HEART and keep it up.
「HeHehHe... Will it be that easy?」
Oh, Blacky is back. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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