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Works for me. I hate to sound biased, but I don't think there's any way to combine the two... But I think at this point I should probably duck out gracefully and call it 'done'. However, I do have a question for you. If you put up an editing bounty for this and my editor chooses to pick it up, would I be allowed to hand him my translation or would I have to work with whatever 'mixed' translation comes of this thread? Good to know for the possible future. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/cool.gif)

Hmm. While I'd like to released the copyedited, proofread, and probably partially merged translation under EHCOVE, I'd have no problem if anyone would want to release their own edited version, be it a typo, a translation variant or such. Just please mark that the translation originated here in credits.

Also, since barmar seems a bit inactive, if he doesn't come back, we have to wait a few days for his bounty acceptance to expire, then you can accept it and split the funds by sending half to him. Ok?

Hmm. While I'd like to released the copyedited, proofread, and probably partially merged translation under EHCOVE, I'd have no problem if anyone would want to release their own edited version, be it a typo, a translation variant or such. Just please mark that the translation originated here in credits.

Also, since barmar seems a bit inactive, if he doesn't come back, we have to wait a few days for his bounty acceptance to expire, then you can accept it and split the funds by sending half to him. Ok?

Absolutely. If you choose to go this route is there any way I can confirm via PM that the transfer has taken place? That is, since this is the first time I've transfered hath/credits to someone, is there a way I can actually prove that I've done it? I want to be sure all the bases are covered. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/cool.gif) Thanks for the reply about the edit, too!

Absolutely. If you choose to go this route is there any way I can confirm via PM that the transfer has taken place? That is, since this is the first time I've transfered hath/credits to someone, is there a way I can actually prove that I've done it? I want to be sure all the bases are covered. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/cool.gif) Thanks for the reply about the edit, too!

The easiest way would be for you to put up a new bounty for him; they are public and archived (unless cancelled/expired).

Ooh, I like that idea actually! Sounds good, I'll go with that if you so choose. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/biggrin.gif)

So...since it's been a week, shall I just claim the bounty and then put up a new one with half the reward for the original translator?

So...since it's been a week, shall I just claim the bounty and then put up a new one with half the reward for the original translator?

Yes, please. Seems he is inactive - not much we can do about this for now (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/sad.gif)

(edit: bounty accepted for Nomake Wan, please post the new bounty for half of it for bamar)

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Jan 22 2014, 14:57

Ok, here is the version I proofread, combining both scripts into what I think sounds the best.

Overall I went with Nomake Wan work, making it less formal (I recently read the first English translated book, and I don't recall Horo being THAT formal). I used barmar's translation, shadow_moon's proofs and my own judgement for when to deformalize the text.

Editing bounty is now posted at https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=9672

p4
Horo: I've a serious problem to discuss, wake quickly!
Lawrence: What is it...? There's still time before dawn...

Horo: Look at this--my breasts have grown so large...
Horo: What could be the cause?
SFX: boiiiiiiing (actually it's just 'sfx' for 'huge breasts')

Lawrence: What!?
SFX: SHOCK (GAHH!? works too)


p5
Horo: Look, they have even begun to produce milk.
SFX: *squirt*

Horo: Perhaps since you insist upon planting your semen in me every night
Horo: Could I be pregnant?

Horo: Anyhow,
Horo: I cannot allow them to swell further... Lawrence... Would you care to fondle them as you do usually?


p6
Lawrence: Well, if it is what you want...
Horo: I would not have it any other way.
SFX: fondle

Horo: Nn..
SFX (left): Squeeze
SFX (right): grasp

Lawrence: Ahh... This isn't bad at all.
SFX: kiss
Horo: How is it compared to before?
SFX (breasts): squeeze grasp
SFX (tail): wag wag wag


p7
Horo: Would it be alright to use the blanket that we bought yesterday?
SFX: squeeze grope fondle

Lawrence: Let's see... It's not a brand new one anyway, so it should be all right for today.

Horo: Nn...
SFX: flop (onto the blanket)
Horo: My body is different than usual, so please be gentle with it...


p8
SFX (ear): twitch
SFX (lawrence): suck slurp
SFX (hand-on-breast): squeeeeze
SFX (shoulder): flinch
Horo: Nnnn... It appears you are quite fond of larger breasts...

SFX (mouth): lick lick lick

SFX (mouth): suuuuuuuuuuuuck

Horo: Nn..Khhhhnn!
SFX: quiver

Horo: Haaah! Haaaah...!
SFX (head): twitch
SFX (hand): pinch!


p9
Horo: It would appear that your thing cannot wait any more.
Lawrence's Mouth: gasp (puhaah)
Lawrence: Hm?
Horo: With such a wonderful opportunity at hand, why not try somthing we couldn't do before?

Lawrence: What do you...?

Horo: I mean caressing that object of yours with my breasts.
SFX: tug tug

Horo: Hey!
Horo: Slow down a bit!
SFX (left): grip
SFX (right): squeeeeze


p10
Horo: That thing is quite more lively than usual!
SFX: strooooooooke

SFX (left): squish
SFX (right): squish
SFX (center): stroke

Horo: This makes me think it is worthwhile to have big breasts!
SFX (tail): flick flick (tiny little wags)
SFX (left/right): squish x2


p11
Horo: What an adorable thing it is~
SFX: prod squish

Horo: Fwaah...Fwaaaah...Mm
SFX: liiick

Horo: Nnngh
SFX: slurp suck
Horo: Nnhaah...chomp

Lawrence: Ow!!

Horo: Nnn...
SFX: bite
Horo: Nnf...Nn..pwah!

Horo: Oh my... My apologies, did that hurt you?


p12
Horo: Nnmmm...Hhh...Nnn
SFX (mouth): slurp suck
SFX (breast): stroke

Lawrence: Uwaaah! I'm cummingg!

Horo: Nnnnn!!
SFX: squiiirt

SFX (Horo's mouth): Gasp (pwaaah)

Horo: Nn..nn...Nnngh...nn
SFX (mouth): spurt spurt

SFX (drool): drooool
Horo: Pwaaaah...haaah


p13
SFX: lick

Lawrence: Horo...
SFX: gulp

Horo: Nnn!
SFX: swallow/gulp

Horo: Well well, you reached your limit much faster than usual...
SFX (tail): wag wag
Horo: Could it be that you are...a fan of large breasts?
SFX: lick

p14
Horo: Next it is your turn to tend to my needs.
Horo: Come now... insert it into my body.
SFX (upper bubble): open/widen
SFX (hand): tug

Horo: Haaah...!
SFX: twitch

SFX: poke

SFX: puuuuush

Horo: Nn...Nnnnn!!
SFX: jolt


p15
Horo: Haah...Ah...Ngh..nn!
SFX (x3): twitching/quivering/shaking
Horo: Your...rod... is...so bi..g...today...!
Lawrence: Inside you is more amazing than usual too..!

Horo: Say it not...! I am... Haah... Like this... Nnn...!
SFX (x2): flail shake

SFX: squeeeze

Lawrence: You're a lot tighter than usual too.


p16
Horo: So sudden...! Too...intense...for me...!
SFX (arms x2): slump
Horo: Nnhaah...! Aaahhhhh!!
SFX (thighs): slap slap
SFX (middle): slurch

Horo: Hh...! Khhhhhnn!!
SFX: twitching

SFX (breasts x2): grasp stroke


p17
SFX (head): blink
Horo: Haaaah...Nngah.. You would suck on my nipple?
Horo: Haan, Haah...
SFX (mouth): lick suck

SFX (sex x4): slapping/liquidy noises

Horo: Nnaah!
Horo: Haaah...! Sto...nnnn!!
SFX (breast): sluuuuuuuuuuuuurp
SFX (hips x3): slapping/liquidy noises


p18
Horo: Naah... What are...You doing...Haah...haah...
SFX (arm): pull

Horo: Are you telling me to move by myself?
Lawrence: Exactly right.

SFX (tail): wag wag
Horo: Nnnn!
SFX (mouth): kiss slurp


p19
Horo: Is this about what...you had in mind?
SFX (breast): jiggle
Horo: Nnhaaah!
SFX (sex): slurch slurch slap

SFX (face): flinch
Horo: Ahh...nnn! This is quite the...difficult...task...!
Horo: Ahn!
SFX (sex): slurch grind


p20
SFX (hips): slapping/slurching
SFX (ear/wrist): quivering x2
Horo: Nhaah!
Horo: Haah...! Ann...ahh..haaahnn!

SFX (sex): slapping/grinding

SFX (hips): slapping noises
SFX (back/arm/hair): quaking/losing strength
Horo: Fwaaah...Ahhhh...!


p21
SFX: puuuuuuuuull

Horo: Fwaah...ahh!
SFX: blink

SFX: SLURCH

SFX: TWITCH
Horo: Hggggghnnn!!

Horo: Haaah...! Lawrence...
SFX (text bubbles x2): Haah
Horo: Face to face...Nnn...At the end...I want us to...be face to...face!
SFX (hips): slap slap slap

Lawrence: Sure thing... Horo...


p22
SFX: strooke
Horo: Haaah!...After all...This...position is...my..haah...favorite...!
SFX (arm/waist): twiching/shaking
SFX (sex): slapping/squishing/squelching

Horo: Hh...khhhn...nnnn!!
SFX (head/shoulder): twitching


p23
Lawrence: Horo...! I'm gonna cum!
SFX (fingers): grip
SFX (legs): squeeze
Horo: Let it out...Lawrence-dono!

SFX (large): FLINCH
Horo: Hyaah...! Ahhhhh...!

Horo: Fwaaaah...Aaaahhnnnnn!
SFX (hair/arm/leg): fwump/slump/loosen/limpen
SFX (sex): SPLOOSH (heh, squirt/spurt/etc)


p24
Horo: Funyaa...Haah...
Horo: As always you are so...haah...intense...
SFX (speech bubbles x3): Haah
SFX (arms): quivering
Lawrence: Eh...? Horo... Your breasts are back to normal, aren't they?

Horo: Hm? Oh, this?
Horo: I used the semen I consumed from you to trasform myself back.

Lawrence: So...The part about you being pregnant was a lie then...
Horo: In essence, yes. It was tiresome to keep my breasts enlarged but you enjoyed them, did you not?


p25
Horo: More importantly, I believe it would be in your best interest to deal with this filthy blanket somehow.
Lawrence: AHH!! CRAP!! I wonder if I can even clean it properly now...

Atogaki (Afterward):
Hello, this is YTSTanaka.
Since the work this time around was for "Spice and Wolf," of course it's a Horo book.
Well, Horo with big boobs anyway ((IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/happy.gif); Please don't get all angry with things like 'This isn't Horo at all!' ('?';)
Somehow, this sort of story just got stuck in my head, so...orz

As you read, Horo has a quite 'unique' manner of speech, so it worried me to no end whether or not I was able to express it properly in this manga. ((IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/happy.gif);;
[PROOFREADER NOTE: so both translators that worked on it had problems with her style/accent, so I guess he succeeded? :>)
Also, I got kinda burnt out around the last two pages, so they ended up kinda half-assed. orz


About the cover picture, the background behind Horo is actually sourced from a photo I took.
I should have had at least one photograph of a barley field laying around, but since I couldn't find it I ended up using one of a wheat field instead of barley (lol).
I messed with the image so much that you can't tell it's wheat, so please just think of it as barley ((IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/happy.gif);

Now then, about my next book...
It's undecided.
I haven't drawn an Onegai Teacher or Onegai Twins book this year, so I've been thinking about how I want to draw one, but I'm not sure what it'd be about...

Well then, let us meet again in my next work~

August 2008

This post has been edited by Red_Piotrus: Jan 21 2014, 16:11

Created a bounty for Barmar and PM'd him about it. Here's hoping he gets active to collect on it. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

I'll link it here: https://e-hentai.org/bounty.php?bid=9684

First page test image.



This post has been edited by Ryukoreiakuma: Jan 26 2014, 15:53

First page test image.

Looks pretty good to me. Perhaps the font could be a little bit bigger, when bubble allows it? Nice job with SFX/redrawing.

yea, i really should have resized those bottom 2 bubbles, i blame lack of sleep lol. hopefully this version is better.

Welp, I think I'll go ahead and give up on claiming the edit bounty, redrawing is out of my team's purview. Great job with that page, best of luck with the rest of the book! (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/biggrin.gif)

Wait, were you wanting to edit this one? 0.o if i took it from under you i really didn't mean to D: and thanks for the compliment, it was technically my first ever edit (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/tongue.gif)

Wait, were you wanting to edit this one? 0.o if i took it from under you i really didn't mean to D: and thanks for the compliment, it was technically my first ever edit (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/tongue.gif)

No, no! I never announced my taking on the project. I have other projects that were more important, not to mention an edit already in progress, so I was just in the 'considering' stage. It's all yours, take it! My only critique of the sample page you provided is that the SFX bits don't seem to be antialiased; the edges are jaggy and clash with the otherwise smooth background image. Should be a simple fix compared to redrawing, though!

I would like to note, since you're doing the edit, that I made a typo in the afterword. The author is 'YTSTakana', not 'YTSTanaka'. My fingers automatically type 'Tanaka' because it's a common name, but that's wrong, so just FYI. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/tongue.gif)

No, no! I never announced my taking on the project. I have other projects that were more important, not to mention an edit already in progress, so I was just in the 'considering' stage. It's all yours, take it! My only critique of the sample page you provided is that the SFX bits don't seem to be antialiased; the edges are jaggy and clash with the otherwise smooth background image. Should be a simple fix compared to redrawing, though!

I would like to note, since you're doing the edit, that I made a typo in the afterword. The author is 'YTSTakana', not 'YTSTanaka'. My fingers automatically type 'Tanaka' because it's a common name, but that's wrong, so just FYI. (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/tongue.gif)

Yea i started doing that with the later pages when i noticed that there's a soft white border to all the sfx, so i'm going to go back and do some fixing and finishing touches when i finish the last few pages. But i'm glad you said something cause i may have forgotten the first page (IMG:[invalid] style_emoticons/default/tongue.gif)

Just one question to Ryukoreiakuma. In the sample you posted, it seems like you didn't turn the anti-aliasing on for the SFX, did you? They seem pretty rough.

Just one question to Ryukoreiakuma. In the sample you posted, it seems like you didn't turn the anti-aliasing on for the SFX, did you? They seem pretty rough.

Read the post right above yours from him.

Ok I think I fixed the sharpness problem, but i do have a question. Since I may be doing this wrong, but when you say antialias your not talking about the font are you?? cause to make that i had to edit plain black text to have the color and black outline and such.

We are indeed talking about the font. The edges of the font are jagged, which makes us think you have antialiasing disabled on that font. Fonts should never be jagged like that.